Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu cấu trúc rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, phát âm và lặp từ. Hãy mở đầu bằng 1 câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó giải thích lý do và thêm 1 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ tần suất, cách chế biến hoặc kỷ niệm liên quan). Tránh lặp từ và sửa các lỗi thì (ví dụ: “I eat it almost every day”, “it’s not good for my health”, “I can’t resist the temptation”). Giữ tổng số câu không quá 4-5 câu.

例: My favourite food is fried chicken. I eat it almost every day because I love its crispy skin and juicy meat. However, I know it’s unhealthy, so I try to limit it to once or twice a week. Despite that, I sometimes can’t resist when I see it.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tốt nhưng bị lỗi ngữ pháp (thì, danh từ, đại từ) và cấu trúc rời rạc. Bắt đầu bằng 1 câu chủ đề ở thì quá khứ đơn, tiếp theo nêu lý do và một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ món ăn, thói quen ăn uống). Sử dụng liên từ để nối ý (because, so, and). Chú ý: “rich in nutrients” thay vì “rich of nutrition”, “my parents cooked for me” thay vì hiện tại.

例: When I was a child, I usually ate healthy food like vegetables and soups because my parents cooked most meals for me. For example, we often had steamed fish and boiled greens, which were rich in nutrients. As a result, I developed a taste for simple, homemade dishes.

提案: Câu trả lời mơ hồ, lộn xộn và không cụ thể. Tránh tiếng

例: Yes, definitely. I eat different foods depending on the season because certain fruits and vegetables are only available at specific times of the year. For instance, in summer I eat more watermelon and tomatoes, while in winter I prefer warm soups and root vegetables. This helps me enjoy fresher produce and vary my diet.

提案: Ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng bị ngắt quãng, nhiều lỗi thì và từ vựng. Trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn nêu sự thay đổi, giải thích nguyên nhân với các chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ thói quen nấu ăn, sống riêng, sở thích mới) và kết luận ngắn. Sử dụng thì quá khứ để nói về quá khứ và thì hiện tại cho hiện tại.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since I was a child. When I was young, my parents cooked healthy meals for me, so I ate mostly home-cooked dishes. Now that I cook for myself, I often eat quick and convenient foods like fried chicken, which I didn’t eat much before. As a result, my eating habits have shifted toward faster, less healthy options.

× My favorite food is fried chicken. I'm I'm eat it almost every day and although I know it is not quite, it is quite not good for my health. I cannot control my temptation.

✓ My favorite food is fried chicken. I eat it almost every day, and although I know it is not good for my health, I cannot control my temptation.

The sentence used 'I'm I'm eat' which is incorrect because the present simple tense 'eat' should be used to describe habitual actions. Remove the extra 'I'm' and use 'I eat'. The phrase 'it is not quite, it is quite not good' is awkward; correct to 'it is not good' or 'it is quite bad'. Also combine clauses with a comma and 'and' for fluency. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and avoid redundant words.

× When I was a child, I often eat healthy foods like vegetables and food which is rich of nutrition.

✓ When I was a child, I often ate healthy foods like vegetables and foods which were rich in nutrients.

The clause refers to past habitual actions so the past tense 'ate' is required instead of 'eat'. Use 'rich in' rather than 'rich of', and 'nutrients' is the correct noun. Also match plurality: 'foods' and 'were'. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits and correct preposition 'in'.

× Because my parents cook for me she so I often eat a healthy cooked meals.

✓ Because my parents cooked for me, I often ate healthy home-cooked meals.

This sentence has multiple structure errors: tense inconsistency (use past 'cooked' to match past context), the pronoun 'she' is incorrect and unnecessary, and the noun phrase 'a healthy cooked meals' mixes singular and plural; correct is 'healthy home-cooked meals'. Suggestion: remove extraneous pronouns and ensure verb tense and noun number agree.

× Umm, almost. Because uh, I eat a lot of vegetables and uh, this is uh. This is a season seasoned apple so I can eat vegetable in a church.

✓ Yes, I do. I eat a lot of vegetables, and when it is the season for apples I eat them too.

The original is fragmented and unclear. Use a clear affirmative 'Yes, I do' to answer the question. Replace 'this is a season seasoned apple' with 'when it is the season for apples' and 'I can eat vegetable in a church' is meaningless in context; likely intended 'I can eat seasonal vegetables' or 'I eat vegetables in season'. Suggestion: make sentences complete and logical, use 'seasonal' and plural agreement ('apples', 'them').

× Yes, definitely, because when I was a child, my parents cooked for me, which is, uh, ensure the healthy materials, but uh, when I was uh, oldest, I eat for myself, so by myself, so I.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I was a child, my parents cooked for me and ensured the food was healthy, but when I got older, I cooked for myself.

Mixes past and present incorrectly. Use past tense 'cooked' and 'ensured' for past events. Replace 'which is, uh, ensure the healthy materials' with 'and ensured the food was healthy'. 'When I was oldest' should be 'when I got older' and 'I eat for myself' should be 'I cooked for myself' (past). Suggestion: keep consistent past tense for changes since childhood and use clear verbs like 'ensured' and 'cooked'.