Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, reduce fillers, and give specific details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct plural and article forms (e.g., "dumplings are a traditional Chinese food" or "a dumpling is").

例: I love dumplings. They are a traditional Chinese food made of thin dough wrappers filled with meat or vegetables, and usually served boiled or pan-fried. Because my family makes them for celebrations, eating dumplings always reminds me of home.

提案: Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition and fillers. Give a short clear topic sentence, then one specific reason or memory connected to the food, linked with a connector like "because" or "so".

例: When I was young I loved candy. I liked it because it was sweet and colorful, and I remember receiving sweets as a reward after exams, which made me very happy.

提案: Answer directly and use consistent tense; avoid repeating modal verbs. Provide clear examples and link them with words like "for example" or "in addition." Be specific about which vegetables or fruits and how you prepare or enjoy them.

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in spring I enjoy fresh asparagus and leafy greens, while in summer I eat ripe peaches and watermelons. Eating seasonal produce feels fresher and healthier to me.

提案: Use clear past and present contrasts with linking phrases like "when I was a child" and "now." Avoid fillers; state specific foods and reasons for the change (health, preference, lifestyle). Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. When I was a child I loved sweets and salty snacks because they tasted exciting, but now I prefer fresh vegetables and grilled lean meat because I care more about health and flavour.

× My favorite food is dumpling.

✓ My favorite food is dumplings.

The noun 'dumpling' should be plural because it refers to a food category rather than a single item. Use the plural form 'dumplings' when speaking generally about a type of food. Suggestion: Use plural for countable nouns when talking about them in general (e.g., 'I like dumplings').

× I think uh dumplings is a dumplings uh, tradition.

✓ I think dumplings are a traditional food.

Plural subject 'dumplings' requires plural verb 'are' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'a dumplings tradition' mixes singular article with plural noun; rephrase to 'a traditional food' or 'a tradition'. Suggestion: Ensure verb agrees with subject number and avoid mixing singular articles with plural nouns.

× Uh dumpling is a traditional Chinese food, umm, with sing, uh, with sing uh, sing a flower or cut flower, uh uh cover.

✓ Dumplings are a traditional Chinese food, usually wrapped with a thin dough wrapper or shaped like a flower.

Use plural 'dumplings' and plural verb 'are' for general statements. Original sentence also misuses articles and unclear vocabulary; replace 'a' with 'thin dough wrapper' for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct plural forms and clear nouns; avoid unnecessary articles before uncountable or plural concepts.

× And various toppings.

✓ They can have various fillings and toppings.

Fragment 'And various toppings.' lacks a verb. Turn into a complete sentence by adding subject and verb and using the more common term 'fillings' for dumplings. Suggestion: Make sure each sentence has a subject and verb; avoid sentence fragments.

× Every time I eat dumplings it gives me a sense of home.

✓ Every time I eat dumplings, they give me a sense of home.

Pronoun 'it' does not agree with plural 'dumplings'; use 'they'. Also include a comma after the adverbial phrase. Suggestion: Match pronoun number to its antecedent.

× When I was young, my favorite food is candy.

✓ When I was young, my favorite food was candy.

The time phrase 'When I was young' sets the context in the past, so the verb describing that state should be in the past tense ('was'). Suggestion: Keep tense consistent with time expressions.

× I think candy is is is also the food most children like because they are sweet and and every time it eating them gives gives me a sense of. Happiness.

✓ I think candy is also the food most children like because it is sweet, and every time I eat it, it gives me a sense of happiness.

Multiple problems: reduce repeated words. 'Candy' as an uncountable noun often takes singular verb 'is' and singular pronoun 'it'. Use 'is sweet' not 'are sweet' for uncountable candy in general. 'Every time I eat it' is correct phrasal structure and avoids incorrect 'eating them'. Suggestion: Remove repetitions, choose singular or plural consistent with countability, and use correct verb forms for actions.

× Yes, I will. I would eat different food at different types of a year.

✓ Yes, I do. I eat different foods at different times of the year.

Using 'will' and 'would' is incorrect here; the question asks about a habitual action so present simple ('do/eat') is appropriate. 'Different types of a year' is incorrect phrase; use 'different times of the year'. Also use plural 'foods'. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and correct time expressions.

× For example in spring. In springtime there are some fresh vegetables.

✓ For example, in springtime there are fresh vegetables.

Combine fragments and add comma after 'For example'. 'There are some fresh vegetables' is acceptable but combining gives clarity. Avoid sentence fragments. Suggestion: Use commas after introductory phrases and combine fragments into full sentences.

× And all in summer, uh, more fruits are, uh, mature and you can, and I will, I would eat those fruit and.

✓ And in summer, more fruits ripen, and I eat those fruits.

Use 'ripen' rather than 'mature' for fruit. 'Fruits' should be plural and verbs should be consistent present simple for habitual actions. Remove unnecessary modals 'will/would'. Suggestion: Use correct verbs for natural processes and consistent pronouns/number.

× Eating according to the season makes me happy and.

✓ Eating according to the season makes me happy.

Sentence ends with an unnecessary 'and' creating a fragment. Remove trailing conjunction to complete the sentence. Suggestion: Avoid leaving conjunctions at the end; ensure sentences finish their thought.

× Yes, my favorite food uh keeps changing all the time umm when I was a child, I prefer uh, uh, some uh prefer sweet uh sweets, umm uh, or salty food because they taste uh they taste good and delicious, but when I grow up, when I'm growing up, but.

✓ Yes, my favorite food kept changing. When I was a child, I preferred sweet or salty foods because they tasted good, but as I grew up, my tastes changed.

Maintain past tense for past habits: 'when I was a child' requires past tense 'preferred' and 'tasted'. Avoid mixing present progressive 'keeps changing' with past context; use 'kept changing' or reframe to present if talking about ongoing change. Remove filler words and repeated conjunctions. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent with the time frame and eliminate repetitive fillers.

× When I grow up, the favorite food has my favorite food now is some is some fresh vegetables, some meat just brewing.

✓ Now that I am grown, my favorite foods are some fresh vegetables and some meat dishes.

The original mixes tenses and fragments. Use 'Now that I am grown' or 'As an adult' and plural 'foods' with plural verb 'are'. 'Just brewing' is unclear; replace with 'meat dishes' or specific preparation. Suggestion: Use clear time framing for present state and avoid unclear phrases like 'just brewing'.