Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “My favourite food is grilled chicken.”), avoid filler words like “uh,” and correct grammar (use singular/plural and consistent tense). Include one supporting detail (why you like it) using a linking word (because/so) and keep to 2–3 short sentences.

例: My favourite food is grilled chicken because it tastes smoky and is healthy. I prefer it over fried chicken because it has less oil, so I eat it regularly.

提案: Answer directly with a clear past-tense sentence (e.g., “When I was young, I liked eggs and chicken.”). Remove fillers and contradictory phrases. If adding a reason, use a linking word (because/so) and be specific about which foods you meant.

例: When I was young, I liked eating eggs and chicken because they were easy to cook and tasted good. I didn’t enjoy vegetables then, although I knew they were healthy.

提案: Give a clear yes/no followed by a concise explanation using linking words (for example/so/during). Be specific about seasonal foods or examples of dishes and keep sentences short and grammatical.

例: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, in summer I eat more salads and fresh fruit, while in winter I prefer hot soups and stews because they keep me warm.

提案: Start with a clear statement about change (Yes/No) and use correct grammar: ‘My favourite food has changed.’ Explain briefly why using linking words (because/since) and give one concrete example of current preference.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since childhood because I used to prefer fried and unhealthy foods. Now I mostly prefer vegetables and grilled dishes because I want to stay healthy, so I always include vegetables in my lunch.

× My favorite food is uh non veg and also I used to take vegetarian was probably I prefer to have chicken on my diet that too grilled 1 is better for me.

✓ My favorite food is non-vegetarian; I used to be vegetarian, but I now prefer grilled chicken.

The original sentence has plural/singular and count issues and is also run-on. 'non veg' should be 'non-vegetarian' (adjective) and 'used to take vegetarian' is ungrammatical; use 'used to be vegetarian' to indicate past state. '1 is better for me' is unclear; 'grilled chicken' is the intended singular noun phrase. Suggestion: simplify into clear clauses and use correct noun/adjective forms. ID:1

× Uh, in my very own age, I would always like to have, uh, you know, that special chicken egg, uh, kind of this because vegetable I, I do hate eating vegetables, even though it has a good nutrition.

✓ When I was young, I always liked to eat special chicken and eggs because I hated vegetables, even though they are nutritious.

Use past tense for habits in the past: 'would always like' is awkward; use 'always liked'. 'In my very own age' is incorrect; use 'when I was young'. 'Chicken egg' should be 'chicken and eggs' or 'chicken eggs'; clearer: 'chicken and eggs'. 'I do hate' in past should be 'I hated'. 'It has a good nutrition' has agreement and article issues; use 'they are nutritious' or 'they have good nutritional value'. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and correct subject-verb agreement. ID:5

× I love to have, uh, young vegetables.

✓ I liked to eat young vegetables.

Pronoun and tense mismatch: within the previous past context, use past tense 'liked'. 'Love to have' conflicts with previous 'hated vegetables'; align tense and meaning. Also 'have' is less precise than 'eat'. Suggestion: choose consistent tense and clearer verbs. ID:12

× Yes, definitely Rene charter from enhance to another for any reasons.

✓ Yes, definitely; I travel from one place to another for various reasons.

The original sentence contains unintelligible words 'Rene charter from enhance'—likely intended as 'from one place to another'. This is a sentence structure and word-choice problem. Use a clear subject and verb: 'I travel from one place to another for various reasons.' Suggestion: avoid unclear fragments and use standard expressions. ID:26

× I usually try uh, the particular areas, uh, the special foods because that is the only way I can experience the exact taste from the place.

✓ I usually try the special foods of particular areas because that is the only way I can experience the authentic taste of a place.

Preposition errors: use 'of' to indicate foods belonging to areas ('foods of particular areas' or 'the special foods from particular areas'). 'Exact taste from the place' should be 'authentic taste of a place.' Suggestion: use 'of' or 'from' appropriately and prefer 'authentic' to 'exact'. ID:11

× So yeah, definitely yeah, I have tasted.

✓ So yes, I have tasted them.

'I have tasted' is grammatical but needs an object for clarity: 'tasted them' (the foods). Also remove redundant 'yeah'. Suggestion: include the object and avoid repetition. ID:5

× Well umm that's definitely my favorite. Food has been changed from my my childhood to now because during my childhood I always prefer to have non health, but when I've grown up and at present I mostly prefer to have vegetables.

✓ Well, my favorite food has changed since my childhood because when I was a child I preferred unhealthy foods, but now I mostly prefer vegetables.

Tense consistency: use present perfect 'has changed' to indicate change to the present, and past simple 'preferred' for childhood habits. 'I always prefer' should be past 'I preferred.' 'Non health' is incorrect; use 'unhealthy foods.' 'At present' is fine but redundant with 'now.' Suggestion: keep tenses consistent and use correct adjectives. ID:6

× Without vegetables I cannot complete my lunch for example.

✓ For example, I cannot finish my lunch without vegetables.

Word order is awkward. Place the example phrase appropriately and use 'finish' instead of 'complete' for eating. Suggestion: reorder to 'For example, I cannot finish my lunch without vegetables.' ID:26