Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and correct small mistakes (e.g., “resembles me of my childhood” → “reminds me of my childhood”). Use linking words like “because” or “for example” to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: My favourite food is pizza because it comes in so many varieties. For example, I enjoy thin-crust margherita for a light meal and pepperoni when I want something richer. It also reminds me of my childhood, since my family often had pizza nights together.

提案: Make the response more fluent and avoid repetition. Use a clear topic sentence, then briefly explain how and why your preferences changed with specific details (when or what you eat now). Use linking words such as “however” or “so” instead of repeating “but.” Keep sentences varied in structure.

例: As a child I loved fast food, especially burgers and fries. However, as I grew older I started prioritising my health, so I cut down on fast food and now prefer home-cooked meals or salads for most dinners.

提案: Be more grammatical and concise. Give one clear example with correct seasonal vocabulary and a reason. Use linking words such as “for example” and “because.” Avoid repeating the same idea and correct structure (e.g., “in summer” not “on summer”).

例: Yes. For example, I rarely drink soup in summer, but I often have hot soups in winter because they help me feel better when I catch a cold.

提案: Give a concise direct answer then add one specific reason and a short example. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., “it's still my favorite” not “it's still is”). Avoid repeating the same phrases twice.

例: No, it hasn't changed — pizza has always been my favourite. I still enjoy it because of the many toppings available; for instance, I often choose vegetable pizzas for a lighter option and meatier ones for celebrations.

× It resembles me of my childhood because we always had these pizza sundaes with my family.

✓ It reminds me of my childhood because we always had these pizza sundaes with my family.

The verb 'resemble' means 'to look like' and is not used with a person as an indirect object; 'resemble me of' is incorrect. Use 'remind someone of something' to express that something causes memories. Suggestion: use 'reminds me of' + noun phrase.

× When I was a child I liked eating fast food, for example burger and fries.

✓ When I was a child I liked eating fast food, for example burgers and fries.

Countable nouns such as 'burger' should be plural when referring to the general category or multiple items. Use 'burgers and fries' to indicate examples of fast food. Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns when speaking generally.

× But years passed and now I prioritize my health so therefore I reduced my fast food intake.

✓ But years passed and now I prioritize my health, so I have reduced my fast food intake.

The sequence of past and present effects is best expressed with present perfect 'have reduced' because the reduction began in the past and continues to the present. Also 'so therefore' is redundant; use one connector. Suggestion: use present perfect to link past action to present state and remove redundant connectors.

× But I kind of liked eating them a lot back then.

✓ But I kind of liked eating them a lot back then.

Although the sentence is grammatical, the pronoun 'them' correctly refers to 'fast food' (plural). No change needed. Explanation: pronoun use is acceptable; keep as is. (Included only to acknowledge correctness.)

× For example, I don't usually drink soup and on summer, but I mostly drink it on winter because I get sick and I try to recover, so I drink soup on winter.

✓ For example, I don't usually drink soup in summer, but I mostly drink it in winter because I get sick and try to recover, so I drink soup in winter.

Use 'in' with seasons in English: 'in summer' and 'in winter' not 'on summer/on winter'. Also remove repetition and redundant 'I' before 'try to recover' for conciseness. Suggestion: use 'in' for seasons and avoid repeating the same clause.

× No, actually it hasn't changed at all. My favorite kind of food was pizza back then and it's still is my favorite food.

✓ No, actually it hasn't changed at all. My favorite kind of food was pizza back then and it's still my favorite food.

The phrase 'it's still is' contains an extra auxiliary 'is'. Use either 'it's still my favorite food' or 'it is still my favorite food.' Suggestion: remove the redundant 'is' to form a correct present simple statement about the current state.

× I like it because it has so many choices that you can choose from and it just tastes so good.

✓ I like it because there are so many varieties you can choose from and it just tastes so good.

'Choices that you can choose from' is wordy and uses 'choices' awkwardly for food varieties. Use 'varieties' or 'options' and the construction 'there are' to introduce plural items. Suggestion: use 'there are so many varieties/options' and avoid redundant 'choose'.