Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan pelafalan kata kunci. Jawab langsung dengan satu kalimat topik jelas (mis. nama makanan), lalu tambahkan 1–2 kalimat pendukung yang teratur menggunakan kata penghubung (mis. "and", "because", "so"). Hindari pengulangan dan filler seperti "uh". Gunakan kosakata yang tepat (contoh: "pumpkin" bukan "pumping", "tofu" bukan "Tahoe").

例: My favourite food is a local pumpkin and vegetable stew. I like it because it contains spinach, corn and tofu, which make it nutritious, and I often eat it with rice for a complete meal.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan organisasi ide: mulai dengan topik kalimat yang jelas tentang makanan masa kecil, lalu beri alasan dan contoh singkat. Gunakan tense yang konsisten (past simple untuk masa lalu) dan hilangkan kata-kata yang tidak perlu. Jelaskan satu atau dua detail spesifik tentang rasa atau ingatan.

例: When I was a child, I loved the homemade pumpkin dishes my mother cooked. She often made a sweet and savory pumpkin stew, and I remember enjoying its creamy texture and comforting flavour.

提案: Jawab langsung lalu beri alasan singkat dengan penghubung. Perbaiki tata bahasa dan hilangkan filler. Katakan kapan atau mengapa menu tetap sama (mis. praktis, cepat dibuat). Tambahkan satu detail spesifik tentang bahan atau kebiasaan musiman jika relevan.

例: No, I usually eat the same dishes throughout the year because they are simple and quick to prepare. If I'm busy, I stick to the pumpkin and vegetable stew my mother makes since it's healthy and easy to cook.

提案: Buat jawaban singkat dan jelas: mulai dengan 'No' atau 'Yes' lalu jelaskan alasan menggunakan tense yang tepat. Berikan satu alasan spesifik mengapa makanan tetap favorit (rasa, kenangan). Hindari struktur yang kacau dan kata berulang.

例: No, it hasn't changed; I still love the pumpkin vegetable stew I ate as a child. It reminds me of happy family meals and its flavour is comforting, so I still choose it today.

× My for for food is pumping in local vegetables.

✓ My favorite food is pumpkin with local vegetables.

The student used 'pumping' (incorrect word) and unclear pluralization. 'Pumpkin' is singular and should be the noun; 'local vegetables' is correct plural. Also 'for for' is repetition; replace with 'favorite'. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and avoid repeated words.

× It's really nice to eat.

✓ It is really nice to eat.

Contraction 'It's' is acceptable but 'It is' is clearer in speaking tests. No major grammatical error; keep adverb placement before adjective 'really nice'. Suggestion: maintain adverb before adjective for emphasis.

× It has ingredients, spinach, spice, some spicy and sometimes to mix uh, corn and if I try it there and sometimes mix with the rice and Tahoe temp.

✓ It has ingredients like spinach, spices, and sometimes corn; I sometimes mix it with rice and tofu.

Original has misplaced infinitive 'to mix', incorrect words 'some spicy', 'Tahoe temp' (meant 'tofu'). List items should be introduced with 'like' or 'such as'. Use plural 'spices'. Avoid filler 'uh'. Suggestion: list ingredients clearly and use correct food vocabulary.

× When is child is homemade because my mother said always to cook in my house.

✓ When I was a child, food was homemade because my mother always cooked at home.

Multiple errors: 'When is child' should be 'When I was a child' (past tense). 'is homemade' should be past 'was homemade'. 'my mother said always to cook' is incorrect word order and tense; use 'my mother always cooked'. Suggestion: use past tense consistently when talking about childhood.

× I don't know my mother to have a hobby so I just always enjoy what they make The first years pumpkin yellow perfect trouble.

✓ I don't know whether my mother had a hobby, so I always enjoyed what she made. In the early years, pumpkin dishes were perfect for me.

Pronoun confusion: 'they' should be 'she' referring to mother. Tense should be past 'had' and 'enjoyed'. Original run-on sentence; split into two sentences for clarity. 'pumpkin yellow perfect trouble' is unclear — corrected to 'pumpkin dishes were perfect'. Suggestion: match pronoun to antecedent and use clear sentence boundaries.

× I realize the taste so it's.

✓ I remember the taste, so it is memorable.

'Realize' is present; intended meaning is past memory 'remember'. Incomplete sentence 'so it's.' needs completion 'so it is memorable'. Suggestion: use correct verb for recalling past experiences and finish sentences.

× Actually, no, it's the same of the years because it's so simple and too many, uh, ingredients.

✓ Actually, no, it is the same throughout the years because it is simple and uses few ingredients.

'the same of the years' incorrect preposition; should be 'throughout the years'. 'too many' contradicts 'simple' — likely intended 'few'. Maintain present tense for habitual fact. Suggestion: use 'throughout' for duration and match adjective to meaning.

× And so if I have not many time to make it, it's just the same.

✓ So if I do not have much time to make it, I make the same dish.

'not many time' incorrect quantifier and noun form; use 'much time' with uncountable 'time'. 'it's just the same' is vague; clarify subject 'I make the same dish'. Suggestion: use 'much' with uncountable nouns and explicit subject.

× And sometimes my mother too make it me, but it's the same menu as really enjoyed and it's healthy for me that so.

✓ Sometimes my mother makes it for me; it is the same menu I really enjoy and it is healthy for me.

Verb form 'make' should be 'makes' (third person singular). Word order 'make it me' incorrect — use 'makes it for me'. 'as really enjoyed' should be 'I really enjoy'. Remove extraneous 'that so'. Suggestion: ensure proper verb agreement and correct prepositional phrases.

× Hasn't changed it's the same when I was child until now is pumpkin yellow clear vegetable because it really to enjoy it and to my childhood is good and memorable to eat and retest another.

✓ It has not changed; it has been the same since I was a child. Pumpkin, a yellow vegetable, is something I really enjoy; it brings back good childhood memories.

Multiple issues: missing subject 'It has not changed' and incorrect contractions. 'when I was child' should be 'when I was a child'. 'until now is pumpkin yellow clear vegetable' is ungrammatical — rephrased to 'Pumpkin, a yellow vegetable'. 'really to enjoy it' should be 'I really enjoy it'. 'retest another' unclear — interpreted as 'bring back memories' and removed. Suggestion: split into sentences, use correct tense and articles, and clarify meaning.