Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and add a specific detail about ingredients or when you eat it. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the dish, then give one or two specific supporting details (ingredients, occasion, or why you like it). Avoid phrases like "in my native language" unless necessary.

例: My favourite food is tinola, a Filipino chicken soup made with ginger, green papaya and chili leaves. I usually eat it on rainy days or when I’m feeling tired because the warm broth is comforting and helps me relax.

提案: Use correct tense and natural phrasing; give one clear example and a reason. Fix grammatical errors (e.g., "leaned more toward sweet foods", "made me feel comfortable"). Keep responses to 2–3 sentences and link ideas with a connector like "because".

例: When I was young, I tended to prefer sweet foods, especially ice cream, because it was a refreshing treat on hot, humid days. I often had ice cream after school as a special reward.

提案: Clarify the idea (you said "off season" but meant "in season"). Give a specific seasonal example and use a linking word. Keep it natural: one topic sentence plus a specific example and brief reason.

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, when tomatoes are in season in summer I eat them every day because they taste fresher and are cheaper then.

提案: Correct verb forms and use concise contrast words like "but" or "however." Provide one specific example of a sweet and a savory food to illustrate the change and a short reason for the shift.

例: Yes, my preferences have changed. As a child I preferred sweets like candy and ice cream because they felt like a reward, but now I prefer savory dishes such as grilled chicken and soups because they are more satisfying and filling.

× For example, I really liked ice cream.

✓ For example, I really liked ice cream.

No correction needed; sentence is grammatically correct. Keep as is.

× Especially on a hot and humid day, an ice cream would provide me comfortable.

✓ Especially on a hot and humid day, an ice cream would make me feel comfortable.

The verb phrase 'provide me comfortable' is incorrect because 'provide' should be followed by a noun (provide me comfort) or a noun phrase, not an adjective. Use 'make me feel comfortable' to express causing a feeling. Suggestion: use 'make me feel comfortable' or 'provide me with comfort.'

× Yes, I prefer eating foods that are off season.

✓ Yes, I prefer eating foods that are out of season.

The phrase 'off season' requires preposition/adjective form 'out of season' or hyphenated 'off-season' when used attributively. 'Out of season' is the common idiomatic expression. Suggestion: use 'out of season' or 'off-season' depending on context.

× For example if tomatoes are in season I would consume them non-stop.

✓ For example, if tomatoes are in season, I would eat them non-stop.

Missing commas after introductory phrase 'For example' and the conditional clause 'if tomatoes are in season' should be separated with commas when interrupting the main clause. Also 'consume' is formal; 'eat' is more natural for food. Suggestion: add commas and use 'eat' for natural speech.

× Yes, as a child I leaned more towards sweet foods because they made me feel rewarded, but as I got older I started leaning more towards savory foods because this make me feel satisfied and full.

✓ Yes, as a child I leaned more towards sweet foods because they made me feel rewarded, but as I got older I started leaning more towards savory foods because they made me feel satisfied and full.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'this make me' is incorrect. The pronoun 'this' is vague; better to use plural 'they' referring to 'savory foods.' Use past tense 'made' to match 'started' and 'leaned.' Suggestion: change 'this make me' to 'they made me' for correct agreement and tense.