Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid fillers (uh, um). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Include a brief reason or example to make the answer more informative.

例: I love pizza, especially cheese pizza. I enjoy it because the melted cheese and crispy crust are comforting, and I often order it when I’m relaxing with friends on weekends.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, reduce repetition and fillers, and add a specific example or reason. Use linking words (for example, because) to make your point clearer and more natural.

例: When I was a child, I loved fast food, especially burgers and pizza, because they tasted exciting and were easy to eat at parties. For example, I remember having burgers at birthday parties with my classmates.

提案: If you don’t understand a question, ask for clarification politely. If you do understand, give a direct answer with one or two specific details and use linking words to explain seasonal variation.

例: Could you please repeat the question? If you mean seasonal eating, then yes: I eat lighter foods like salads and fruits in summer, but I prefer soups and roasted vegetables in winter because they are warming and comforting.

提案: Answer directly and clearly with fewer fillers. Use linking words (for example, because or however) and provide one specific detail about why your preference stayed the same or changed.

例: My favourite foods haven’t changed much because I still enjoy fast foods like pizza, shawarma and burgers. For instance, I still choose pizza on special occasions because it reminds me of family gatherings.

× I like to all pizzas uh uh, especially uh, cheese pizza is good.

✓ I like all pizzas, especially cheese pizza.

The original sentence misuses the infinitive 'to' with 'all pizzas' and has an unnecessary verb 'is' after 'cheese pizza'. Use the direct object 'all pizzas' without 'to' and make 'especially cheese pizza' a noun phrase to match the structure. Suggestion: say 'I like all pizzas, especially cheese pizza.'

× The best of pizza in my opinion.

✓ In my opinion, pizza is the best.

The original is a fragment and uses incorrect word order. You need a subject and verb: 'pizza is the best' and place the opinion phrase 'In my opinion' at the beginning or end. Suggestion: restructure to 'In my opinion, pizza is the best.'

× I think umm, the fast foods are the best when I was child, uh, maybe all all children's like fast food, pizza, burger, yes.

✓ I think fast food was the best when I was a child; maybe all children liked fast food, like pizza and burgers.

Tense consistency error: 'I think' is present but refers to past time 'when I was a child', so use past tense 'was' and 'liked' for habitual past actions. Also 'the fast foods' is incorrect article use and plurality: use 'fast food' as an uncountable noun. 'Children's' is possessive but here plural 'children' is correct. Also add article 'a' before 'child'. Suggestion: 'I think fast food was the best when I was a child; maybe all children liked fast food, like pizza and burgers.'

× Sorry, I don't understand.

✓ Sorry, I don't understand the question.

The original is grammatically correct but lacks the object; adding 'the question' clarifies what is not understood. This improves completeness and appropriateness in the conversation.

× I don't think so because umm, I loved uh, fast foods when I I was child and now I'm still loved pizza, shawarma, burgers.

✓ I don't think so because I loved fast food when I was a child, and now I still love pizza, shawarma, and burgers.

Mixed tense and verb form mistakes: 'I don't think so' (present) is fine, but describing past preference needs past 'loved' for childhood. 'I I was child' misses article and has duplication; use 'I was a child'. 'I'm still loved' incorrectly uses past participle 'loved' and passive-like form; use present 'still love' to express current preference. Also 'fast foods' should be 'fast food' (uncountable). Suggestion: 'I don't think so because I loved fast food when I was a child, and now I still love pizza, shawarma, and burgers.'