Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 全体として質問に答えているが、内容の明確さや文法、詳細の具体性が欠けています。まず「Monaco」が何か（ビスケット、チョコレート等）を明示してください。不要な語（the in）は削除し、文法を修正しましょう。また、支持情報を一つか二つ付け加えて理由や感想を述べると良いです。接続詞（because, so）や指示語を正しく使い、文は3文以内に収めてください。発音の注意点として地名や製品名は明確に発音してください。

例: My favourite snack is Monaco, a sweet biscuit popular in Kyoto. I like it because it has a crisp texture and just the right amount of chocolate. Because it’s not too heavy, I often eat it with tea in the afternoon.

提案: 答えは分かりやすいが、文法ミスと冗長さがあるため減点されます。「good chocolate」は不自然なので「chocolate」を主語にして理由を簡潔に述べましょう。接続語（because, also）を使う点は良いが、文の繋がりを滑らかにして具体例（好きだった種類、思い出）を加えると説得力が増します。文章は最大5文以内に収め、繰り返しを避けてください。

例: I liked chocolate a lot when I was young. I loved it because it tasted sweet and made me feel cheerful. Also, there were many kinds—milk chocolate, dark chocolate and filled chocolates—so I enjoyed trying different types.

提案: 答えは直接的だが不完全で一般的すぎます。「season」ではなく「seasons」と複数形を使い、具体的な理由や習慣（なぜ夏に鮭を食べるのか、他の季節の例）を一つか二つ示してください。接続詞（for example, because）を使って論理的に展開し、'and so on'は避けて具体例で締めましょう。

例: Yes, I do. Japan has distinct seasons, so my diet changes throughout the year. For example, I often eat salmon in summer because it is in season and feels refreshing, while I prefer hot stews and root vegetables in winter.

提案: 回答は意図が伝わるが文法、語順、語形が多く間違っています。現在形・過去形の一致（when I was a child → I liked）や不要な発話（Uh）を避け、論理的な理由を簡潔に述べてください。否定表現は穏やかに（I don’t like chocolate as much now）すると自然です。また、'Curry'は一般名詞なので冠詞や形容詞を付けて説明すると良いです。文は2〜3文でまとめましょう。

例: Yes, my tastes have changed. When I was a child I liked chocolate, but now I prefer spicy dishes such as curry because I enjoy stronger flavors. I don’t eat much chocolate these days because it feels too sweet for me.

× My favorite food is Monaco. Monaco is very sweet snack and we can eat the in Kyoto.

✓ My favorite food is Monaco. Monaco is a very sweet snack and we can eat it in Kyoto.

The noun 'snack' needs the article 'a' before it because it is singular and countable. 'the' before 'in Kyoto' is incorrect; use the pronoun 'it' to refer to Monaco. Also 'the' before 'in Kyoto' should be removed. Correct sentence: 'Monaco is a very sweet snack and we can eat it in Kyoto.' Suggestions: add 'a' before singular countable nouns and use 'it' to refer back to a thing previously mentioned.

× I don't remember very well but I think good chocolate.

✓ I don't remember very well but I think I liked chocolate.

The original sentence lacks a verb and correct past reference. The speaker discusses childhood preference, so past tense 'liked' should be used. Also 'think' with a noun alone is ungrammatical here; include a verb phrase 'I liked chocolate.' Suggestions: use a complete clause with past tense when referring to past likes: 'I think I liked chocolate.'

× This is because chocolate is very sweet and delicious.

✓ This is because chocolate is very sweet and delicious.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed.

× Also there are various types chocolate so chocolate makes me happy.

✓ Also there are various types of chocolate, so chocolate makes me happy.

When referring to 'types' followed by a noun, use the preposition 'of' — 'types of chocolate'. Also add a comma before 'so' for clarity. Suggestions: use 'types of X' to link 'types' and the noun.

× Yes I do. There are season in Japan, so for example I usually eat salmon in summer and so on.

✓ Yes I do. There are seasons in Japan, so for example I usually eat salmon in summer and so on.

Use the plural 'seasons' because Japan has multiple seasons. 'There are season' is incorrect number agreement. Suggestions: ensure 'there are' is followed by a plural noun when appropriate.

× Yes, of course, when I was child, I like chocolate, but I like spicy food like Curry now.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was a child, I liked chocolate, but I like spicy food like curry now.

When referring to a past time ('when I was a child'), use past tense 'liked' not present 'like'. Also include the article 'a' before 'child'. 'Curry' should be lowercase unless a proper noun. Suggestions: match verb tense to the time reference and include necessary articles.

× Uh, the I hate chocolate now.

✓ Uh, I hate chocolate now.

The extra 'the' is ungrammatical and should be removed. The sentence should simply be 'I hate chocolate now.' Suggestions: avoid inserting unnecessary articles before pronouns.

× This is because chocolate is too sweet.

✓ This is because chocolate is too sweet.

This sentence is correct as written. No change needed.