Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and grammar errors (use 'even if' and correct subject-verb agreement). Add one specific detail about why you like lobster (taste/texture or a memory) and use a linking word.

例: My favourite food is seafood, particularly lobster, because of its sweet, tender meat. For example, I enjoy lobster boiled simply with a little butter, which highlights its natural flavor.

提案: Use past tense consistently and reduce hesitations. Begin with a clear past-tense topic sentence, give a brief reason or a specific memory, and connect sentences with linking words like 'often' or 'usually'.

例: When I was young, I really liked barbecue and we often had it once a week. Usually I went with my family or sometimes with friends, and I remember enjoying the smoky flavor and social atmosphere.

提案: Give a direct answer and specific examples. Avoid fillers and incomplete sentences. Say when and name particular seasonal foods or dishes, and use linking words like 'for example' or 'in summer'.

例: Yes, I do. I try seasonal foods depending on the time of year; for example, I eat more fruit and cold noodles in summer, but in winter I prefer hot soups and stews to stay warm.

提案: Answer clearly and use correct tense and grammar. Explain the change with a concise reason, using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid repeated hesitation and incorrect phrasing ('doesn't suit me' is correct).

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I loved very spicy dishes, but now I avoid them because they upset my stomach, so I prefer milder flavors.

× My favorite food is seafood, especially lobster because they are very delicious and easy to cook.

✓ My favorite food is seafood, especially lobster, because it is very delicious and easy to cook.

The pronoun 'they' is plural but 'lobster' is singular. Use 'it' to refer to a single lobster. If you mean lobsters in general, use the plural noun 'lobsters, because they...'. Also add a comma before 'because' for readability.

× Even you use water to boil, they are still delicious.

✓ Even if you boil them in water, they are still delicious.

The original sentence has incorrect clause structure and pronoun reference. Use the conditional conjunction 'if' and the plural pronoun 'them' to refer to lobsters in general. Also use the verb 'boil' in base form after 'if' and include the preposition 'in' with 'water'.

× When I was young, I like BBQ very much.

✓ When I was young, I liked BBQ very much.

The time phrase 'When I was young' sets the context in the past, so the verb should be in the past tense 'liked' rather than the present 'like'.

× Uh, I went to barbecue once a week.

✓ I went to barbecues once a week.

The sentence describes a habitual past action, so past tense 'went' is correct, but 'barbecue' as a noun should be plural 'barbecues' to indicate repeated events. Alternatively, 'I used to go barbecue once a week' is less natural than 'I used to go to a barbecue once a week' but simplest is 'I went to barbecues once a week.'

× Uh, sometimes, umm, I go with my friends or my family.

✓ Sometimes, I went with my friends or my family.

Because the speaker is describing past habits ('When I was young'), maintain past tense: change 'go' to 'went'.

× Yes I do. I like to try different foods umm ex explore uh, I like to eat. I have never tried before umm so.

✓ Yes, I do. I like to try different foods; I like to explore foods I have never tried before.

The original contains fragmented and repeated phrases. Combine ideas into a clear sentence: 'I like to try different foods' and 'I like to explore foods I have never tried before.' Remove filler words and ensure proper word order and tense (present simple for a general habit).

× Yes I have umm, when I was a child my favorite food is uh spicy food.

✓ Yes, I have. When I was a child, my favorite food was spicy food.

The clause 'When I was a child' is past time, so use past tense 'was' instead of present 'is'. Also separate the short response 'Yes, I have.' with punctuation.

× But now I quit spicy UMM because my stomach is not good at not suit suited.

✓ But now I quit spicy food because my stomach does not agree with it.

The original has unclear phrasing and incorrect words such as 'not good at not suit suited.' Use a natural English expression: 'my stomach does not agree with it' or 'spicy food doesn't suit my stomach.' 'Quit' is acceptable in context but 'I've stopped eating spicy food' is another clear option.