Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, sự mạch lạc và từ vựng cụ thể. Tránh lỗi số nhiều/đơn (food/foods, sauce/sauces), sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về lý do (ví dụ: hương vị, kết cấu, kỷ niệm). Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu, dùng liên từ (because, so, and) hợp lý.

例: My favourite food is spaghetti. I love it because the tomato sauce is rich and tangy, and the pasta has a comforting texture. I often eat it with garlic bread, which makes the meal feel more satisfying.

提案: Cải thiện phát âm tên món và dùng từ chính xác; sửa thì (like → liked). Tránh nhầm lẫn giữa “snake” và “snack”. Nên nêu rõ món cụ thể, tại sao thích (vị, kỷ niệm) và một ví dụ ngắn. Dùng liên từ để kết nối ý.

例: When I was young, I liked sweet snacks such as jelly and fruit gummies. My parents often bought them as treats after school, so I associated them with happy memories.

提案: Giữ câu tự nhiên hơn và cụ thể hóa ví dụ; sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc (different times of the year, fresh foods/drinks, because I feel cooler). Thêm liên từ và một ví dụ cụ thể về thực phẩm mùa hè/ mùa đông.

例: Yes, I do. In summer I prefer fresh salads and cold smoothies because they help me feel cooler. In winter I usually eat warm soups and stews to stay warm.

提案: Làm rõ ý, sửa ngữ pháp và cấu trúc (tense, word choice). Nên so sánh rõ ràng giữa quá khứ và hiện tại: nêu món từng thích, lý do, và món hiện tại với lý do thay đổi. Tránh từ không rõ nghĩa (‘Juli B’). Giữ 2–3 câu rõ ràng.

例: Yes, it has changed. As a child I preferred sweet snacks and deli treats because they were convenient and tasty, but now I usually prefer spaghetti because I enjoy cooking it and find it more satisfying.

× I like a lot of different food but my favorite food is spaghetti because when I eat them I feel comfortable and spaghetti had a ripped tomato sauces.

✓ I like a lot of different foods, but my favorite food is spaghetti because when I eat it I feel comfortable, and spaghetti has a rich tomato sauce.

Sử dụng số ít & số nhiều: 'food' cần là 'foods' khi nói về nhiều loại; 'spaghetti' (as a dish) is treated as singular 'it' not 'them'; verb agreement: use 'has' not 'had' for present state; 'ripped' is incorrect adjective here, 'rich' or 'tangy' fits; 'sauces' should be singular 'sauce' when referring to the sauce of spaghetti. Suggestions: use plural when referring to multiple items (foods), match pronoun number to noun, use present tense for general statements, and choose correct adjective for taste.

× When I was young I really like snake or Jelly because they are so sweet.

✓ When I was young I really liked snake or jelly because they were so sweet.

Thì quá khứ: The time frame 'When I was young' requires past tense 'liked' and 'were'. Also capitalization: 'jelly' should not be capitalized mid-sentence. Suggestion: use past simple for habits or states in the past.

× My parents usually buy them for me when I want to eat them so I really love it.

✓ My parents usually bought them for me when I wanted to eat them, so I really loved them.

Sử dụng đại từ và thì phù hợp: In past context, verbs should be past ('bought', 'wanted', 'loved'). Pronouns must agree: 'them' (snake or jelly) should be used consistently; 'it' was incorrect for plural. Suggestion: keep pronoun number consistent and match tense to the time frame.

× In the different time of year I usually eat different food.

✓ At different times of the year I usually eat different foods.

Giới từ và cụm danh từ: Use 'at different times of the year' or 'in different seasons' rather than 'in the different time of year'. Also use plural 'foods' for variety. Suggestion: use natural prepositional phrase 'at different times of the year' and pluralize when referring to various items.

× For example in the summer I usually eat fresh food or fresh drinks because that I feel cool when I eat them.

✓ For example, in the summer I usually eat fresh foods or drink fresh beverages because they make me feel cool when I consume them.

Đại từ và cấu trúc mệnh đề: 'that I feel cool' is ungrammatical; use a clause showing cause 'because they make me feel cool'. 'Fresh food or fresh drinks' should be pluralized or rephrased; pronoun 'they' must match plural antecedent. Suggestion: use 'they make me feel' for cause and ensure pronoun agreement.

× Yes, when I work time I really like it's a nice deli or sweet but when but now I I usually eat spaghetti or Juli B.

✓ Yes. When I was working, I really liked nice deli foods or sweets, but now I usually eat spaghetti or Julie B.

Thì hiện tại/phủ định và cấu trúc câu: The sentence mixes tenses and has extraneous words. Use past tense 'was working' and 'liked' for previous habits; 'it's a nice deli or sweet' is ungrammatical—rephrase as 'nice deli foods or sweets'. Remove duplicate 'but' and extra 'I'. 'Juli B' unclear—assumed proper noun 'Julie B' and capitalized. Suggestion: separate ideas into clauses with correct tense for past habits and present tense for current routines, and clean up redundancies.