Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите более конкретно и естественно: начните с прямого ответа (назовите конкретное блюдо или тип еды), затем коротко объясните причину. Избегайте тавтологии и грамматических ошибок (например, "rather to" → "rather than"). Используйте связки для плавного перехода (e.g., "because", "so"). Ограничьте ответ 2–4 предложениями.

例: My favourite food is grilled salmon because it's light and high in protein. I choose it over fast food since it helps me stay fit and supports my immune system, and it also lifts my mood.

提案: Исправьте грамматику и выражайте мысль чётко: начните с темы, укажите конкретные примеры, затем объясните причину простыми словами. Избегайте неясных фраз (например, "psychologist patterns influence wish to eat badly") — скажите, что дети тянутся к сладкому и сопротивляются запретам. Держите 2–3 предложения.

例: As a child I loved junk and sweet foods such as candies, cookies and fast food. I think many children prefer these foods because they taste good and they often resist their parents' rules.

提案: Ответ не соответствует вопросу о сезонах — дайте прямой ответ о питании в разное время года. Если хотите говорить о настроении, свяжите это с сезонностью или скажите, что в зимние месяцы вы едите иначе и объясните почему. Сократите слова-паразиты и исправьте грамматику ("I'm try" → "I try"; "can't help to do it" → "can't help it").

例: Not really — I don't change much across seasons, but in winter I tend to eat warmer, hearty meals like soups and stews. However, when I'm stressed or in a bad mood I sometimes reach for sweets, even though I try to stay healthy.

提案: Дайте ясный, связный ответ: подтвердите изменение и приведите конкретные примеры того, что вы любите сейчас по сравнению с детством. Устраните повторы и ошибки ("eat nutrients" → "eat nutritious"; "keep in fit" → "keep fit"). Используйте 2–3 предложения с логичными связками.

例: Yes, it has changed. As a child I preferred sweets and fast food, but now I choose nutritious, high-protein meals like grilled chicken and salads because I exercise regularly and want to stay fit.

× My favorite food is something light because I'm trying to keep fit.

✓ My favorite food is something light because I'm trying to stay fit.

Use 'stay fit' rather than 'keep fit' in this context; both are possible but 'stay fit' is more commonly collocated with 'trying to'. Replace 'keep' with 'stay' for more natural phrasing.

× Also I prefer eating healthy food rather to junk food.

✓ Also I prefer eating healthy food rather than junk food.

The correct preposition in the expression 'rather than' is 'than', not 'to'. Use 'rather than' to contrast two choices.

× It's really good for your immune system.

✓ It's really good for my immune system.

The student is speaking about personal preference and should use the first-person possessive 'my' instead of 'your' to refer to their own immune system.

× Also food can boost your mood.

✓ Also, food can boost my mood.

For consistency and clarity use 'my mood' to match the speaker's perspective; adding a comma after 'Also' improves sentence flow.

× When I was a child I preferred eat junk and sweet food, for instance candies, cookies and fast food.

✓ When I was a child I preferred to eat junk and sweet food, for instance candies, cookies, and fast food.

After 'preferred' use the infinitive 'to eat' or the gerund 'eating'. Also add a comma before 'and' in a series for clarity.

× I think the psychologist patterns influence wish to eat badly because the all children don't like bands from parents.

✓ I think psychological patterns influenced the desire to eat badly because not all children like bans from their parents.

The original has multiple issues: 'psychologist patterns' should be 'psychological patterns'; 'influence wish to eat badly' becomes 'influenced the desire to eat badly' (past-tense agreement with 'I think' about childhood); 'the all children' should be 'not all children' and 'bands from parents' likely means 'bans by their parents' or 'bans from parents' corrected to 'bans from their parents'. Adjusted for grammar and clarity.

× When I have a bad mood I start to eat unhealthy food, for example sweets.

✓ When I'm in a bad mood I start eating unhealthy food, for example sweets.

Use the idiom 'be in a bad mood' and prefer the gerund 'start eating' rather than 'start to eat' for naturalness in this context.

× I know that it's really awful because I'm try to stay healthy, but uh, I can't help to do it.

✓ I know that it's really awful because I try to stay healthy, but I can't help doing it.

Remove the erroneous present continuous 'I'm try' and use 'I try'. After 'can't help' use the gerund form 'doing', not the infinitive 'to do'.

× Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a child because I'm trying to stay healthy and do exercises every day and eat nutrients and high protein meals to keep in fit.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a child because I'm trying to stay healthy: I exercise every day and eat nutritious, high-protein meals to keep fit.

Use 'exercise' rather than 'do exercises every day' for naturalness; 'eat nutrients' is incorrect—use 'eat nutritious, high-protein meals'; 'keep in fit' should be 'keep fit'. Also add punctuation to clarify the list of habits.

× Moreover, my food food of vitamins.

✓ Moreover, my food contains more vitamins.

The original is ungrammatical. Clarify meaning: likely intended 'my food contains more vitamins' or 'I eat more vitamin-rich foods'. Use 'contains more vitamins' for a simple correction.