Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장 구조와 어휘 선택이 부정확하여 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 우선 주제문을 명확히 하고(예: ‘My favourite food is...’), 불필요한 단어와 반복을 제거하세요. 장소와 습관을 설명할 때는 시제와 전치사를 정확히 사용하고 연결어(for example, because)를 써서 이유를 제시하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 발음과 유창성도 개선해야 하므로 짧은 문장으로 연습해 보세요.

例: My favourite food is dak-galbi, a spicy stir-fried chicken dish from Chuncheon. When I lived in Chuncheon, I ate it often, and now I still have it about once a month because I love its spicy flavor and tender chicken.

提案: 과거 시제 사용과 표현의 명확성이 필요합니다. ‘When I was young’에 이어 과거형으로 말하고 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 중복되는 단어와 주저(uh)를 줄이고 연결어(because, so)를 자연스럽게 사용하면 좋습니다.

例: When I was young, I loved eating hamburgers because they were quick and easy to eat. They saved time, especially when I was busy with school.

提案: 대답이 모호하고 어휘 선택이 부정확합니다. 질문에 직접 답한 뒤 계절이나 상황별 구체적 예를 들고 이유를 설명하세요. ‘I prefer… in winter because…’처럼 계절과 음식 연결을 명확히 하고, 불필요한 수식어(so lazy)를 피하세요.

例: It depends on the season. For example, I eat more hot soups and stews in winter because they keep me warm, while in summer I prefer salads and cold noodles because they are refreshing.

提案: 의미가 불명확하고 논리적 흐름이 부족합니다. 직접적으로 ‘Yes or No’로 시작한 뒤 변한 이유와 예를 들어 설명하세요. 변화의 정도를 말할 때는 명확한 표현(‘mostly’, ‘mostly the same’, ‘completely changed’)을 사용하고, 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 적절히 쓰세요.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed a lot since I was a child. I used to prefer fast food like hamburgers, but now I enjoy healthier dishes such as grilled fish and vegetables because I care more about nutrition.

× My sore foot is Thakur B.

✓ My favorite food is Thukpa B.

The original sentence has incorrect word choice and structure; 'sore foot' is unrelated. Likely the student intended to name a dish. Replace with 'My favorite food is Thukpa B' to state preference. Ensure correct vocabulary and subject complement structure (subject + linking verb + noun phrase).

× It is continued to in chuncheon, uh, when I was uh, when I lived in Chenchen.

✓ I discovered it in Chuncheon when I lived there.

'It is continued to in' is ungrammatical. Use a clear past action: 'I discovered it in Chuncheon when I lived there.' Use past tense and correct preposition 'in' with place name; use pronoun 'there' to avoid repetition.

× I usually eat uh dakabi once a month maybe uh, it is so spicy and delicious so.

✓ I usually eat dak-galbi about once a month; it is very spicy and delicious.

Use present simple 'I usually eat' for habitual action. Correct dish name and hyphenation 'dak-galbi'. Combine clauses with a semicolon or conjunction. Replace redundant 'so' and use 'very' for emphasis.

× When I was young, I've, I love to eat hamburger because it, it makes, uh, I can say save.

✓ When I was young, I loved to eat hamburgers because they saved me time.

Mixing present perfect 'I've' and present 'I love' is incorrect for a past habit. Use past tense 'loved'. 'Hamburger' should be plural for general preference. 'It makes... I can say save' is unclear; use 'they saved me time' to express that eating hamburgers saved time.

× I could save the time for eating.

✓ I could save time when eating them.

'Save the time for eating' is awkward. Use 'save time' (no article) and clarify by adding 'when eating them' to indicate the action. This fits past habitual context.

× Umm, depend.

✓ It depends.

Single-word reply 'depend' lacks subject. Use 'It depends' with subject 'it' and present tense verb for correct clause structure.

× It depends on my taste. And then uh, I usually eat different food and at different time because it is so lazy to eat uh, repeatedly.

✓ It depends on my taste. I usually eat different foods at different times because I get tired of eating the same thing repeatedly.

Use plural 'foods' and 'times' for general statements. 'And then' is unnecessary. 'It is so lazy' is wrong use of 'lazy' for inanimate concept; use 'I get tired of' to express boredom. 'Repeatedly' correctly placed after verb phrase.

× Yeah, I'm, uh, I was, uh, factually 80%.

✓ Yes, I have changed about 80% of the time.

Original is incoherent. To answer whether favorite food changed, express degree: 'I have changed about 80% of the time' is still odd; better: 'Yes, my preferences have changed about 80%.' Use present perfect for change over time and clarify meaning. (Suggestion: say 'Yes, my favorite foods have changed a lot; about 80% have changed.')

× So I feel lazy again. And so I need to change my favorite food.

✓ I often feel lazy, so I change my favorite foods sometimes.

'Feel lazy again' is vague. To convey that boredom leads to changing preferences, use 'I often feel bored' or 'I often get tired of them, so I change my favorite foods sometimes.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and natural expressions.