Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural, specific and well-extended, but slightly long — keep responses under five sentences and avoid extra details that don't add meaning. Improve cohesion by using a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details with linking words. Also vary vocabulary slightly to show range (e.g., ‘accompany’ or ‘serve with’) and avoid repeating “I like”.

例: My favourite food is homemade creamy basil pesto pasta. I usually serve it with a chilled glass of white wine because the acidity complements the pesto, and I enjoy listening to calm Italian music while I eat to create a relaxed atmosphere.

提案: Good content and specificity, but the opening sentence is somewhat off-topic and wordy. Start directly with the topic sentence naming the favourite foods from childhood, then add one supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid unnecessary background unless it directly answers the question.

例: When I was young, my favourite dishes were my mother’s beef stroganoff and chicken à la king. In particular, I loved them served with mixed vegetables because they balanced the rich sauces and made the meals feel comforting.

提案: The answer is clear but brief and partly indirect — the examiner asked about seasonal differences, and you replied about who cooks. Improve by directly addressing seasonal variation first, then add supporting detail with a linking word. Use a fuller example to show range and relevance to the question.

例: Not really — I tend to eat similar comfort foods year-round. For example, I often cook spaghetti bolognese in winter for its warmth, while in summer my husband prefers to barbecue, so we have grilled dishes more often.

提案: Strong answer: clear topic sentence, explanation and specific examples. To improve, compress slightly to stay within five sentences and use linking words for smooth flow (e.g., ‘for instance’). Also avoid repeating phrases like ‘as an adult’ twice.

例: Yes — my tastes have changed as I’ve grown older. For instance, I now enjoy olives which I disliked as a child, but I no longer eat prawns because I developed an allergy, so my preferences have shifted accordingly.

× But one of my favorite things that she used to make was her beef stroganoff and also her chicken a la king paired with some mixed vegetables.

✓ But one of my favorite dishes that she used to make was her beef stroganoff, and also her chicken a la king, paired with some mixed vegetables.

The sentence used 'things' which is not the best collocation for prepared meals; 'dishes' is more appropriate (word choice falls under verb/past participle list by context of prepared items). Additionally, commas improve sentence clarity. Suggestion: use 'dishes' when referring to meals and add commas to separate clauses and modifiers.

× I enjoy a homemade creamy basil pesto pasta.

✓ I enjoy homemade creamy basil pesto pasta.

The indefinite article 'a' before an uncountable or mass noun phrase like 'homemade creamy basil pesto pasta' is unnecessary. Use no article for general food preferences. Suggestion: remove 'a' when talking about a type of dish in general.

× Food I did not enjoy as a child, such as olives, have become some of my favorite foods to eat now as an adult.

✓ Food I did not enjoy as a child, such as olives, has become some of my favorite foods to eat now as an adult.

The subject 'Food' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' rather than 'have' to agree in number. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement by matching singular subjects with singular verbs.

× And other foods which I enjoyed, such as prawn, I have become allergic to as an adult, so I don't eat them anymore.

✓ And other foods which I enjoyed, such as prawns, I have become allergic to as an adult, so I don't eat them anymore.

When listing examples like 'prawn' in a general sense, use the plural form 'prawns'. Using singular 'prawn' here is incorrect for a general category. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to food in general or as examples.

× My mother was quite strict growing up and she did not allow a lot of input from the children when she compiled the menu for the week.

✓ My mother was quite strict growing up, and she did not allow much input from the children when she compiled the menu for the week.

This sentence is largely correct grammatically, but 'a lot of input' is slightly informal; 'much input' is more natural in this negative context. Also a comma before the conjunction improves readability. Suggestion: use 'much' with negatives and add a comma before 'and'.