Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more natural: give one concise topic sentence naming the food, correct country spelling, and avoid pronoun errors. Use linking words to add a brief specific detail (e.g., what you like about it) and limit to 3–4 sentences. Also use more precise vocabulary (e.g., "variety" instead of "a huge amount").

例: My favourite food is Brazilian barbecue, often called churrasco. I enjoy it because it offers a wide variety of grilled meats, along with salads and fruit. In particular, I like the smoky flavour of the beef and the variety of side dishes.

提案: Make the answer direct and grammatically correct: start with a clear topic sentence ("When I was a child, I liked..."), avoid awkward phrases, and give one or two specific supporting details (which menu items, why you liked them). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'because' or 'because of'.

例: When I was a child in Beijing, I loved eating at KFC. I especially enjoyed the fried chicken and the fries because they tasted different from home-cooked food. My mother often took me there as a treat after school.

提案: Correct grammar and add specific reasons: use clear linking phrases ("In summer... because..."). Fix verb agreement and awkward expressions (e.g., 'It makes me sweat' not 'sweets'). Provide one concrete detail about why each food suits the season.

例: Yes. In summer I often eat spicy southwestern hot pot because the spicy broth makes me sweat and helps me cool down. In winter I prefer chicken soup because it is warm and comforting when the weather is cold.

提案: Be concise and avoid hesitation. State the change clearly with one topic sentence and give one or two specific reasons why your preference changed. Use correct vocabulary and avoid unclear phrases ('B selling BBQ').

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. I used to prefer KFC, but now I choose Brazilian barbecue because I think it offers healthier options like grilled meat and vegetables, whereas fast food feels too greasy and processed.

× My favorite food is Brilliant BBQ known as Suhasco and Portuguese.

✓ My favorite food is Brazilian BBQ, known as churrasco and Portuguese cuisine.

The student used 'Brilliant' incorrectly as an adjective for a cuisine and 'Suhasco' is likely a misspelling of 'churrasco' or 'churrasco' (Brazilian BBQ). Also 'Portuguese' should be 'Portuguese cuisine' to match noun usage. Replace wrong adjective and provide correct nouns for clarity and accuracy.

× The Brazilian BBQ not only offers a huge amount of meat, he also offers some vegetables and fruit as well.

✓ The Brazilian BBQ not only offers a large amount of meat, but it also offers some vegetables and fruit.

Subject 'The Brazilian BBQ' is a thing and requires the pronoun 'it', not 'he'. Also use 'large' instead of 'huge amount' which collocates with uncountable nouns; add 'but' to pair with 'not only'. This fixes subject-pronoun agreement and parallel structure.

× Moreover, all of them are extremely yummy.

✓ Moreover, all of the dishes are extremely tasty.

'All of them' is vague; specify 'all of the dishes'. 'Yummy' is informal; 'tasty' is more appropriate for test responses. This corrects reference and word choice.

× When I was the primary school kid in Beijing, my favorite type of food was the KFC.

✓ When I was a primary school kid in Beijing, my favorite type of food was KFC.

Use 'a primary school kid' rather than 'the primary school kid' unless a specific role is meant. Also 'KFC' as a brand name does not need 'the' or 'the KFC' is possible but 'was KFC' is natural. This fixes article and singular/plural reference.

× There's not a single way goes by that my mom does not take me to the nearest KFC restaurant.

✓ There wasn't a day that went by when my mom did not take me to the nearest KFC restaurant.

The original mixes tenses and uses unnatural phrasing. For past habit use past tense: 'There wasn't a day that went by when...'. This corrects article use and idiomatic expression.

× I like the fried chicken and American style.

✓ I liked the fried chicken and the American style of cooking.

Match past tense 'liked' with earlier past-time reference. 'American style' needs 'of cooking' to be a complete noun phrase, and include 'the' for reference. This clarifies meaning and grammatical completeness.

× Yes, during the summer I like to eat southwestern Chinese hot pots.

✓ Yes, during the summer I like to eat southwestern Chinese hot pot.

Use singular 'hot pot' as a general dish type. Present simple 'like' is fine for habitual preference. This corrects noun number and collocation.

× It make me sweets a lot but I feel pretty good anyway.

✓ It makes me sweat a lot, but I feel pretty good anyway.

Use third person singular verb 'makes' to agree with 'It'. The student meant 'sweat' not 'sweets'. Correct verb form and word choice.

× During the winter I like chicken soups.

✓ During the winter I like chicken soup.

Use uncountable 'chicken soup' to refer to the dish generally. This fixes pluralization and collocation.

× It's very relieving in the coldness.

✓ It's very comforting in the cold weather.

'Relieving' is not the correct adjective for a comforting effect; 'comforting' fits. 'Coldness' is awkward; use 'cold weather'. This corrects word choice and collocation.

× Yes, I used to like the KFC as my favorite food, but now, uh, the popularity has declined, has declined everywhere and I was affected by it because KFC is just way too unhealthy.

✓ Yes, I used to like KFC as my favorite food, but now its popularity has declined everywhere and I have been affected by that because KFC is just too unhealthy.

Use 'used to' for past habit and remove unnecessary 'the' before brand. Use present perfect 'has declined' for a change that affects the present and 'I have been affected' to show ongoing effect. Remove filler repetition and informal 'way'. This corrects tense consistency and article use.

× Probably even B selling BBQ is healthier.

✓ Probably even Brazilian BBQ is healthier.

The phrase 'B selling BBQ' is ungrammatical—likely a typo. Replace with 'Brazilian BBQ' to make a clear comparative statement. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.