Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and check grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases like “It gives me a number.” Watch verb tenses and article use (e.g., “my favorite food is spaghetti,” not “favourite food is spaghetti”).

例: My favourite food is spaghetti because I love its rich tomato sauce and tender meatballs. For example, my mother used to make a sweet, homemade sauce that I still enjoy, and I sometimes eat spaghetti at a local restaurant when I want a quick, tasty meal.

提案: Use past tense for childhood and correct pronouns. Give a clear topic sentence, then one specific example with linking words. Avoid single-word answers like “Sweetness.”

例: When I was young, I liked sweet foods, especially donuts. For example, my mother often brought home glazed donuts with different fillings, so I enjoyed their variety and soft texture.

提案: Be specific and coherent. Give 1–2 concrete examples and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid unclear phrases like “expensive pools.” Check subject-verb agreement (e.g., “that make us happy”).

例: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, at Christmas we usually have roast ham and several side dishes like mashed potatoes and salads, which make the celebration feel special.

提案: Use correct tense and be specific about how preferences changed. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain reasons with linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”).

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since I was a child because I have tried many more dishes. For example, I now enjoy spicy Asian food and gourmet burgers, whereas I used to prefer simple, sweet dishes prepared at home.

× My favorite food is spaghetti.

✓ My favorite food is spaghetti.

No change needed; the sentence is correct. Spaghetti as an uncountable noun does not require an article in this context.

× When I was a child, my mom used to cook the best spaghetti in the world.

✓ When I was a child, my mom used to cook the best spaghetti in the world.

No change needed; 'used to cook' correctly describes a habitual past action.

× I like this pasta, the meatballs, the sauce, and I like the sweet taste.

✓ I like the pasta, the meatballs, the sauce, and the sweet taste.

The original repeats 'I like' unnecessarily and mixes articles. Combine items in a parallel list and use the definite article 'the' consistently for the listed elements to improve fluency and parallel structure.

× I even like the spaghetti of Jollibee.

✓ I even like Jollibee's spaghetti.

Use possessive form to make the phrase natural in English: 'Jollibee's spaghetti' is the common word order; 'the spaghetti of Jollibee' is awkward.

× It gives me a number.

✓ It makes me happy.

'Gives me a number' is not an idiomatic expression. Replace with a phrase that expresses the intended feeling; context suggests the speaker means the food makes them happy.

× What kind of food did you like when you were young? - I like sweet foods.

✓ When I was young, I liked sweet foods.

The question asks about the past ('did you like...'), so the answer should use past tense 'liked' rather than present 'like' to match tense.

× I like Donuts given to me by my mom when he go goes home after work.

✓ I liked donuts my mom gave me when she came home from work.

Multiple problems: tense should be past 'liked' to match 'when you were young'; pronoun 'he' is incorrect for 'mom' (use 'she'); verb forms 'go goes' are incorrect—use past 'came'; word order simplified to 'donuts my mom gave me' is more natural.

× I like how it is with different flavors and different textures.

✓ I liked how they had different flavors and textures.

Match past tense 'liked' and refer to 'donuts' with plural pronoun 'they'; remove redundant 'different' twice and streamline to 'different flavors and textures.'

× Sweetness.

✓ I enjoyed their sweetness.

Single-word fragment 'Sweetness.' is incomplete. Convert to a full sentence that connects to the previous idea and uses past tense 'enjoyed.'

× Of course, I eat different foods at different times of the year.

✓ Of course, I eat different foods at different times of the year.

No change needed; present simple correctly describes habitual actions.

× For example, during Christmas we used to eat ham, lots of food, expensive pools that makes us happy and.

✓ For example, at Christmas we used to eat ham and many other dishes that made us happy.

Corrections: 'during Christmas' is better as 'at Christmas'; 'lots of food' -> 'many other dishes' for clarity; 'expensive pools' is incorrect (likely 'expensive foods' or 'special dishes') so replaced with 'many other dishes'; verb agreement 'makes' -> past 'made' to match 'used to eat'; remove trailing 'and' and make sentence complete.

× Has your favourite food changed since you were a child? - Yes, my favorite food change since I was a child, because today we have different varieties of food.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a child, because today we have many different varieties of food.

Use present perfect 'has changed' to describe change from past to present; 'change' (base form) is incorrect. Add 'many' before 'different varieties' for natural phrasing.

× We have different restaurants or fast foods with different kinds of food with rich flavors.

✓ We have different restaurants and fast-food outlets offering a variety of richly flavored foods.

Use 'and' rather than 'or' to indicate both types exist; 'fast foods' should be 'fast-food outlets' or 'fast-food restaurants'; avoid repeating 'different' and improve noun phrase clarity; use 'richly flavored' as an adjective phrase.