Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and concise: give a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and add one specific detail (reason or example). Use linking words if adding detail. Pronunciation and grammar: say 'My favourite food is chocolate cake' and avoid repetition.

例: My favourite food is chocolate cake because I love the rich, sweet taste and moist texture. For example, I often choose a dark chocolate cake with berries for special occasions.

提案: Answer directly with a clear past tense sentence, reduce hesitation, and give a specific supporting detail such as a memory or reason. Use a linking word like 'because' to connect your reason.

例: When I was young, I liked chocolate cake a lot because my parents bought it for my birthday every year. As a result, I always associate that cake with happy family celebrations.

提案: Clarify your meaning and provide a concrete example. Start with a direct sentence, then add a linked detail about seasons or festivals. Use correct vocabulary (e.g. 'favourite food' not 'favorite bowl') and avoid filler words.

例: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For instance, in summer I prefer fresh salads and fruit, while in winter I enjoy hot soups and stews to keep warm.

提案: Answer clearly using correct tense and grammar, then give a specific reason and perhaps a brief comparison. Reduce hesitations and use linking words like 'because' or 'however'.

例: No, my favourite food hasn't changed because I still enjoy sweet flavours. However, I now prefer less sugary desserts, choosing dark chocolate cake rather than very sweet frosting.

× Umm, my favorite food is umm, is a cake, umm, a chocolate cake.

✓ Umm, my favorite food is a chocolate cake.

The original sentence repeats verbs and includes an unnecessary article placement. Remove the repeated 'is' and the extra 'a' before 'cake' is fine only once: 'is a chocolate cake'. Keep it concise and avoid hesitation words in formal responses. Use 'is a chocolate cake' to state preference clearly.

× What you say dessert? Umm, I think I I like to eat some sweet things.

✓ Do you mean dessert? Umm, I think I like to eat sweet things.

The phrase 'What you say dessert?' is ungrammatical; use 'Do you mean dessert?' to ask for clarification. Also remove the duplicated 'I' and the unnecessary 'some' before uncountable plural 'sweet things'—'eat sweet things' is more natural.

× Umm, also a chocolate cake, umm, because, umm, I like to eat uh, something, uh, uh, it's sweet and I'm.

✓ Umm, also chocolate cake, because I like to eat things that are sweet.

The original has sentence fragments and an incomplete clause 'and I'm.' Convert to a complete present-tense sentence: 'I like to eat things that are sweet.' Use plural 'things' or 'foods' and 'are sweet' to describe them.

× Yeah, I it's different food at different times. Umm, because, uh, I think the favorite bowl will be changed.

✓ Yeah, I eat different foods at different times. Umm, because I think my favorite foods change.

'I it's different food' is ungrammatical—use 'I eat different foods'. 'Food' should be plural when general. 'The favorite bowl will be changed' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'my favorite foods change' (present simple) to express habitual change. Use 'change' not 'will be changed'.

× No, my favorite food didn't change because I think sweets things is very umm, delicious.

✓ No, my favorite food didn't change because I think sweet things are very delicious.

Agreement errors: 'sweets things' is incorrect order and form—use 'sweet things'. Also plural subject 'sweet things' requires plural verb 'are' not 'is'. Keep 'didn't change' for past reference but follow with present-tense opinion 'I think' is acceptable; ensure subject-verb agreement.