Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more precise and natural: use singular/plural correctly, avoid repetition, and add a brief specific detail (type of burger or favorite topping). Keep under five sentences and use linking words for coherence.

例: My favourite food is the cheeseburger. I enjoy it because the juicy beef patty and melted cheese taste great, and it’s easy to share with my family when we meet. For example, we often order a large burger platter with fries and extra pickles for weekend gatherings.

提案: Good content and personal detail. Improve natural phrasing and sentence accuracy (avoid 'happily and full'); combine ideas with linking words and correct word order for clarity.

例: When I was young, I loved noodle soup because it was warm and comforting and my mother always made it for me. For example, I often had it for dinner after school with vegetables and a boiled egg, so I would feel satisfied and happy.

提案: Good idea but fix hesitations, word order errors and be more specific. Avoid filler ('uh'), correct the December sentence, and use linking words (for example, however) to contrast seasons.

例: Yes, I do. In summer I prefer light dishes such as salads and fresh fruit because it's hot; for example, I often eat watermelon and cold noodles in July. In contrast, during winter I cook heartier meals like chicken stew to stay warm.

提案: Strong response with clear contrast and reasons. Improve natural phrasing and small grammar (article usage, capitalization), and make it slightly more concise while keeping supporting example.

例: Yes, it has. As a child I loved chicken nuggets because they were tasty and simple, but now I prefer grilled salmon and vegetables since they’re healthier and I enjoy the flavour more. For example, I usually order salmon when I eat out with friends.

× Well, my favorite food is burger.

✓ Well, my favorite food is a burger.

Use an article before a singular countable noun. 'Burger' is a singular countable noun and requires 'a' (indefinite article) when speaking generally about one item. Suggestion: use 'a burger' or use plural 'burgers' if speaking generally (e.g., 'my favorite food is burgers').

× For example, I usually have burger at parties on or weekends.

✓ For example, I usually have a burger at parties or on weekends.

Two issues: missing article before 'burger' and incorrect preposition order. Use 'a burger' for a singular countable noun. Use 'on weekends' and combine events with 'or' correctly: 'at parties or on weekends.' Suggestion: 'at parties or on weekends' or 'on weekends and at parties.'

× Well, when I was young I liked noodle soup a lot because it was warm and comforting and my mother made it for me.

✓ Well, when I was young I liked noodle soup a lot because it was warm and comforting and my mother made it for me.

No article error; sentence is correct. (Included to show no change needed.)

× For instance, I often had it for dinner after school with some veggies and eggs, and I remember happily and full.

✓ For instance, I often had it for dinner after school with some veggies and eggs, and I remember being happy and full.

The original uses incorrect forms: 'I remember happily and full' is ungrammatical because 'remember' should be followed by a gerund phrase when recalling a state: 'remember being happy and full.' 'Happily' is an adverb and doesn't match the desired adjective 'happy.' Suggestion: use 'remember being happy and full.'

× In summer I prefer light dishes like salads and fruits because it's hot, and in winter I eat more soups and stews to keep warm.

✓ In summer I prefer light dishes like salads and fruit because it's hot, and in winter I eat more soups and stews to keep warm.

Use 'fruit' as a noncount noun when referring to fruit in general (not individual pieces). 'Fruits' can be used when referring to different kinds, but 'fruit' is more natural here. No tense error.

× For instance, I often have watermelon and cold noodles in July, but December in I cook chicken.

✓ For instance, I often have watermelon and cold noodles in July, but in December I cook chicken.

Incorrect word order: 'December in I' should be 'in December I.' Place the prepositional phrase 'in December' before the subject or after the verb: 'in December I cook chicken' or 'I cook chicken in December.' Suggestion: 'in December I cook chicken.'

× Well, yes, my favorite food has changed since I was child.

✓ Well, yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a child.

Missing article before 'child.' Use 'a child' after 'was' to indicate the speaker's age period. Suggestion: 'since I was a child.'

× I used to love chicken Nuggets because they were tasty and simple, but now I prefer grilled salmon and veggies because it's healthier and I like the flavor more.

✓ I used to love chicken nuggets because they were tasty and simple, but now I prefer grilled salmon and veggies because it's healthier and I like the flavor more.

Capitalize only proper nouns; 'nuggets' should be lowercase unless part of a brand name. Also 'chicken nuggets' plural matches 'they were.' No other grammatical issue. Suggestion: 'chicken nuggets' lowercase.