Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сократите повторы и заполняющие звуки, сформулируйте чёткое вступительное предложение и затем добавьте одно-два конкретных пояснения. Например, избегайте двух одинаковых мыслей («I like Italian food» и «I prefer Italian food») и уточните, что именно вам нравится в пасте или пицце.

例: My favourite food is pasta. I fell in love with Italian cuisine when I lived in Italy as a child, especially simple dishes like spaghetti with tomato sauce and Margherita pizza because they taste fresh and comforting.

提案: Исправьте времена (прошедшее), уберите повторения и дайте более конкретные детали — какие виды суши или рыбы вы любили и почему. Используйте связку (for example, because...) для ясности.

例: When I was a child I liked Japanese food, especially sushi such as salmon nigiri and maki rolls, because my family often ate fresh fish and I enjoyed the delicate flavours.

提案: Уберите слова-паразиты и завершите мысль. Дайте конкретные примеры зимних и летних блюд и используйте связку 'in contrast' или 'for example' для плавности.

例: Yes. In winter I usually eat hot soups and stews, such as chicken soup or beef stew, to stay warm. In contrast, in summer I prefer cold salads and chilled noodle dishes like a cucumber and tomato salad.

提案: Ответ неполный и грамматически неверен. Дайте ясное вступление (Yes/No), объясните, как и почему предпочтения изменились с конкретным примером, и завершите мысль. Избегайте недосказанности.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I preferred sweet drinks and simple snacks, but now I enjoy savoury dishes like pasta and grilled fish because I appreciate more complex flavours.

× My my favorite food is pasta 'cause I like Italian food so much and I also like uh, some pizza Margherita cause uh, in my childhood I used to live in Italy and I prefer Italian food.

✓ My favorite food is pasta because I like Italian food so much, and I also like pizza Margherita because in my childhood I used to live in Italy and I prefer Italian food.

The sentence has unnecessary article use and repetition. Remove the extra 'my' and use 'because' instead of colloquial 'cause' for clarity. Do not use 'some' before uncountable or proper food names like 'pizza Margherita' or 'pasta'. Also punctuation and conjunctions should be clearer: use a comma before 'and' linking independent clauses. Suggestion: Say 'My favorite food is pasta' and 'I also like pizza Margherita.' Avoid 'some' with uncountable nouns and proper dish names.

× When I was a child, I like to eat some Japan food like sushi, sushis and I also like some fishes and that's all.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to eat Japanese food like sushi, and I also liked fish, and that's all.

The sentence mixes past context ('When I was a child') with present tense verbs 'like'. Use past tense 'liked' to match the time frame. 'Japan food' is incorrect adjective form; use 'Japanese food'. 'Sushi' is uncountable and does not take plural 'sushis'. 'Fish' can be uncountable when referring to food, so do not use 'fishes' here. Suggestion: Use past tense for habits in the past and correct adjective and countability: 'liked', 'Japanese', 'sushi', 'fish'.

× Yes, uh, because, uh, in winter I like to eat some soups and, uh, hot dishes, but when I but, uh, in summer I like to eat some cold dishes like.

✓ Yes, because in winter I like to eat soups and hot dishes, but in summer I like to eat cold dishes.

The sentence has filler words and a broken conjunction 'but when I but'. Remove fillers and keep one contrastive conjunction 'but'. 'Some' is unnecessary before plural countable 'soups' and 'dishes'. End the sentence with a complete thought; do not leave 'like' hanging. Suggestion: Remove filler 'uh' and redundant words, use 'but in summer' to contrast, and finish the sentence without trailing 'like'.

× Yes, it changed because when I was child I tried. Like a little juice but when I but.

✓ Yes, it changed because when I was a child I tried a little juice, but then...

The original mixes tenses and omits words; use 'a child' with the article. 'Tried' needs an object; 'a little juice' is acceptable but the sentence is incomplete 'but when I but'. Provide a complete contrast 'but then' or finish the clause. Ensure past tense consistency when referring to childhood. Suggestion: Say 'Yes, it changed because when I was a child I tried a little juice, but then I preferred ...' and finish the idea clearly.