Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with appropriate linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., "I like" not "I love to eat it at many time") and word choice ("appearance" instead of "attractive look"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: My favourite food is fried chicken because it is crispy and full of flavor. I often eat it during work breaks since it’s convenient and satisfying.

提案: Use correct tense and clearer structure. Begin with a past-tense topic sentence, then add a specific detail or memory using a linking word. Avoid redundancy ("tasty and delicious" is repetitive).

例: When I was young, I loved the noodles my mother made because they were flavorful and comforting. For example, she would add fresh vegetables and a simple broth that made them very memorable.

提案: Make sentences grammatically consistent and use linking words. Use present simple or seasonal habits ("In summer I prefer..."). Be specific about examples and avoid awkward phrasing like "fish that cook."

例: Yes. In summer I prefer light dishes such as cold noodles, while in winter I usually choose hot meals like spicy ramen or grilled fish because they warm me up.

提案: Use correct tense and clearer phrasing. Start with a direct answer, then give a concise reason with a linking phrase. Use correct collocations ("it impresses me" → "it left a strong impression"; "bring me a nostalgic" → "makes me feel nostalgic").

例: No, my favourite food is still noodles because they left a strong impression on me as a child and still make me feel nostalgic.

× My favorite food is fried chicken because it's so crispy and tasty. I love to eat it at many time including working time because it is attractive look.

✓ My favorite food is fried chicken because it's so crispy and tasty. I love to eat it at many times, including while working, because it looks appealing.

Errors: 'many time' should be 'many times' (plural - Grammar Problem Type 1), 'including working time' is unidiomatic and needs a preposition and gerund 'including while working' (preposition and gerund - Grammar Problem Type 11 and 8), and 'it is attractive look' is incorrect word order and word choice; use 'it looks appealing' (incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and sentence structure - Grammar Problem Type 13 and 26). Suggestion: use plural for 'times', add 'while' before 'working' or say 'during work', use 'looks appealing' or 'is attractive' for correct adjective placement and verb use.

× When I was young, I like to eat noodles that my mom made for me because it's so tasty and delicious. That's attractive me when.

✓ When I was young, I liked to eat the noodles my mom made for me because they were so tasty and delicious. That attracted me.

Errors: 'like' should be past tense 'liked' to match 'When I was young' (Past tense issue - Grammar Problem Type 5), 'noodles' referred with 'they' not 'it' because plural (Singular and plural issue - Grammar Problem Type 1), 'it's so tasty' should be 'they were so tasty' to match past tense and plural, and 'That's attractive me when' is ungrammatical; correct is 'That attracted me' (sentence structure/verb form - Grammar Problem Type 26 and 9). Suggestion: keep past tense throughout when describing past habits, use correct pronoun for plural nouns, and use simple past verbs for past states.

× Yes, at summer I would like to eat noodle, but on the winter I'd like to eat something really hot like spicy ramen or fish that cook.

✓ Yes, in summer I like to eat noodles, but in winter I'd like to eat something really hot, like spicy ramen or cooked fish.

Errors: 'at summer' and 'on the winter' use wrong prepositions; seasons take 'in' (Incorrect use of prepositions - Grammar Problem Type 11). 'I would like to eat noodle' should be 'I like to eat noodles' or 'I would like to eat noodles' with plural (Singular and plural issue - Grammar Problem Type 1 and Present tense issue - Grammar Problem Type 6). 'fish that cook' is incorrect; use 'cooked fish' (past participle/adjective form - Grammar Problem Type 9). Suggestion: use 'in summer/in winter', use plural 'noodles', and use 'cooked fish' or 'fish that is cooked' for clarity.

× No, my favorite food is still noodles because it's impressed me a lot with its delicious taste and bring me a nostalgic.

✓ No, my favorite food is still noodles because they impressed me a lot with their delicious taste and bring me nostalgia.

Errors: 'it's impressed me' is wrong because 'noodles' are plural and the verb tense should be past 'impressed' (Singular and plural issue - Grammar Problem Type 1 and Past tense issue - Grammar Problem Type 5). Use 'they impressed me' or 'they have impressed me'. 'bring me a nostalgic' is ungrammatical; 'bring me nostalgia' or 'make me feel nostalgic' is correct (incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and noun choice - Grammar Problem Type 13). Suggestion: match subject number with verb (they/their), use correct past or present perfect tense if ongoing ('have impressed'), and use 'nostalgia' or 'feel nostalgic' instead of 'a nostalgic'.