Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Sửa ngữ pháp, sắp xếp câu rõ ràng và tránh thông tin mâu thuẫn; nói trực tiếp chủ đề, mô tả chi tiết về món ăn và cảm xúc liên quan. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng nêu món yêu thích. (2) Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ 'my favorite dishes' thay vì 'my favorite fish'). (3) Thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể về hương vị, cách chế biến hoặc kỷ niệm gia đình. (4) Dùng câu ngắn, tránh liệt kê rườm rà và đảm bảo không quá 5 câu.

例: My favourite food is my mother’s braised pork belly with shrimp and mustard greens. It has a rich, slightly sweet sauce and tender meat that melts in your mouth. She usually simmers it slowly for hours, so the flavours are very deep. I love it because it reminds me of family gatherings and makes me feel comforted.

提案: Sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp; trả lời trực tiếp với câu chủ đề, nêu rõ loại trái cây và lí do cụ thể. Tránh từ không đúng như 'mingles' hoặc 'worse apple' — dùng tên trái cây chính xác. Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về kỷ niệm hoặc cảm nhận khi ăn trái cây đó.

例: When I was young, I loved eating seasonal fruits, especially mangoes and watermelons in the summer. They were sweet and very juicy, which helped me cool down on hot days. I remember eating them with my friends after playing outside, which made them even more enjoyable.

提案: Trả lời ngắn gọn nhưng chính xác, sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ ('in the area' không phù hợp). Nên mở rộng một chút bằng liên từ để giải thích lí do, cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể về loại thực phẩm tiện lợi bạn thường ăn theo mùa. Giữ tối đa 3–4 câu.

例: Not really. I mostly eat the same kinds of food year-round because I’m very busy and prefer quick, convenient meals. For example, I tend to eat ready-made salads, noodles, or stir-fries that are easy to prepare. In summer I might add more cold fruits, but my overall diet doesn’t change much.

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp, trật tự từ và rõ ràng: dùng thì đúng ('hasn't changed'), sửa cụm từ số nhiều/'a homemade dishes'. Nên giải thích ngắn lý do vì sao không thay đổi, nêu một ví dụ cụ thể về khi bạn xa nhà. Giữ 2–3 câu rõ ràng.

例: No, it hasn’t changed — I still prefer homemade dishes, especially the ones my mother makes. Even after I moved to another city for work and study, I often try to recreate her recipes because they remind me of home.

× And my favorite fish were my mother dishes.

✓ And my favorite dishes were my mother's.

Wrong word order and possessive form: 'mother dishes' should be possessive 'mother's' and 'fish' is incorrect here. Also 'favorite dishes' fits context. Suggestion: use possessive for owner and correct noun order.'

× They were braised pork belly with shrimp and mustard green soup.

✓ They were braised pork belly with shrimp and mustard green soup.

Sentence is awkward because 'they' refers to 'dishes' (plural) but the named items include a singular dish 'braised pork belly' and a soup. Better: specify both as plural if needed or treat as 'the dishes were braised pork belly with shrimp and mustard green soup.' Maintain plural agreement by using 'the dishes were' and list items. Suggestion: say 'The dishes were braised pork belly with shrimp and mustard green soup.'

× I love eating them because they remind me of family gatherings and they are affordable too.

✓ I love eating them because they remind me of family gatherings and are affordable too.

Redundant subject 'they' is acceptable but can be streamlined. No major grammar violation; suggestion: remove second 'they' for conciseness.'

× I love eating seasonal fruits like mingles or worse apple in summer because they are healthy and juicy.

✓ I loved eating seasonal fruits like mangoes or water apples in summer because they were healthy and juicy.

Tense mismatch with the question about past: examiner asked 'when you were young' so use past tense. Also 'mingles' and 'worse apple' are incorrect words; likely 'mangoes' and 'wax apple' or 'water apple'. Suggestion: use correct fruit names and past tense 'loved' and 'were'.

× No, I usually eat the same types of food on the area because I have a busy life and prefer convenience.

✓ No, I usually eat the same types of food in the area because I have a busy life and prefer convenience.

Preposition 'on' is incorrect for location; use 'in the area'. Also 'types of food in the area' fits context. Suggestion: use 'in' for locations and check noun phrases.

× No, it hasn't changed.

✓ No, it hasn't changed.

This sentence is correct. No change needed. Keep as is.

× I always love a homemade dishes especially my mother made.

✓ I have always loved homemade dishes, especially those my mother made.

Mixed singular/plural and article errors: 'a homemade dishes' mixes singular 'a' with plural 'dishes'. Use 'homemade dishes' plural and past tense 'have always loved' to match context. 'Those my mother made' clarifies which dishes. Suggestion: ensure noun and article agreement and correct tense.

× Even when I moved to another city for studying in jobs I it's still unchanged.

✓ Even when I moved to another city to study and work, it was still the same.

Multiple errors: awkward phrasing 'for studying in jobs', incorrect pronoun 'I it's', and tense inconsistency. Rephrase to 'moved to another city to study and work' and use past tense 'it was still the same.' Suggestion: simplify the clause and ensure correct verb forms and pronouns.