Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: В вашем ответе понятна идея, но речь местами неестественна: фраза «only lean and sugar free food» звучит немного коряво, и вы использовали вводное «To be honest», которое здесь не обязательно. Также ответ можно расширить одной-двумя конкретными деталями (например, примеры любимых блюд или причина выбора), чтобы показать разнообразие лексики и укрепить структуру (тема + поддержка). Постарайтесь избегать чрезмерных вводных слов и держать максимум 3–4 предложений.

例: I prefer lean, low-sugar meals because I try to keep fit. For example, I often eat grilled chicken with steamed vegetables or oatmeal with berries for breakfast. These options give me energy without unnecessary calories.

提案: Ответ понятен и адекватен, но начало «You know» звучит разговорно и излишне. Также можно добавить одну-две конкретики — какие сладости или блюда вы ели и почему — чтобы показать способность выражать детали и использовать разнообразную лексику. Следите за словом «unhelpful» — лучше использовать «unhealthy» в данном контексте.

例: When I was young I ate a lot of sweets, such as chocolate bars and candy, and fast food like fries and burgers. I loved them because they tasted great and were easy to get, but I now realise they were unhealthy.

提案: Ответ короткий и неуверенный: повторяются слова «Uh» и фраза «I can tell I eat the same food» звучит неестественно. Надо дать более развернутый ответ с примером сезона или пояснением, даже если питание в целом не меняется. Используйте связки (however, although, for example) и избегайте звуков задумчивости в устной речи.

例: Not really, I tend to eat the same kinds of food throughout the year. However, in summer I usually choose lighter meals like salads, while in winter I prefer soups and stews to keep warm.

提案: Ответ содержит повторения («I've already told you that», «Now I'm now I») и некоторые лишние слова. Лучше прямо ответить, дать краткое сравнение прошлого и настоящего и привести причину. Уберите фразы, которые могут показаться грубым напоминанием экзаменатору о предыдущем ответе, и исправьте повторы.

例: Yes, it has changed. As a child I loved sweets and fast food, but now I prefer lean, low-sugar meals because I want to stay healthy and have more energy.

× To be honest, I prefer only lean and sugar free food because I try to keep fit.

✓ To be honest, I prefer only lean and sugar-free food because I try to keep fit.

The sentence is generally correct grammatically; however, 'sugar free' should be hyphenated as 'sugar-free' when used as a compound modifier before a noun. This is a punctuation/compound adjective issue within the adjective usage category. Suggestion: Use a hyphen for compound adjectives before the noun: 'sugar-free'.

× You know, when I was young I used to eat a lot of sweets and other greasy and unhelpful food.

✓ You know, when I was young I used to eat a lot of sweets and other greasy and unhealthy foods.

'Unhelpful' is incorrect for describing food; the correct adjective is 'unhealthy'. Also 'food' should be plural 'foods' to match 'a lot of sweets and other ... foods' or keep 'a lot of' followed by uncountable 'food'. Suggestion: Use 'unhealthy' and make noun number consistent: 'unhealthy foods' or 'unhealthy food'.

× Uh, not exactly. Uh, I can tell I eat the same food in different times of the year.

✓ Uh, not exactly. Uh, I can tell I eat the same food at different times of the year.

The correct preposition for referring to periods within a year is 'at different times' rather than 'in different times'. Suggestion: Use 'at different times of the year' to indicate specific occasions or periods within the year.

× Yes, my favorite food changed since I was a child. I've already told you that. Now I'm now I try to keep fit and eat only lean and sugar free food.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a child. I've already told you that. Now I try to keep fit and eat only lean and sugar-free food.

When referring to a change that started in the past and continues to the present, use the present perfect 'has changed' rather than simple past 'changed'. Also remove the duplicated 'now' and hyphenate 'sugar-free'. Suggestion: Use present perfect for changes over time: 'has changed since I was a child', remove repetition 'now', and hyphenate compound adjectives 'sugar-free'.