Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 어휘와 문법 오류가 있습니다. 먼저 음식 이름을 정확히 말하고(topic sentence), 그 이유를 한두 문장으로 명확히 설명하세요. 예를 들어 'chilly' 대신 'spicy'를 사용하고 'attractive' 대신 'appealing'이나 'flavorful'를 쓰세요. 또한 소스와 맛을 설명할 때 구체적인 단어와 연결어(For example, because, and)로 문장을 연결하세요. 문장 수는 2~4문장으로 제한하세요.

例: My favourite food is the Korean dish tteokbokki. I love it because it has a savory, slightly sweet red sauce and a pleasantly spicy kick. For example, I often enjoy it with fish cakes and green onions, which make the texture more interesting.

提案: 문장이 미완성이고 시제 오류가 있습니다. 과거를 말할 때는 과거형 'liked'를 사용하세요. 질문에 바로 답한 뒤 구체적인 예시와 이유를 간단히 덧붙이세요. 문장을 완성하고 연결어(for example, because)를 사용하여 이유를 설명하세요.

例: When I was young, I liked very sweet foods. For example, I often ate candy and sweet pastries because I loved the sugary taste and they felt like a treat after school.

提案: 응답이 모호하고 문법과 어휘 선택에 문제가 있습니다. 질문에는 계절(시기)에 따른 식습관 변화를 묻고 있으므로 계절 또는 기분과 관련된 구체적인 예를 제시하세요. 'chilli' 대신 'spicy'를 쓰고 'my feeling' 같은 표현 대신 'depending on my mood'를 사용하세요. 연결어(However, Also, In summer)로 논리가 흐르도록 하세요.

例: Yes, I do. In winter I prefer hot, spicy dishes like stews to keep warm, but in summer I usually choose lighter, sweeter foods such as fruit and cold desserts because they are refreshing.

提案: 문법(시제·조동사) 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 'hate'는 과거형 'hated'를 쓰고 'when I became an adult' 같은 자연스러운 표현으로 바꾸세요. 감정 표현은 'I enjoy noodles now'처럼 간단히 표현하고 구체적 이유(맛, 편리함, 문화적 이유)를 덧붙이세요.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. When I was young I hated noodles, but as an adult I enjoy them because they are comforting and come in many different flavours, such as spicy ramen or light soy-based broths.

× My favorite food is Korean traditional food Tak Bukit.

✓ My favorite food is the Korean traditional dish Tak Bukit.

'Korean traditional food' is awkward; use 'the Korean traditional dish' or 'Korean traditional cuisine' for natural phrasing. Also use the definite article 'the' before a specific dish name. 'Food' as a countable noun here should be 'dish'. Suggestion: say 'the Korean traditional dish Tak Bukit' or 'a Korean traditional dish called Tak Bukit.'

× It is very attractive because it has red sauce and is very chilly, so I like this very much.

✓ It is very appealing because it has a red sauce and is very spicy, so I like it very much.

'Attractive' is usually used for people or things visually appealing; 'appealing' fits food. 'Chilly' means cold; the intended word is 'chili' or better 'spicy'. Use 'a red sauce' for non-specific sauce and 'it' to refer to the dish. Also 'this' should be 'it' when referring back to the dish. Suggestion: replace 'attractive' with 'appealing' and 'chilly' with 'spicy', and use 'it' instead of 'this.'

× When I was young, I like a very, very sweet food because I.

✓ When I was young, I liked very, very sweet foods because I loved them.

The time clause 'When I was young' sets the past, so the verb should be past tense 'liked' not present 'like'. The sentence was also incomplete; add an object and a reason. Use plural 'foods' or 'sweets' for general preference and complete the clause 'because I loved them.' Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout the sentence and complete the idea.

× Sometimes I eat very chilli food and sometimes my feeling, but this day I eat more sweet food.

✓ Sometimes I eat very spicy food and sometimes I follow my cravings, but these days I eat sweeter food.

'Chilli' should be 'spicy' to describe food. 'Sometimes my feeling' is ungrammatical; 'I follow my cravings' or 'depending on how I feel' conveys the idea. 'This day' should be 'these days' for a general current habit, and use comparative 'sweeter' rather than 'more sweet.' Suggestion: use 'spicy', 'follow my cravings' or 'depending on my mood', and 'these days' with 'sweeter.'

× Yes, when I was young I was very hate noodle, but when I was adult I feel very good feelings from noodles.

✓ Yes, when I was young I really hated noodles, but when I became an adult I began to enjoy them.

'Was very hate' is incorrect: 'hate' needs past tense 'hated' and does not take 'very' before it; use 'really hated.' 'Noodle' should be plural 'noodles.' 'When I was adult' needs 'an' or 'become an adult'; better 'when I became an adult.' 'I feel very good feelings from noodles' is awkward; use 'I began to enjoy them' or 'they make me feel good.' Maintain past tense change sequence. Suggestion: use 'hated', 'noodles', 'when I became an adult', and 'began to enjoy them.'