Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời cần ngắn gọn, rõ ràng, đúng ngữ pháp và tự nhiên hơn. Tránh dùng từ sai (ví dụ "beaten chocolate", "realize my mind", "affiliate my mood", "concent"). Nên mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp (I like chocolate) rồi đưa 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại chocolate, khi nào ăn và hiệu quả). Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để nối ý (because, so, and). Giữ tối đa 3-4 câu.

例: I really like chocolate, especially dark chocolate. I usually eat it in the afternoon because it gives me a quick energy boost and helps me concentrate. For example, a small piece of dark chocolate helps me stay motivated when I study.

提案: Cần chính xác hơn và tránh những cấu trúc lặp, không tự nhiên (ví dụ "As far as I'm concerned" không phù hợp cho kỷ niệm trẻ). Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc ("satisfied at movie with our" không rõ). Hãy trả lời trực tiếp: tên món, lý do và một ví dụ kỷ niệm ngắn. Dùng liên từ để liên kết ý (because, so, and). Giữ 2-3 câu ngắn.

例: When I was young I loved sweet milk chocolate because it tasted comforting and made me happy. I remember eating it after watching cartoons with my family, which made those moments really special.

提案: Câu trả lời lặp và thiếu cụ thể về mùa trong năm; bạn nói về tuần thay vì mùa, và nhiều chỗ thiếu từ/thiếu hoàn chỉnh. Nên trả lời trực tiếp về mùa (summer, winter) nếu được hỏi, hoặc nói rõ thói quen theo thời tiết. Dùng ví dụ cụ thể và cấu trúc hoàn chỉnh; tránh lặp từ như "for example" nhiều lần.

例: Yes, I change what I eat depending on the season. In summer I eat more salads and fruit to stay cool, while in winter I prefer warm soups and noodles. For instance, on cold days I often have a bowl of chicken noodle soup for dinner.

提案: Câu trả lời mâu thuẫn và có lỗi ngữ pháp/văn phạm ("sweet 1", "helps me motivated"). Cần rõ ràng: có thay đổi hay không, và nêu cụ thể loại nào thay đổi và vì sao. Tránh các từ sai; dùng thì phù hợp. Giữ 2-3 câu với lý do rõ ràng.

例: My favourite food has changed slightly. I used to prefer very sweet milk chocolate as a child, but now I prefer dark chocolate because it tastes richer and makes me feel less guilty about snacking.

× Honestly, I have a soft spot for eating chocolate, especially beaten chocolate.

✓ Honestly, I have a soft spot for eating chocolate, especially melted chocolate.

The original uses 'beaten chocolate' which is likely a word choice error rather than grammar; however 'for eating' is acceptable. Recommend 'melted chocolate' as the intended noun phrase. Use correct adjective to describe chocolate state.

× Saying that, when eating chocolate, not only can I realize my mind, but I can also affiliate my mood and have more motivation to work all day.

✓ That said, when I eat chocolate, not only can I clear my mind, but I can also lift my mood and have more motivation to work all day.

Use correct verb forms and collocations: 'when eating chocolate' better as 'when I eat chocolate' for clarity. 'Realize my mind' is incorrect collocation; 'clear my mind' is correct. 'Affiliate my mood' is incorrect; 'lift my mood' or 'improve my mood' should be used.

× In addition, I think that chocolate can also enhance my patience and concent.

✓ In addition, I think that chocolate can also enhance my patience and concentration.

The word 'concent' is a misspelling of 'concentration'. Use the noun 'concentration' to refer to focus. 'Enhance my patience and concentration' is the correct collocation.

× As far as I'm concerned, since I was a child, I was very interested in eating chocolate, but maybe at that time I preferred sweet chocolate.

✓ As far as I'm concerned, since I was a child I have been very interested in eating chocolate, but maybe at that time I preferred sweet chocolate.

With 'since I was a child' use present perfect ('have been') to indicate a state continuing to the present. 'Was very interested' suggests a past-only state; change to 'have been' for continuity.

× I just remember that when eating chocolate in my childhood, I used to be very happy and over the moon.

✓ I just remember that when I ate chocolate in my childhood, I used to be very happy and over the moon.

When referring to repeated past actions, 'used to' with simple past 'I ate' is natural. 'When eating chocolate' can be improved to 'when I ate chocolate' for clarity.

× Not only that, I was also satisfied at movie with our.

✓ Not only that, I was also satisfied when watching movies with my family.

Original sentence has poor word order and wrong prepositions/pronouns. 'Satisfied at movie with our' is ungrammatical. Use 'satisfied when watching movies with my family' or 'at the movies with my family'.

× Of course, I always eat different foods at different times of the year.

✓ Of course, I eat different foods at different times of the year.

'Always' is redundant with 'at different times of the year'; removal improves naturalness. Present simple 'I eat' is correct for habitual actions.

× For example, like in a week, each day I choose eat different foods so as to meet my demands.

✓ For example, in a week I choose different foods each day to meet my needs.

Remove redundant 'like', correct verb phrase 'choose eat' to 'choose', and use 'needs' instead of 'demands' for natural collocation.

× For example, on Monday I used to eat noodles, but on Saturdays or other.

✓ For example, on Monday I used to eat noodles, but on Saturdays I ate other things.

Complete the contrast and use clear past habit 'used to' with full clause. 'Or other' is incorrect; specify 'other things' or 'different foods'.

× In my opinion, my favorite food hasn't changed since I was a child, but I think that the change is about the Thai food.

✓ In my opinion, my favorite food hasn't changed since I was a child, but I think my taste in Thai food has changed.

'The change is about the Thai food' is awkward. Use 'my taste in Thai food has changed' to express change in preference. Maintains present perfect to link past to present.

× I'm very interested in eating bitter chocolate and dark chocolate now, but in the past I used to love eating sweet 1 which can helps me motivated for a long time.

✓ I'm very interested in eating bitter chocolate and dark chocolate now, but in the past I used to love sweet chocolate, which helped keep me motivated for a long time.

Remove stray '1'. Use 'sweet chocolate' rather than 'love eating sweet 1'. 'Which helped keep me motivated' uses past tense 'helped' and correct structure 'keep me motivated'. 'Can helps me motivated' is ungrammatical: 'can help me feel motivated' or past 'helped keep me motivated'.