Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp nhưng câu chưa tự nhiên và có lỗi ngữ pháp thời quá khứ/hiện tại. Nên mở câu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: hương vị, cách chế biến hoặc tần suất ăn). Dùng tối đa 3-4 câu, sử dụng liên từ để mạch lạc.

例: My favourite food is pizza. I loved it as a child and I still enjoy it now because I like the crispy crust and the variety of toppings. I usually eat pizza once or twice a month with my family.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu chính xác về từ vựng ("piezer") và có mô tả mâu thuẫn (gọi pizza là trái cây). Cần sửa lỗi từ, trả lời trực tiếp và đưa chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ hương vị, lý do thích) dùng 2-3 câu, tránh nói vòng vo như "you know".

例: When I was young, I loved pizza. I enjoyed it because of the cheesy taste and the variety of toppings like ham and vegetables. Eating pizza with my family became a happy weekly tradition.

提案: Ý tốt nhưng diễn đạt lủng củng và có lỗi cấu trúc. Nên trình bày rõ ràng theo mùa, dùng liên từ để liệt kê và đưa ví dụ cụ thể cho mỗi mùa. Giữ 3-4 câu, tránh nói lặp từ và dùng ngữ pháp chính xác.

例: Yes, my diet changes with the seasons. In spring I often eat light foods like spring rolls, in summer I enjoy cold treats such as ice cream, and in winter I prefer hot dishes like soups or stews to keep warm.

提案: Ý tưởng rõ nhưng có lỗi từ vựng/diễn đạt ("Swiss", "veteran") và ngữ pháp (tense, to-infinitive). Nên so sánh rõ ràng giữa quá khứ và hiện tại, nêu lý do thay đổi thói quen ăn uống. Dùng 2-3 câu mạch lạc.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed. As a child I often ate sweets like chocolate, but now I prefer vegetables and healthier meals because I'm more conscious about nutrition.

× I really like pizza when I was a child and now I like it too.

✓ I really liked pizza when I was a child, and I like it now too.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. Use simple past 'liked' for childhood, and simple present 'like' for now. Suggestion: keep time references consistent by using appropriate tense for each clause.

× You know, it's piezer.

✓ You know, it's pizza.

The word 'piezer' is incorrect or misspelled. Use the correct noun 'pizza'. Suggestion: learn correct spelling of common food items.

× Piezer is a delicious fruit with many toppings and and I think pizza is my childhood memory and also my childhood food too.

✓ Pizza is a delicious food with many toppings, and I think it is part of my childhood memories.

This sentence contains wrong lexical choice ('fruit' instead of 'food'), repeated 'and', awkward phrase 'childhood memory and also my childhood food too'. Correct the noun, remove duplication, and use plural 'memories' or 'part of my childhood memories' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I think I sometimes it's spring rolls in the spring, sometimes ice cream and some dessert in summer, and in the winter I I would like to eat. Some are hot food.

✓ Yes, I sometimes eat spring rolls in the spring, sometimes ice cream and other desserts in the summer, and in the winter I like to eat hot food.

The original has incorrect word order 'I sometimes it's', repetition 'I I', and sentence fragments. Use present simple 'eat' for habitual actions, plural 'desserts', and combine fragments into a complete sentence. Suggestion: use subject + verb + object order and consistent tense for habits.

× Yes, of course, when I was a child I always want to eat some sweet food like chocolate or Swiss.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was a child I always wanted to eat sweet foods like chocolate or sweets.

The clause refers to a past habitual action, so use past tense 'wanted' instead of present 'want'. 'Swiss' is likely a wrong word choice for 'sweets' or 'Swiss chocolate'; choose the correct noun. Suggestion: match tense to time reference and choose correct vocabulary.

× But now I am a veteran so I would rather to eat vegetable instead of some sweet food.

✓ But now I prefer to eat vegetables instead of sweet foods.

'I am a veteran' is likely unintended; 'prefer' is a better present-tense verb than 'would rather to eat' (use 'would rather eat' without 'to'). Use plural 'vegetables' and 'sweet foods' for general statements. Suggestion: use 'prefer' or 'would rather' correctly and ensure plural forms for general categories.