Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence naming one or two favourite foods, then give one specific reason for each using linking words. Avoid minor grammar errors (capitalization of 'Turkey' is fine for the bird but keep consistency) and redundant phrases like 'very'.

例: My favourite foods are fried rice and turkey. I like fried rice because it combines rice with many colorful vegetables, which makes it nutritious, and I enjoy turkey because it’s a lean, juicy source of protein that tastes great roasted.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar errors, and add a brief specific detail or reason. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to connect ideas and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: When I was young I was a picky eater, so I didn’t try many foods. However, I often had tea with biscuits as a snack because they were quick and comforting.

提案: Good specific detail and clear reason. Improve fluency by combining sentences with linking phrases and correcting small phrasing issues (e.g., 'as it is right now' unnecessary). Use natural collocations like 'help with colds' and 'nasal congestion' (singular).

例: Yes. In the rainy season I usually eat pepper soup with white rice or yam because it helps relieve colds and nasal congestion.

提案: Provide a concise topic sentence stating change, then give 2–3 specific examples with linking words. Fix grammar (plural/singular agreement, capitalization) and avoid listing too many items without structure.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed a lot. I used to be a picky eater who only liked tea and snacks, but now I enjoy dishes like creamy pasta, rice with stew, and turkey pepper soup.

× My favorite food is fried rice and Turkey.

✓ My favorite foods are fried rice and turkey.

The student lists two items, so the plural noun 'foods' (or keep 'food' and use singular item) and plural verb agreement are needed. Also 'Turkey' here is a food (turkey meat), not the country, so it should be lowercase 'turkey'. Suggestion: use 'My favorite foods are...' when naming multiple favorites.

× I love fried rice because it's very colorful and it has so many veggies, which is very essential to the health.

✓ I love fried rice because it's very colorful and has many vegetables, which are very important for health.

'Veggies' is informal; 'vegetables' is more appropriate. 'So many' is acceptable but 'many' is cleaner. The relative clause refers to 'vegetables' (plural), so use plural verb 'are'. 'Very essential to the health' is unidiomatic; 'important for health' is clearer. Suggestion: match number and use natural collocations ('important for health').

× And I love Turkey because it's a very nice source of protein and it's really juicy and delicious.

✓ And I love turkey because it's a great source of protein and it's really juicy and delicious.

Minor: 'Turkey' should be lowercase 'turkey' when referring to the food. 'Very nice source' is grammatical but 'great source' sounds more natural. No major subject-verb error here; corrected for style and capitalization.

× I didn't eat a lot of food when I was growing up because I was a very picky eater, but tea and biscuit was one of my go to options when I was a kid.

✓ I didn't eat a lot of food when I was growing up because I was a very picky eater, but tea and biscuits were one of my go-to options when I was a kid.

'Tea and biscuit' are two items, so plural 'biscuits' and plural verb 'were' must agree. 'Go to' as an adjective should be hyphenated 'go-to'. Maintain past tense consistently. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement with compound subjects.

× During rainy season as it is right now, I enjoy a bowl of pepper soup and white rice or yam.

✓ During the rainy season, as it is now, I enjoy a bowl of pepper soup with white rice or yam.

Add definite article 'the' before 'rainy season'. Use comma for clarity, and 'pepper soup with white rice or yam' is a more natural preposition choice than 'and' when describing accompaniment. Suggestion: include articles for seasons when referring to a specific season.

× This helps with the cold, fever and any nasal congestions that the weather might make me have.

✓ This helps with colds, fevers, and any nasal congestion that the weather might cause.

Use plural 'colds' and 'fevers' for general ailments. 'Nasal congestions' is uncountable; use 'nasal congestion'. 'Make me have' is awkward; use 'cause'. Suggestion: prefer concise verb choices and correct countable/uncountable forms.

× Yes, as a child I was a very picky eater that didn't like to eat a lot of food except tea and snacks.

✓ Yes. As a child, I was a very picky eater who didn't like to eat much, except for tea and snacks.

Use 'who' for people rather than 'that'. 'Ate a lot of food' is wordy; 'eat much' is more natural in negative contexts. Add commas for clarity and 'except for' before items. Suggestion: use relative pronoun 'who' with people and streamline phrases.

× But growing up I've enjoyed quite a lot of dishes.

✓ But as I grew up, I enjoyed quite a lot of dishes.

Tense consistency: question asked about change since childhood; past tense 'as I grew up, I enjoyed' fits better than present perfect 'I've enjoyed'. Also add 'as' for the time phrase. Suggestion: match tense to the time reference.

× One of my favorite dish are creamy pasta, white rice and Stew and also Turkey pepper soup.

✓ Some of my favorite dishes are creamy pasta, white rice with stew, and turkey pepper soup.

'One of my favorite dish are' is incorrect: if listing multiple items, use 'Some of my favorite dishes are' or keep 'One of my favorite dishes is' and list a single dish. Also capitalize 'Stew' and 'Turkey' should be lowercase. 'White rice with stew' clarifies pairing. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches verb and choose correct expression ('one of' vs 'some of').