Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류와 어색한 어휘 사용이 많습니다. 먼저 질문에 직접 답하는 명확한 주제문을 만들고, 그 이유를 1~2개의 구체적인 근거(예: 맛, 건강 효과, 식감)로 연결하세요. 연결어(for example, because, so)를 사용해 문장의 흐름을 매끄럽게 하고, 문장 길이는 2~3문장으로 유지하세요. 또한 'kimchi'에 대해 설명할 때는 ‘Korean traditional food’ 처럼 정확한 표현을 사용하고 시제와 동사 형태를 바로잡으세요.

例: My favourite food is kimchi, a traditional Korean dish. I like it because it tastes spicy and refreshing, and it helps with digestion. For example, I often eat kimchi with rice, which makes my meals more enjoyable.

提案: 문장 시작과 시제(과거) 사용이 불명확합니다. 질문은 과거 습관을 묻기 때문에 과거형을 사용하세요 (I liked). 구체적인 음식 예시를 명확히 하고, 이유를 하나 또는 두 개만 제시하며 연결어(so, because)로 이어주세요. 불필요한 단어는 제거하고 의미가 불분명한 표현('mother tongue', 'kimchi poke', 'Feels like ref')는 바꾸세요.

例: When I was young, I liked spicy foods such as kimchi jjigae and spicy noodles. I enjoyed them because the heat made me feel energetic, and my family often cooked these dishes at home.

提案: 답변이 혼란스럽고 논리적 흐름이 부족합니다. 우선 간단히 직접적으로 답하세요(Yes/No). 그 다음 이유를 한두 문장으로 명확하게 설명하세요(예: 취향, 건강, 습관). 부정문과 시제 오류를 고치고 'afraid of new food' 같은 표현은 'I'm reluctant to try new foods'처럼 자연스럽게 바꾸세요.

例: No, I usually eat the same kinds of food throughout the year because I prefer familiar dishes. I'm reluctant to try new foods, especially as I've gotten older, so I tend to stick to what I know.

提案: 답변이 불완전하고 문장이 끝나지 않았습니다. 먼저 'Yes' 뒤에 간단한 주제문으로 변화 여부와 이유를 말하세요. 구체적으로 어떤 음식이 바뀌었는지(예: 더 기름진 음식 선호)와 이유(예: 입맛 변화, 생활 패턴)를 1~2문장으로 설명하세요. 불명확한 단어('fork, fork')는 제거하고 문법과 어휘를 정확히 사용하세요.

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed since I was a child. As a child I avoided oily or fatty foods, but now I sometimes enjoy richer dishes because my taste preferences have changed and I eat out more often.

× My favorite food is Korean traditional food kimchi because I eat kimchi makes me fresh whenever I ate only and so I try to always it came to.

✓ My favorite food is the Korean traditional dish kimchi because eating kimchi makes me feel refreshed, so I try to eat it whenever I can.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure issues: missing articles, incorrect verb forms, and unclear clauses. Use 'the' for a specific dish, 'eating kimchi' (gerund) as the subject of 'makes', correct verb 'feel refreshed', and 'try to eat it whenever I can' to express habit. Suggestion: break complex ideas into clear clauses and ensure verbs match their subjects.

× Where am I was young I like spicy kind of food like kimchi jjigae or mother tongue or kimchi poke.

✓ When I was young, I liked spicy foods such as kimchi jjigae, mother’s cuisine, or kimchi poke.

Use 'When I was young' not 'Where am I was young'. Past habit requires past tense 'liked'. Use 'such as' for examples and plural 'spicy foods'. 'Mother tongue' is incorrect; probably 'my mother's cooking' or 'mother’s cuisine'. Suggestion: use correct temporal preposition 'when' and past tense for past habits.

× This spicy food made me more energetic and sweaty.

✓ This spicy food made me feel more energetic and sweatier.

Use 'feel' to describe change in state and comparative adjective 'sweatier' to compare intensity. 'Sweaty' as an adjective is fine but comparative fits with 'more energetic'. Suggestion: pair verbs like 'made me feel' with appropriate comparative adjectives.

× Feels like ref.

✓ It felt like that.

'Feels like ref' is fragmentary and unclear. Use a full clause 'It felt like that' (past tense to match context). Provide clear subjects and verbs. Suggestion: avoid fragments; ensure subject-verb present.

× No, I don't because I'm getting old.

✓ No, I don't because I am getting older.

Comparative form 'older' is required when comparing age over time. 'I'm getting old' is grammatically acceptable but 'getting older' is more natural for change over time. Suggestion: use comparative adjectives for changes.

× I do not try to new food every year because it is scared or afraid of new food, which I didn't.

✓ I do not try new foods every year because I am afraid of new food, which I have not tried before.

Use 'try new foods' without 'to'. 'Am afraid' form is correct for present state. 'Which I have not tried before' uses present perfect to indicate experience up to now. Suggestion: use correct verb patterns: 'try new foods' and present perfect for past experience affecting present.

× I haven't eat eaten before so I try to.

✓ I haven't eaten it before, so I try to avoid it.

The correct past participle of 'eat' is 'eaten' used with 'have'. Add object 'it' for clarity and complete the clause 'try to avoid it' to convey meaning. Suggestion: use correct past participle and complete the verb phrase.

× Yes I have when I was child I usually didn't add oily or fatty food like fork, fork, fat or mild.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I usually did not eat oily or fatty foods.

Use past tense 'did not eat' for past habits. 'When I was a child' requires article 'a'. Remove unclear words 'fork, fork, fat or mild'. Use plural 'foods'. Suggestion: simplify and use standard vocabulary: 'oily or fatty foods'.

× But after I adult fully grown adult I.

✓ But after I became a fully grown adult, I started to eat them.

Original is incomplete and ungrammatical. Use 'after I became a fully grown adult' and complete with action 'I started to eat them'. Suggestion: ensure clauses are complete with a subject and a finite verb.