Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and avoid hesitation and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise supporting details (description and personal reason) using linking words. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "aromatic," "spiced rice with meat or vegetables") and remove filler words like "uh." Keep answers within three sentences.

例: My favourite food is biryani because it is an aromatic, spiced rice dish usually made with meat or vegetables. Moreover, I love it for its rich flavours and because it reminds me of family gatherings when my mother cooked it for special occasions.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and organize supporting points with linking words. Be specific about time and frequency, and correct grammar (e.g., "when I was a child"). Avoid long run-on sentences and name one or two typical items with brief reason or consequence.

例: When I was a child, I often ate junk food during school breaks because I wasn't aware of healthy eating. For example, I regularly had samosas and burgers, usually washed down with soft drinks, which made me feel tired afterward.

提案: Good content and specific detail about seasons; reduce hesitation and tighten structure. Start with a direct yes/no plus brief reason, then add one or two concrete examples using linking words (e.g., "for example," "in winter"). Correct minor phrasing ("six distinct seasons") and avoid repeated words.

例: Yes, I do, because Bangladesh has six distinct seasons that bring different produce. For example, in summer I enjoy ripe mangoes and light salads, whereas in winter I prefer hearty dishes like rice with seasonal vegetables.

提案: Combine ideas to avoid repetition and improve fluency. Provide a concise direct answer, then one or two supporting reasons with linking words. Correct small grammar issues ("on special occasions", "in my childhood" could be shortened to "when I was a child"). Use varied vocabulary instead of repeating "my favorite food."

例: No, it hasn't changed; biryani has always been my favourite because it reminds me of family celebrations from my childhood. I still ask my mother to make it for special occasions since it tastes delicious and brings back fond memories.

× It is rice dish with uh, cooked with spices and usually with uh meat or vegetables.

✓ It is a rice dish, cooked with spices and usually with meat or vegetables.

Missing article 'a' before singular count noun 'rice dish' (article error — type 22) and redundant filler words removed. Comma helps link clause 'cooked with spices'. Use 'meat or vegetables' without 'uh'. Suggestion: include appropriate articles and punctuation and avoid fillers. Note: categorized under present participle because 'cooked' functions as a past participle in a reduced relative clause — but main corrections address article and clarity.

× I used to have junk food when I was child because I wasn't aware of healthy eating so during school breaks I used to have shingara, somosa or even burgers and also soft drinks with those junk food.

✓ I used to have junk food when I was a child because I wasn't aware of healthy eating, so during school breaks I used to have shingara, samosa or even burgers, and soft drinks with that junk food.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' (Article errors, ID 22). Also punctuation is needed to separate clauses. 'Samosa' spelling corrected. Use 'that junk food' to refer back to the uncountable noun 'junk food' or keep plural 'those items' — here 'that' is clearer. Recommend adding commas to break clauses and avoid repetition of 'used to'.

× So so I I try to have these different foods and vegetables based on the time.

✓ So I try to eat different foods and vegetables depending on the season.

Repetitions 'So so I I' are disfluent; 'have these different foods' is awkward. 'Based on the time' is unclear; 'depending on the season' is more natural given context. This is a sentence structure problem (ID 26). Suggest speaking concisely and using appropriate phrases for time references.

× For example, in summer I enjoy mangoes and lighter meals in winter.

✓ For example, in summer I enjoy mangoes, and in winter I prefer lighter meals.

Original combined two time references improperly in one clause causing ambiguity. This is a present tense/context issue (ID 6) and sentence structure. Split into two parallel clauses and use 'prefer' for natural contrast. Add comma for clarity.

× I often ask my mother to cook biryani on a special occasions because it reminds me of my family gatherings in my childhood.

✓ I often ask my mother to cook biryani on special occasions because it reminds me of my family gatherings in my childhood.

Use 'special occasions' without 'a' because 'occasions' is plural; 'a special occasions' is ungrammatical (Article errors, ID 22). Remove unnecessary article. Also sentence is otherwise correct; ensure agreement between article and noun number.