Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise: start with one clear topic sentence (e.g. “My favourite foods are pasta and chocolate.”), avoid filler words (umm, uh) and repetition, and give one or two specific details about why you like them using linking words (for example, because, and). Aim for 2–4 well-formed sentences.

例: My favourite foods are pasta and chocolate. I enjoy pasta because it’s versatile and comforting, especially when it has a rich tomato sauce. Also, I love milk chocolate from my country because it’s very creamy and comes in many varieties.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and add specific, chronological detail. Avoid excessive repetition and fillers. Use a linking phrase to show time (for example, “since” or “when I was”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and include a reason or memory to make it more informative.

例: I liked chocolate when I was young and I still do. Since I was about five, I often had chocolate after school because my parents would give me a small treat, and that habit made it my favourite.

提案: Answer directly then give clear examples using linking words (for example, “for example”, “however”, “on the other hand”). Avoid mixed negatives and unclear statements (don’t say “Oh, no” then list differences). Be specific about which foods you eat at which occasions and why.

例: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, at New Year I usually eat salads and meat for a festive family meal, but on my birthday I prefer cake and other sweet treats. I also often eat chocolate as a favourite treat throughout the year.

提案: Give a concise direct answer and then give a specific reason or short example. Avoid repetition and incorrect phrasing. Use one or two sentences: state whether it has changed, then explain why with clear grammar (for example, “No, it hasn’t changed because…”).

例: No, it hasn’t changed — I still prefer chocolate. I grew up eating it regularly and I enjoy its rich taste, so it remains my favourite even now.

× My favorite food is umm, pasta and uh, chocolate when I would like to eat in something.

✓ My favorite foods are pasta and chocolate when I want to eat something.

Original uses singular 'food' but lists two items and has incorrect article/phrase 'when I would like to eat in something.' Change to plural 'foods' and simpler phrase 'when I want to eat something' to match present preference and correct article usage. Suggestion: Use plural with multiple items and use 'want to' for present desire.

× No sweetie, I eat chocolate every time.

✓ No, sweetie, I eat chocolate all the time.

'Every time' is misplaced; the idiomatic expression for frequent habit is 'all the time.' Also punctuation placement: add comma after 'No.' Suggestion: Use 'all the time' for habitual frequency.

× Uh, in my country you have a lot of uh, types of chocolate.

✓ In my country, we have many types of chocolate.

Use 'we' instead of 'you' to speak about one's country; 'a lot of' is acceptable but 'many' is more natural with countable 'types.' Also add comma after introductory phrase. Suggestion: Use appropriate pronoun and match quantifier to noun type.

× Like, uh, milk chocolate is my favorite chocolate ever.

✓ For example, milk chocolate is my favorite.

Avoid redundant repetition 'favorite chocolate ever.' Use 'for example' instead of 'like' in semi-formal speech and drop duplicate noun. Suggestion: Simplify and avoid repetition.

× Uh, I was like chocolate too.

✓ I liked chocolate too when I was young.

Original 'was like chocolate' incorrectly attempts to express past preference. Use past tense verb 'liked' and clarify time frame. Suggestion: Use 'liked' to indicate past habits or preferences.

× This is my favorite, uh, food ever.

✓ That was my favorite food when I was young.

Context asks about childhood; keep past tense and avoid filler 'ever.' Use 'that was' to refer to childhood preference. Suggestion: Match tense to the time period referenced.

× I eat and I eat it.

✓ I used to eat it a lot.

Repeating 'I eat and I eat it' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'used to' to indicate habitual past action or 'I eat it a lot' for present habit; here past fits context. Suggestion: Choose 'used to' for past habitual actions.

× So since I was 5 and then I'm 18 and uh, I just like it now.

✓ I have liked it since I was five, and now I am 18, so I still like it.

Combine clauses clearly and use present perfect 'have liked' to express an action starting in the past and continuing to the present. Expand numbers to words for formality. Suggestion: Use present perfect for actions from past to present and maintain clear clause order.

× Oh, no. For example, at the new year I eat, uh, salads and, uh, meat.

✓ Oh, no. For example, at New Year I eat salads and meat.

Use 'New Year' without 'the' when referring to the holiday period; remove unnecessary commas. 'Salads and meat' is fine without commas. Suggestion: Capitalize 'New Year' and omit 'the' when speaking about the holiday generally.

× But on my birthday I eat some cake, sweeties or junk food.

✓ But on my birthday I eat cake, sweets, or junk food.

Use 'cake' without 'some' in this context and 'sweets' (plural) instead of 'sweeties' for standard English. Suggestion: Prefer 'sweets' and omit 'some' when listing typical birthday treats.

× So favorite treats and uh, I will say chocolate.

✓ My favorite treat is chocolate.

Original fragment 'So favorite treats and I will say chocolate' is ungrammatical. Use a complete sentence with subject and verb: 'My favorite treat is chocolate.' Suggestion: Ensure sentences have a clear subject and verb.

× No, because I love chocolate.

✓ No, my favorite food has not changed because I love chocolate.

Question asks if favorite has changed; respond directly. Use present perfect 'has not changed' to indicate change over time, then give reason. Suggestion: Answer the question fully and use present perfect for changes over time.

× I love chocolate and I think I would like chocolate and we love chocolate every time of my life.

✓ I love chocolate; I have liked it throughout my life.

Original mixes pronouns and modalities inconsistently ('would like' and 'we love chocolate every time of my life'). Use 'have liked' to express continuous preference and keep pronoun consistent ('I'). Suggestion: Use consistent subject pronouns and present perfect for continued states.

× It's so rich when I could eat every day at meals and breakfast at lunch.

✓ It's so rich that I could eat it every day for breakfast, lunch, and dinner.

Original has wrong conjunctions and prepositions and unclear meal listing. Use 'so...that' structure and list meals correctly: breakfast, lunch, and dinner. Suggestion: Use 'so...that' and proper meal names and preposition 'for' when saying 'eat for breakfast'.