Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, grammatically correct and more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and article use, avoid repetition, and add one or two specific details about why you like burgers (e.g., flavor, texture, or ingredients). Use linking words if adding details.

例: My favourite food is a beef burger. I like it because the patty is juicy and the combination of cheese, fresh lettuce and tangy sauce creates a great balance of flavours, so I often order a burger when I eat out.

提案: Use correct tense and articles, and combine related ideas into a fluent short answer. Begin with a topic sentence in past tense, then add a linked detail about sweets. Avoid fillers and vague phrases.

例: When I was young, I loved rice with meat or chicken. I also enjoyed sweet foods like cakes and candy, especially after meals.

提案: Improve grammar (use correct tense and subject-verb agreement), be specific about seasonal changes, and use linking words. Give one clear example of a summer or winter dish to make the answer concrete and coherent.

例: Yes, we do. We change our meals depending on the season; for example, in summer we prefer light salads and cold noodles, while in winter we eat hot soups and stews to stay warm.

提案: Use clear contrast language, correct tense, and specific vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence stating the change, then give specific examples of childhood preferences and current preferences. Avoid fillers and unclear words.

例: Yes, it has changed. As a child I loved sweet treats like cakes and tarts, but now I prefer savoury foods such as grilled meat, salty snacks and spicy dishes.

× My favorite food is meat burger because it is delicious and have many sauce in in this ingredient and I find myself choose burger for any visit to a restaurant.

✓ My favorite food is a meat burger because it is delicious and has a lot of sauce in the ingredients, and I find myself choosing a burger whenever I visit a restaurant.

Errors: missing article before 'meat burger' and before 'burger', verb agreement 'have' should be 'has' for singular subject, 'many sauce' incorrect: use 'a lot of sauce' or 'many sauces', 'in in this ingredient' unclear: 'in the ingredients', verb form 'choose' should be gerund 'choosing' after 'find myself', and 'for any visit to a restaurant' should be 'whenever I visit a restaurant'. Suggestion: use appropriate articles ('a' for countable singular), ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct quantifier 'a lot of', use gerund after 'find myself', and simplify the time phrase to 'whenever I visit'.

× My favorite food when I was a young is rice with meat or chicken.

✓ My favorite food when I was young was rice with meat or chicken.

Errors: tense mismatch—'when I was young' refers to the past, so the main verb should be past tense 'was' not present 'is'. Also 'a young' is incorrect; use 'young' without article. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time expression and omit unnecessary article before 'young'.

× And also I prefer to eat, uh, sweet dishes.

✓ I also preferred to eat sweet dishes.

Errors: pronoun/tense inconsistency—context is past ('when I was young'), so 'prefer' should be past 'preferred'. 'And also' is redundant; use 'I also' or 'Also,'. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense with surrounding sentences and avoid redundant connectors.

× Something sweet, everything that includes sugar.

✓ I liked anything sweet, everything that included sugar.

Errors: sentence fragments and tense inconsistency. Original is a fragment; make it a full sentence and keep past tense to match context ('included'). Suggestion: combine fragments into a complete sentence and maintain consistent past tense.

× Absolutely yes. We trying to change our dishes depend on whether for example at summer we find ourselves choose something called or specific dishes that is similar.

✓ Absolutely yes. We try to change our dishes depending on the weather; for example, in summer we choose certain dishes that are similar.

Errors: tense and form—'We trying' should be 'We try' or 'We are trying'; use simple present 'try' to state habitual action. 'depend on whether' incorrect preposition/structure; use 'depending on the weather'. 'at summer' should be 'in summer'. 'we find ourselves choose' needs gerund: 'we find ourselves choosing' or simpler 'we choose'. 'something called or specific dishes that is similar' is unclear and has subject-verb disagreement 'is' with plural 'dishes'; use 'certain dishes that are similar'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms, appropriate prepositions for seasons ('in'), and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, when I was a child I preferred to eat sweet dishes such as cake, a tart or something like that.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I preferred to eat sweet dishes such as cake, tarts, or things like that.

Errors: minor number agreement and parallelism. 'a tart or something like that' is informal and mixes singular with plural; better to use plural 'tarts' and plural 'things like that' for generality. Tense 'preferred' is correct for past. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure and appropriate pluralization for general examples.

× But right now I didn't.

✓ But right now I don't.

Errors: tense inconsistency—'right now' refers to present so auxiliary should be present 'don't' not past 'didn't'. Suggestion: match auxiliary verb tense to the time adverbial.

× I don't like them anymore, but I prefer to eat uh, salt.

✓ I don't like them anymore, but I prefer savory foods.

Errors: 'salt' is not a countable food and sounds odd; likely intended 'salty' or 'savory foods'. Use a noun phrase such as 'savory foods' or 'salty foods'. Also 'prefer to eat' is acceptable but 'prefer' with noun works better. Suggestion: choose the correct noun form ('savory foods') and avoid using 'salt' to mean 'salty food'.

× Something with crochet or something like.

✓ Something savory, like snacks or fried foods.

Errors: 'crochet' is incorrect word choice (means needlework) and sentence fragment. It's unclear what was meant; likely 'crispy' or 'croquette'. Replace with a clear noun phrase and complete the sentence. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary ('crispy', 'croquette', 'snacks') and finish the sentence to be complete.