Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cố gắng trả lời ngắn gọn và mạch lạc hơn. Mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (My favourite food is...), tránh lặp từ và tiếng ấp úng, và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về thành phần hoặc lý do bạn thích. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để nối thông tin.

例: My favourite food is ramen. It comes from Japan and usually contains noodles, broth, slices of meat, fish balls and vegetables. I like it because the broth is very flavorful and comforting.

提案: Trả lời trực tiếp với câu chủ đề, tránh lặp và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như thì và giới từ. Nên nói rõ tên món ăn bạn ăn khi nhỏ và miêu tả tần suất ăn cùng với lý do ngắn gọn. Giữ dưới 4 câu.

例: When I was young, I often ate a noodle soup called pho. I usually had it for breakfast and sometimes for dinner because it was quick and comforting.

提案: Câu trả lời tốt nhưng cần tránh ấp úng và lặp. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó nêu ví dụ cụ thể với liên từ (for example, in winter...). Có thể thêm một lý do ngắn gọn cho sự khác nhau (ví dụ để giữ ấm hoặc giải nhiệt).

例: Yes, I do. For example, in winter I prefer hot soups and stews to keep warm, while in summer I choose cold salads and chilled drinks to cool down.

提案: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng về việc món ăn có thay đổi hay không. Tránh nói lộn xộn và đưa thông tin rõ ràng: giữ thì đúng (present perfect hoặc simple present) và nêu ví dụ về món mới nếu có. Hạn chế ấp úng và lặp từ.

例: No, my favourite food hasn't really changed. I still love the noodle soup I ate as a child, but recently I have also started enjoying ramen from Japan.

× Oh, I like to eat the ramen ramen noodles.

✓ Oh, I like to eat ramen noodles.

Use of the definite article 'the' is unnecessary before a general food name. Also avoid repetition. Suggestion: say 'ramen' or 'ramen noodles' without 'the'.

× It is a it is a this from Japan, which is made of, uh, meat, uh, fish ball and, uh, vegetable.

✓ It is from Japan and is made of meat, fish balls, and vegetables.

Original has fragmented and repeated words. Fix by creating a clear relative clause: 'It is from Japan' and use parallel plural nouns 'fish balls' and 'vegetables'.

× When I was a child, I used to eat a noodle soup offer.

✓ When I was a child, I used to eat noodle soup often.

Word 'offer' is incorrect; likely intended 'often'. Also remove the article 'a' before uncountable 'noodle soup'. Use 'used to' with base noun form.

× I I often ate it when it eats for breakfast, for my breakfast and, uh, and for my dinner.

✓ I often ate it for my breakfast and for my dinner.

Mixes past and present ('ate' and 'eats'). Keep past tense 'ate' and correct phrase: 'ate it for my breakfast/dinner'. Remove redundant words and repeated filler.

× Of course, yes. Umm, for example, when, uh, when I, uh, when, uh, the wind, when the winter came, I often, uh, eat warm food.

✓ Of course. For example, when winter comes, I often eat warm food.

Use consistent tense and remove repetition. 'When winter comes' (present simple) fits habitual statement; keep verb 'eat' in present simple. Remove extra fillers and incorrect 'the wind'.

× Or in summer I often eat cold food.

✓ In summer I often eat cold food.

Remove the conjunction 'Or' at sentence start; present simple is correct for habitual actions. Keep concise phrasing.

× Not yet, uh, when I was young from now, I, uh, I am very interested in eating Nubra soup and uh, I, I have just added, uh, my, my favorite food Ram ramen.

✓ Not yet. From when I was young until now, I have been very interested in eating noodle soup, and I have recently added ramen to my list of favorite foods.

Original mixes tenses and has unclear phrases. Use 'From when I was young until now' for duration, present perfect 'have been' for continuing interest, and 'recently added' for a recent change. Use 'noodle soup' and 'ramen' correctly and avoid repetition.