Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Also correct minor grammar (e.g., "a pizza" → "pizza" or "a pizza" with consistent article use) and reduce pauses.

例: I love pizza because it’s versatile and comforting. For example, I usually choose a thin-crust pizza topped with extra cheese and sliced capsicum; sometimes I add mushrooms or olives depending on my mood.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure: begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, use linking words to organize details, and avoid repetition. Be specific about why you liked it and include one brief example or memory.

例: As a child, I loved eating Maggi noodles because they were quick and tasty. After school I often bought a packet and asked my mother to cook it for me; I would then eat it while watching cartoons.

提案: Make your answer more natural and cohesive: use correct articles and verb forms, add linking words to contrast seasons, and provide a specific example of a winter vegetable dish to show variety and clarity.

例: Yes, I do. In summer I prefer fresh fruits like watermelon because they’re refreshing, whereas in winter I eat more leafy green vegetables such as spinach and enjoy them in soups or stir-fries to stay warm.

提案: Use correct tense and clearer phrasing: state the main idea in present perfect or simple present, then give one or two concise reasons or an example of when you still eat it. Remove redundant words and fix grammar (e.g., "when I was child" → "when I was a child").

例: No, it hasn’t changed — I still enjoy Maggi. For instance, even now when I’m busy or feeling nostalgic I often make a quick bowl for lunch because it reminds me of childhood.

× My favorite food is a pizza.

✓ My favorite food is pizza.

'A pizza' is unnecessary because 'pizza' is a noncount/uncountable noun when talking about food in general. Remove the article to correctly express a general preference. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 22)

× I love eating pizza and according to my mood, I can uh, customize the pizza pizza with the different varieties of toppings and like uh, such As for me, cheese and capsicums and loaded with cheese.

✓ I love eating pizza and, depending on my mood, I can customize it with different varieties of toppings, such as cheese and capsicum, and make it loaded with cheese.

Run-on and repetition ('pizza pizza'), incorrect capitalization ('As'), unnecessary filler words, and awkward phrasing. Use 'depending on my mood' for clarity, replace repeated noun with pronoun 'it', use 'such as' for examples, and use consistent nouns (capsicum) and verb forms ('make it loaded'). (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26)

× When I was child I love to eat Maggie.

✓ When I was a child, I loved to eat Maggi.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' and tense mismatch: the time marker 'When I was a child' requires past tense 'loved' rather than present 'love'. Also correct brand spelling to 'Maggi'. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26)

× At that time there is a craze of a Maggi and I very curious about Maggi.

✓ At that time there was a craze for Maggi and I was very curious about it.

'There is' should be past 'there was' to match past-time context. Use 'craze for' rather than 'craze of', and include 'was' for 'I was very curious'. Replace repeated noun with pronoun 'it'. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 3)

× I used to buy a Maggi packet and come home after my school and may always insist my mom to make it make it for me and then I eat it by watching TV.

✓ I used to buy a Maggi packet, come home from school, and always insist that my mom make it for me; then I would eat it while watching TV.

Issues: incorrect preposition 'after my school' (use 'from school'), modal/tense misuse ('may always' wrong), repetition 'make it make it', and tense consistency: past habitual 'used to' should pair with 'would' for the eating action. Also add 'that' after 'insist' and use 'while' for simultaneous action. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26)

× Yes, I eat different food at different times of a year.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year.

'Food' should be plural 'foods' when referring to different kinds. Use 'the year' (definite article) in the phrase 'times of the year'. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 22)

× In a summers I love to eat fresh and refreshing watermelon and in winters I love those green vegetables.

✓ In summer I love to eat fresh, refreshing watermelon, and in winter I prefer green vegetables.

Do not use 'a' with 'summers'/'winters'; use singular 'summer'/'winter' to express seasonal preferences. Improve adjective order and comma usage; 'prefer' is more natural for seasonal liking. Remove 'those' unless specifying particular vegetables. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 22)

× I love to eat veggies and making healthy.

✓ I love to eat vegetables and be healthy.

Parallel structure error: 'love to eat' (infinitive) should be paralleled with 'be' or change both to gerunds. 'Making healthy' is ungrammatical here; use 'be healthy' or 'eat healthily' depending on intended meaning. Also use 'vegetables' instead of 'veggies' in formal speech. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 8}

× No, my favorite food doesn't change.

✓ No, my favorite food hasn't changed.

Talking about change since childhood requires present perfect 'hasn't changed' to link past to present, rather than simple present 'doesn't change'. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 6)

× I love to enjoy having a Maggi in my lunch when I was child and as I grown up.

✓ I loved having Maggi for lunch when I was a child and as I grew up.

Tense and article errors: use past tense 'loved' and 'was a child', and 'as I grew up' for past development. 'Having a Maggi in my lunch' is awkward; use 'having Maggi for lunch'. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26)

× Even in my busy days when I want to unwind and feel nostalgic, I made me cook Maggie and love to eat with.

✓ Even on busy days when I want to unwind and feel nostalgic, I make Maggi and love to eat it.

Use 'on busy days' not 'in my busy days'; maintain present tense 'want' with habitual present 'I make Maggi'. Remove reflexive 'made me cook' which is incorrect; use active 'I make'. Add object 'it' after 'eat'. (Grammar Problem Type ID: 26)