Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更自然、简洁并修正常见语言错误。开头直接给出主题句，接着用一到两句具体细节支持，并用连接词使表达更连贯。注意避免重复（如“friends and families”重复含义）、填充词（如“MMM”）与语法错误（如“very various flavors”）。

例: My favourite food is hot pot. I like it because I can choose different ingredients and cook them at the table, which makes meals social and fun. The broths also come in many flavours, so everyone can find something they enjoy.

提案: 答案用词和语法需改进。“sweetie”不是常用形容词，改为“sweet”或具体说“sweets/desserts”。避免重复表达（第二句重复“I really like it”）。可先给主题句，再用具体例子和原因支持，注意时态一致。

例: When I was young, I loved sweet desserts such as ice cream and cream cakes because they tasted rich and made me feel happy. I especially enjoyed having them as treats after school.

提案: 回答逻辑和表达需要清晰化并修正错误。注意时态和语法（如“the hot the weather is cold”不通顺）以及词汇搭配（“warming songs”明显错误，应为 “warming soups”或“warm dishes”）。使用连接词（However/On the other hand）以提高连贯性。具体说明在不同季节喜欢的食物和原因即可。

例: Yes. In summer I prefer cold foods like ice cream and chilled desserts because they help me cool down. In winter I usually eat hot dishes such as hot pot or warm soups because they are comforting and keep me warm.

提案: 需要更清晰地对比过去与现在，并修正常见错误（例如“Swiss tea and icy”不清楚，时态与搭配问题，‘brought’应为‘brings’或‘makes me feel’）。用一至两句表明变化并解释原因，注意用词准确。

例: Yes, it has changed. As a child I enjoyed icy treats like ice cream and creamy cakes, but now I prefer spicy foods such as hot pot because I enjoy bold flavours and eating with friends makes it relaxing.

× My favorite food is hot pot. While eating with my friends and families, we often eat hot pot.

✓ My favorite food is hot pot. When eating with my friends and family, we often have hot pot.

原句中“families”在此語境下不應使用複數，應為“family”（家庭）或省略。並且第二句中重複“eat hot pot”較生硬，將第一個分句改為動名詞短語更自然。建議：同一語境下使用單數“family”或使用“friends and family”。

× We can put what we want to eat into the pot and usually it has very various flavors MMM which makes the meal both tasty and relaxed.

✓ We can put what we want to eat into the pot, and it usually has a variety of flavors, which makes the meal both tasty and enjoyable.

原句用法混亂：“very various”不自然，應改為“a variety of”或“various”；“relaxed”用來形容“meal”不合適，應改為“enjoyable”或“relaxing”。另外添加標點使句子結構清晰。建議：使用固定搭配“a variety of flavors”並選擇語義匹配的形容詞。

× When I was young, I liked sweetie food like ice cream or cream cakes, which tasted sweetie and brought me a sense of happiness.

✓ When I was young, I liked sweet foods like ice cream or cream cakes, which tasted sweet and gave me a sense of happiness.

“sweetie”是名詞或愛稱，不可用作形容詞修飾food或taste；應用形容詞“sweet”。“brought me a sense of happiness”語義可，但與時態一致改為“gave me”。建議：使用正確形容詞“sweet”並注意時態一致性。

× I really like it.

✓ I really liked them.

此句位於描述過去喜好的段落（過去時態情境），原句用現在時顯得時態不一致。將動詞改為過去式“liked”並將代詞與複數食物保持一致（them）。建議：在描述過去經歷時保持過去時態一致。

× During the summer vacation, the weather is hot, so I usually eat cold foods such as ice cream and the cream cakes, which brought me a sense of happiness and refreshing.

✓ During the summer vacation, the weather is hot, so I usually eat cold foods such as ice cream and cream cakes, which bring me a sense of happiness and refreshment.

句子前部用一般現在描述習慣，從句卻用過去式“brought”，時態不一致；“the cream cakes”中不需定冠詞“the”；“refreshing”作形容詞不適合與“a sense of”搭配，應用名詞“refreshment”。建議：保持時態一致，去掉不必要的冠詞，選用合適的詞類。

× However, during the winter vacation, the hot the weather is cold, so we like hot pot or warming songs, and I often enjoy them with my studies.

✓ However, during the winter vacation, the weather is cold, so we like hot pot or warming soup, and I often enjoy them while studying.

原句有多處錯誤：重複“The hot the weather is cold”語序錯誤且多餘；“warming songs”應為“warming soup”（可能是打字或發音誤聽）；“enjoy them with my studies”語義不自然，應改為“enjoy them while studying”。建議：注意句子成分順序，使用正確詞彙並用“while”引導同時發生的動作。

× Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?

✓ (Question is fine as is)

此為考官提問，語法正確，無需修改。

× When I was a child I liked to eat something Swiss tea and icy like ice cream and cream cakes.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to eat things that were sweet and icy, like ice cream and cream cakes.

原句中“something Swiss tea and icy”語序和詞彙錯誤且不通順；“Swiss tea”可能為誤聽或錯寫；應改為“things that were sweet and icy”。另外加上逗號分隔從句使結構清晰。建議：檢查單詞拼寫並使用正確的形容詞短語結構。

× However, now I like to eat some spicy food like hot pot, which brought me a sense of relaxing and I really enjoy it.

✓ However, now I like to eat spicy food like hot pot, which gives me a sense of relaxation and I really enjoy it.

句子時態混亂：前半描述現在喜好，從句用過去式“brought”不合適，應用現在時“gives”；“a sense of relaxing”用法錯誤，應為“a sense of relaxation”或“feels relaxing”。建議：保持時態一致並使用正確的名詞形式。