Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more accurate and natural with word choice, correct vocabulary errors, reduce redundancy, and keep answers concise (max 4–5 sentences). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific reasons with linking words. Avoid incorrect nouns (e.g., “topics and flowers,” “full of flour”) and awkward phrasing.

例: My favourite food is pizza. I first tried it when I was four and have loved it ever since because it is very versatile. For example, I often choose a thin-crust pizza topped with fresh tomatoes, basil and mozzarella, which tastes light and satisfying. I prefer simple, high-quality ingredients rather than heavy sauces.

提案: Open with a direct topic sentence about childhood preferences, then give specific examples and link sentences for coherence. Avoid repeating ideas (“unhealthy for my health”) and use natural collocations (“didn't like vegetables” not “don't have a good relationship with vegetables”).

例: When I was young I preferred fast foods and meat dishes rather than vegetables. For instance, I often ate burgers and fried chicken, but as I grew older I tried to cut down on fast food because it was bad for my health.

提案: Answer the question directly first (yes or no), then explain with specific seasonal examples or habits. Remove filler words (umm) and unclear phrasing. If you don’t change meals seasonally, briefly explain why and give 1–2 details with linking words.

例: No, I usually don't change my diet with the seasons because I'm quite a picky eater. As a result, I tend to eat the same dishes all year, such as meatballs, potatoes and pasta, instead of switching to lighter summer meals or heartier winter stews.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence confirming change, then give concise specific details and link them. Use correct tense and natural expressions (e.g., “I loved” not “I love” for past). Add a brief reason why preferences changed or a short example about current preference.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. When I was three I loved pasta with ketchup, but my tastes matured and now I prefer pizza. For example, I enjoy eating pizza with my family in Italy because I appreciate the fresh ingredients and simple flavours.

× I tried it when I was 4 and I have loved it ever since because it is versatile, you can choose different topics and flowers, and it tastes very satisfying.

✓ I tried it when I was four and I have loved it ever since because it is versatile; you can choose different toppings and flavors, and it tastes very satisfying.

Mixed minor word choice and punctuation; 'have loved' is present perfect and correctly used with 'ever since' so keep it. Replace numerals with words for formality. 'topics and flowers' are incorrect word choices—should be 'toppings and flavors'. Use a semicolon or conjunction to separate independent clauses.

× I especially enjoy it thin crust pizza with fresh tomatoes, basil, and mozzarella because the ingredients are simple but full of flour.

✓ I especially enjoy thin-crust pizza with fresh tomatoes, basil, and mozzarella because the ingredients are simple but full of flavor.

Article and adjective order: omit 'it' before 'thin-crust pizza'. Use hyphenated compound adjective 'thin-crust' before a noun. 'full of flour' is wrong word choice; 'flavor' conveys intended meaning. 'a' before specific pizza is unnecessary here.

× I don't have a good relationship with vegetables, that's why I prefer eating fast food or meats in my meal times.

✓ I don't have a good relationship with vegetables, so I prefer eating fast food or meat at meal times.

Comma splice: replace comma + 'that's why' with 'so' for clearer connection. 'Meats' is unnatural here; use uncountable 'meat'. 'in my meal times' should be 'at meal times' or 'at mealtimes' preposition correction.

× But I try to reduce fast food because it's unhealthy for my health.

✓ But I try to reduce my fast-food intake because it's unhealthy for my health.

Awkward phrasing: 'reduce fast food' should be 'reduce my fast-food intake'. Alternatively, 'eat less fast food'. The rest repeats 'unhealthy' and 'for my health'—you can say simply 'because it's unhealthy' but corrected keeps meaning.

× And now I don't because unfortunately, I'm a picky eater.

✓ Now I don't, because unfortunately I'm a picky eater.

Beginning with 'And' is informal and unnecessary; remove or keep 'Now' alone. Comma placement: comma after 'don't' and remove comma after 'unfortunately'. Ensure sentence is complete and flows.

× That's why without, umm, without attention, I always eat the same things, like meatballs, potatoes, uh, pasta, pizza, burger.

✓ That's why, without thinking about it, I always eat the same things, like meatballs, potatoes, pasta, pizza, and burgers.

Fillers 'umm' and 'uh' should be omitted in written response. 'without attention' is awkward; use 'without thinking about it'. Use parallel list and include article/plural consistency: 'burgers' plural to match other items. Add commas and 'and' before final item.

× Not that much.

✓ Not very much.

Colloquial fragment; replace with 'Not very much' for a grammatically acceptable short response. It's a comment fragment but acceptable as short answer.

× When I was three I love eating pasta with ketchup sauce, but now I don't like eating pasta with ketchup.

✓ When I was three I loved eating pasta with ketchup, but now I don't like eating pasta with ketchup.

Tense inconsistency: describing past preference requires past tense 'loved', not present 'love'. 'ketchup sauce' is redundant; use 'ketchup'. Keep contrast with present 'don't like'.

× My favorite food is pizza and I prefer eating pizza in Italy with my family.

✓ My favorite food is pizza, and I prefer to eat pizza in Italy with my family.

Parallel structure: 'prefer eating' is acceptable but 'prefer to eat' is more natural here. Add comma before 'and'. Ensure tense and meaning fit: expressing a general preference.