Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意味は伝わりますが、文法ミス、語順の不自然さ、語彙選択の不適切さが目立ちます。もっと自然で簡潔なトピック文を作り、その後に理由と具体例を一つ加えると良いです。また“depressed work”や“recover my motivation”などの表現をより適切な英語（例：stressed at work / lift my spirits）に直しましょう。接続語（for example, because, so）を入れて論理を明確にしてください。

例: My favourite foods are sweet treats like cake, cookies and gummies. I enjoy them because they lift my spirits when I feel stressed at work, for example after a long meeting I often have a small cookie to cheer myself up.

提案: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、意味が取りにくい部分があります。まず時制と主語（when I was young）に合わせた正しい過去形を使い、冗長な「kind of」を減らしましょう。健康に関する説明は簡潔にし、理由をはっきり示してください。接続詞（because, so）で因果を整理すると良いです。日本語での修正点：過去形を使うこと、冗長表現を避けること、理由を明確に述べること。

例: When I was young, I liked salty snacks such as chips. However, I realised they were high in salt and unhealthy, so I stopped eating them often.

提案: 答えは直接的で分かりやすいですが、表現がくどく繰り返されており、語彙の選択も単調です。短いトピック文の後に一つ具体例や理由を加えると好印象です。例えば季節的な例（夏は冷たいものが好きなど）を挙げて比較すると良いでしょう。日本語での修正点：繰り返しを避け、具体例を一つ添えること。

例: No, I don't. My eating habits stay pretty consistent throughout the year; for example, I usually eat the same breakfasts even in summer and winter.

提案: 意味は伝わりますが、文法（主語と動詞の一致、語順）、語彙（'intake'の使い方）、未完の文（最後で具体例が抜けている）に問題があります。まず短い肯定の答えを述べ、その後で理由を述べ、最後に具体的な例を一つか二つ挙げて完結させましょう。接続語（because, so）を使って因果関係を明示してください。日本語での修正点：動詞の一致を直す、

例: Yes, my tastes have changed. I realised that physical and mental health are important for a long life, so I now try to eat healthier foods such as more vegetables and whole grains.

× My favorite food is kind of sweet cake, cookies, and gummies.

✓ My favorite foods are sweet cakes, cookies, and gummies.

The original uses singular 'food' with a list of items and 'kind of' awkwardly. Change to plural 'foods' to match multiple items (Grammar Problem Type 1: Singular and plural issue) and pluralize 'cakes'. Remove 'kind of' for clarity. Use a natural adjective order: 'sweet cakes'.

× I like that taste.

✓ I like that taste.

Pronoun usage is acceptable, but clarity could be improved by specifying 'those tastes' to match plural items: 'I like those tastes.' (This addresses mismatch between referent number and pronoun.)

× That helps me recover my motivation when I'm in depressed work and anxious.

✓ That helps me recover my motivation when I'm stressed or anxious at work.

Original phrase has incorrect word order and idiomatic errors. Use 'stressed' or 'anxious' to describe feelings, and place 'at work' after the condition. This fixes sentence structure and adjective use (Grammar Problem Type 26 and 13).

× In my younger foot I did kind of liked the kind of something salty and sorry, I found that that kind of food contains more salt and it is harmful for body, so I stopped to intake.

✓ When I was younger I kind of liked salty foods, but I realized they contained more salt and were harmful to my body, so I stopped eating them.

Multiple tense and word choice errors: 'In my younger foot' should be 'When I was younger' and 'did kind of liked' is incorrect past tense (use 'kind of liked' or 'liked'). 'Kind of something salty' should be 'salty foods'. 'Contains' should be past 'contained' or 'contained' matched with realization; use past 'contained' and plural 'were harmful'. 'Stopped to intake' is ungrammatical; use 'stopped eating'. This corrects past tense and verb usage (Grammar Problem Type 5 and 8).

× No, I don't actually. I eat similar food throughout years, several years.

✓ No, I don't. I eat similar foods year-round.

'Don't actually' is informal and awkward; 'I don't' is sufficient. 'Similar food' should be plural 'similar foods' and 'throughout years, several years' is redundant—use 'year-round' to express consistency. This addresses tense and plural issues (Grammar Problem Type 6 and 1).

× My preference and taste is stable throughout the period.

✓ My preferences and tastes have been stable over time.

Subject-verb agreement: plural subject 'preferences and tastes' takes plural verb 'have been'. 'Throughout the period' is vague; 'over time' is natural. This fixes agreement and word choice (Grammar Problem Type 27 and 13).

× Yes it have changed absolutely.

✓ Yes, it has changed completely.

Use 'has' for third-person singular subject 'it' (Grammar Problem Type 27). 'Absolutely' can be replaced by 'completely' for naturalness.

× I found that my body health mental health is important to maintain my life longevity so I try to intake more healthier foods such as.

✓ I realized that my physical and mental health are important for a long life, so I try to eat healthier foods.

Combine 'body health mental health' into 'physical and mental health'. Use plural verb 'are' to agree with compound subject (Grammar Problem Type 27). 'Try to intake' is incorrect — use 'try to eat'. 'More healthier' is redundant; use 'healthier'. 'Life longevity' is awkward—use 'a long life'. This corrects pronoun/phrase use, verb choice, and adjective redundancy (Grammar Problem Types 12, 13, and 26).