Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid overstatements like 'undisputedly' unless natural, and combine supporting details with a linking phrase. Also correct subject-verb agreement and article use.

例: My favourite food is Brazilian barbecue. I love it because it offers a wide variety of grilled meats, and the meat is often seasoned and cooked over an open flame, which gives it a smoky flavour.

提案: Use past tense consistently and simplify phrasing. Give one or two specific supporting details and link them logically. Fix singular/plural and article errors.

例: When I was a child, my favourite food was KFC. I liked it because of the unique seasoning, and it stood out in my hometown of Beijing in the 1990s when it was one of the first international fast-food chains there.

提案: Make the sentence structure natural and use present simple for habitual actions. Use linking words for contrast and correct tense in the final sentence.

例: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in summer I enjoy Chongqing-style hotpot because it's spicy and refreshing for me, whereas in winter I prefer my mother's chicken porridge because it is comforting and warming.

提案: Use past tense for childhood and present perfect or present simple for current habits. Be concise and give a clear reason with correct grammar. Avoid vague phrases like 'came to the store'.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed. I used to eat a lot of sweets and fried chicken as a child, but now I avoid them because I have learned they are unhealthy and I prefer healthier options.

× My favorite food, undisputedly is the Brazilian barbecue.

✓ My favorite food, undisputedly, is Brazilian barbecue.

The issue is punctuation and article usage: a comma is needed after 'undisputedly' to separate the adverbial phrase, and 'the' before 'Brazilian barbecue' is not necessary when speaking generally. Improve by placing commas around parenthetical adverbs and avoid unnecessary definite article when referring to a type of cuisine.

× There are wide variety of meats available in Brazilian BBQ.

✓ There is a wide variety of meats available in Brazilian BBQ.

Subject-verb agreement with the noun phrase 'a wide variety' requires singular verb 'is'. The determiner 'a' makes the head noun singular. Improve by matching verb number to the head noun: 'a wide variety is'.

× When I was a kid, my favorite food was the Kentucky Fried Chicken from the United States of America.

✓ When I was a kid, my favorite food was Kentucky Fried Chicken from the United States of America.

Using 'the' before a brand name or proper noun like 'Kentucky Fried Chicken' is unnecessary in this context. This is not strictly tense-related but fits article usage; removing 'the' is more natural. Keep past tense 'was' to match 'When I was a kid'.

× I like the Kentucky Fried Chicken because it's got the unique seasoning and it was one of the first fast food chain to open at my hometown, Beijing.

✓ I liked Kentucky Fried Chicken because it had a unique seasoning, and it was one of the first fast-food chains to open in my hometown, Beijing.

Tense consistency: the sentence refers to past experiences, so use past tense 'liked' and 'had'. Also correct countable noun agreement: 'one of the first fast-food chains' (plural 'chains' after 'one of the'). Use 'in my hometown' not 'at'. Hyphenate 'fast-food' when used as a compound adjective.

× It was already widely available during the 1990s.

✓ It was already widely available during the 1990s.

This sentence is correct as written. It uses past tense appropriately to describe availability in the 1990s.

× I do it slightly different food at the different time of the year.

✓ I eat slightly different foods at different times of the year.

The original has incorrect verb 'do it' and wrong noun number and article usage. Use verb 'eat' for consuming food, plural 'foods' to indicate variety, and plural 'times' since 'different times of the year' is intended. Remove the unnecessary definite article 'the'.

× For example during the summer I like Chongqing style hot pots and during the winter I'd prefer the chicken porridge cooked by my mother.

✓ For example, during the summer I like Chongqing-style hot pots, and during the winter I'd prefer the chicken porridge cooked by my mother.

Add commas after introductory phrase 'For example' and before coordinating conjunction for clarity. Hyphenate 'Chongqing-style' as a compound adjective modifying 'hot pots'. The rest is grammatically correct and tense-consistent.

× It gave me a warm feeling.

✓ It gives me a warm feeling.

Context indicates a habitual preference ('during the winter I'd prefer...') so present tense 'gives' is better to express the ongoing effect when she eats it. If speaker meant a past single event, 'gave' would be correct; here maintain present with 'gives'.

× Yes, during my childhood I like sweets as well as fried chicken, but now fried chicken and sweet doesn't appear to me that much anymore compared when I was a kid because I came to the store that these two type of food are really unhealthy.

✓ Yes, during my childhood I liked sweets as well as fried chicken, but now fried chicken and sweets don't appeal to me as much as when I was a kid because I came to realize that these two types of food are really unhealthy.

Multiple errors: tense consistency requires past 'liked' for childhood. Plural agreement: 'sweets' and 'don't' (plural) and 'types' plural. Verb choice: 'appeal to me' rather than 'appear to me'. Use comparative phrase 'as much as when I was a kid'. Correct phrase 'came to realize' instead of 'came to the store'. Overall, ensure subject-verb agreement and correct word choice for meaning.