Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ неестественен и содержит грамматические ошибки и повторы. Нужно: 1) начать с чёткой темы (например, "My favourite food is..."); 2) исправить согласование числительных и существительных (is vs are), убрать повторы; 3) дать одно предложение с уточняющей деталью о том, почему или как готовят блюдо, используя связку (e.g. "because", "for example"). Практикуйте короткие, связные предложения (не более 4–5).

例: My favourite food is meals made with potatoes and buckwheat. For example, I often enjoy buckwheat soup and fried potatoes because they are comforting and easy to make.

提案: Ответ содержит запутанную структуру, временные формы смешаны и есть неверные слова (например, "mopped potatoes"). Нужно: 1) использовать простое прошедшее время для описания прошлых привычек; 2) выбрать точные слова ("mashed potatoes" вместо "mopped"); 3) добавить связку и причину или краткое описание, чтобы обогатить ответ. Следите за порядком слов и избегайте лишних фраз.

例: When I was young, I lived with my grandmother, and she always cooked dumplings and mashed potatoes for me. I loved them because they were homemade and reminded me of family dinners.

提案: Ответ не по теме и сильно искажён грамматически. Вопрос спрашивает о сезонах, а студент говорит о начале университета. Нужно: 1) отвечать по существу (упомянуть сезоны и примеры сезонных блюд) или, если говорить о переменах в жизни, коротко связать это с разными периодами года; 2) использовать простые ясные предложения в нужном времени; 3) избегать некорректных фраз ("first course of university").

例: Not really; I usually eat the same kinds of food throughout the year, but in winter I prefer hot soups and stews, while in summer I eat more salads and grilled vegetables.

提案: Ответ понятен, но стилистически неестественен и содержит лишние слова. Нужно: 1) дать короткий прямой ответ, затем одно предложение с объяснением; 2) убрать повторяющиеся фразы ("nowadays and past ways past days"); 3) использовать связки ("because", "since") для ясности.

例: No, my favourite food hasn't changed since I was a child. I still love potato-based dishes because they are comforting and remind me of home.

× My favorite food are meals including potato and buckwheat.

✓ My favorite food is meals including potato and buckwheat.

The subject 'My favorite food' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'. Use subject-verb agreement: singular subject takes singular verb. Suggestion: use 'is' or rephrase to 'My favorite foods are...' if intending plural food items.

× One of the one of them soup with buckwheat and frying potatoes.

✓ One of them is soup with buckwheat and fried potatoes.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and redundant ('One of the one of them'). It needs a clear subject and verb: 'One of them is...'. Also 'frying potatoes' should be 'fried potatoes' to describe the prepared food. Suggestion: simplify to 'One of them is soup with buckwheat and fried potatoes.'

× When I was young I live I was living with my grandmother and they all she always cooked me dumplings and mopped potatoes.

✓ When I was young I lived with my grandmother and she always cooked me dumplings and mashed potatoes.

Tense consistency: describing the past requires past simple 'lived' not 'live' or 'was living' (either 'I lived' or 'I was living'). Remove redundant phrases ('they all she'). 'Mopped potatoes' is incorrect; the correct term is 'mashed potatoes'. Suggestion: use 'When I was young, I lived with my grandmother, and she always cooked dumplings and mashed potatoes for me.'

× When he was pushed first course of university, I started to consume more fast foods than other years.

✓ When I started my first year of university, I began to eat more fast food than in previous years.

The original mixes subjects and uses incorrect expressions: 'When he was pushed first course of university' is ungrammatical. Use 'When I started my first year of university'. Use past simple 'began' or 'started' and correct noun 'fast food' (uncountable). Compare periods with 'than in previous years.' Suggestion: 'When I started my first year of university, I began to eat more fast food than before.'

× And the more highlighted fact about me, I try the taste of hamburger at first time when I was the first course of year of university.

✓ Also, an important fact is that I tried a hamburger for the first time during my first year of university.

Tense error: 'I try' should be past 'I tried' because the action occurred in the past. Word order and phrasing are awkward; use 'tried a hamburger for the first time'. 'First course of year of university' should be 'first year of university'. Suggestion: 'I tried a hamburger for the first time during my first year of university.'

× Before them I never ate.

✓ Before that, I had never eaten one.

Pronoun and tense issues: 'them' is incorrect reference; use 'that' or 'it'. Use past perfect 'had never eaten' to show the action had not occurred before the past event. Alternatively 'Before that, I never ate hamburgers.' Suggestion: use clear noun 'hamburgers' if specifying the food.

× No, I don't think that my favorite food changed since I was a child.

✓ No, I don't think that my favorite food has changed since I was a child.

Use present perfect 'has changed' with 'since' to indicate a situation that started in the past and continues to the present. 'Changed' alone (simple past) is inconsistent with 'since'. Suggestion: use 'has changed' for ongoing relevance.

× I nowadays and past ways past days I still love food made with potatoes.

✓ Nowadays and in the past I still loved and still love foods made with potatoes.

Original is confused and repetitive. Better: 'Nowadays, as in the past, I still love foods made with potatoes.' Ensure clear adverb placement ('nowadays' at beginning) and parallel structure. Suggestion: use 'Nowadays, like in the past, I still love foods made with potatoes.'