Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitation and correct vocabulary/grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, give one or two concise supporting reasons using linking words, and avoid repetition. Use the correct name 'Caesar salad' and say 'order from a restaurant' or 'make it at home'.

例: My favourite food is Caesar salad because it is very fresh and healthy. I often order it from a restaurant, but I also enjoy making it at home because I can adjust the ingredients to my taste.

提案: Answer directly in past tense and reduce hesitations. Use a topic sentence in past tense, then give a brief specific detail (who made it, why you liked it) with a linking word like 'because' or 'because of'.

例: When I was younger, I liked eating spaghetti. My mother often made it for my siblings and me because it was quick to cook and we all enjoyed the tomato sauce.

提案: Be more concise and use clear linking phrases. Start with a direct 'Yes' then explain with specific examples of seasonal foods and a reason. Use plural/singular correctly and finish the sentence coherently.

例: Yes. I eat different foods during the year because we have four seasons and different fruits and vegetables are available. For example, I eat cherries and berries in summer, pumpkins in autumn and citrus fruits in winter.

提案: Use clear comparison language and correct tenses. Start with a direct statement 'Yes, it has changed' then compare past and present with a reason using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Correct vocabulary: 'salad' not 'sell salads'.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I liked spaghetti, but now I prefer salads because I try to eat healthier and salads make me feel lighter.

× My uh, favorite, uh, food is uh, salad Cesare, uh, I love the very much because it's uh, very fresh and also healthy.

✓ My favorite food is Caesar salad; I love it very much because it's very fresh and healthy.

The errors involve article use and pronoun reference. 'Salad Cesare' is incorrect word order and spelling; correct form is 'Caesar salad'. The phrase 'the very much' mixes an article and an adverb incorrectly; use the pronoun 'it' with 'very much'. Also 'the' before 'very fresh' is unnecessary. Suggestion: learn correct noun order for dish names (adjective after name), use 'it' to refer back to a singular noun, and remove unnecessary articles.

× Uh, I uh, often uh, book order to the restaurant and also I can make it home.

✓ I often order it from a restaurant, and I can also make it at home.

Problems: verb phrase order and preposition use plus missing article. 'book order to the restaurant' is ungrammatical; correct is 'order it from a restaurant'. Use 'at home' rather than just 'home' after 'make'. Also place adverbs ('often') before main verb. Suggestion: use standard verb + object order and correct prepositions ('from a restaurant', 'at home').

× When I was younger, I umm, I like, uh, I like, as I remember spaghetti, uh, and uh, my mom, umm, done for us the spaghetti, uh, and me and my siblings, uh, always it is uh.

✓ When I was younger, I liked spaghetti, and my mom used to make it for us; my siblings and I always did.

Errors: tense and word order. 'I like' should be past 'I liked' to match 'When I was younger'. 'My mom, ... done for us the spaghetti' is wrong; use 'my mom used to make it for us' or 'my mom made spaghetti for us'. Pronoun order should be 'my siblings and I'. Suggestion: match past time expressions with past tense, use 'used to' for habitual past actions, and use proper subject pronoun order.

× Yes, I, uh, eat different types of food, uh, at different times of year, uh, because, uh, in our countries there are Four Seasons and in the every seasons we have different kind of fruit and vegetables.

✓ Yes, I eat different types of food at different times of the year because in our country there are four seasons, and in each season we have different kinds of fruits and vegetables.

Errors: prepositions and articles. Use 'at different times of the year' (include 'the'). 'In our countries' should be 'in our country' (singular) unless speaker has multiple countries; context implies one country. 'Four Seasons' should be lowercase 'four seasons'. 'in the every seasons' is wrong; use 'in each season'. 'different kind of' should be 'different kinds of' or 'different kinds of fruit and vegetables'. Suggestion: use 'the' with 'year', 'each' for every item, and pluralize 'kinds' when referring to multiple types.

× So we have umm uh, option to, uh, make, uh, a wide range of.

✓ So we have the option to make a wide range of dishes.

Sentence fragment and article error. 'a wide range of' is incomplete; it needs an object (e.g., 'dishes' or 'foods'). Also include 'the option' or 'an option' depending on meaning. Suggestion: always complete 'a wide range of' with the noun and use correct article ('the option' if specific).

× It just, uh, it uh, has changed, uh, and, uh, when I was child, uh, I like, uh, I liked eating, umm, spaghetti, but now my favorite food is, uh, sell salads.

✓ It has changed: when I was a child, I liked eating spaghetti, but now my favorite food is salad.

Errors: article with 'child'—use 'a child'. Tense inconsistency: 'I like, I liked' should be simply 'I liked' for past. 'sell salads' is incorrect; likely 'salads' or 'salad' is intended; use 'salad'. 'It just... it has changed' can be simplified to 'It has changed'. Suggestion: use 'when I was a child' for past time, keep past tense consistent for past habits, and use correct nouns for foods without extra verbs like 'sell'.