Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Fix article use and remove duplicated words.

例: My favourite food is fried chicken because it is versatile and tasty. For example, I often eat it with rice or bread, and sometimes I pair it with a fresh salad for a lighter meal.

提案: Use past tense for childhood questions, structure the response with a clear topic sentence, and give a specific reason without run-on sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: When I was young, I liked fried chicken as well. I loved it because it tasted delicious and was easy to eat, so my family often bought it for special treats.

提案: Be specific about how your eating changes with the seasons and avoid informal repetition. Mention seasonal examples and use linking words to make it coherent. Correct phrasing for sources (e.g., 'suggested on YouTube').

例: Yes, I do. In summer I prefer lighter dishes like cold salads, while in winter I choose warming foods such as soups. I also try new recipes recommended on YouTube, for instance a grilled vegetable salad I cooked last August.

提案: Answer directly and use correct tense and pronouns. Keep it concise and give one specific reason for no change or for any change. Fix grammar and remove hesitant filler words.

例: Not really — my favourite foods are still simple dishes like fried chicken or fried eggs. I like them because they are quick to prepare and go well with rice or bread.

× This is because we can eat fried chicken with many with many different meals.

✓ This is because we can eat fried chicken with many different meals.

The sentence contains a duplicated phrase 'with many with many'. Remove the repeated words and use the preposition 'with' once: 'with many different meals'. This corrects redundancy and fixes the prepositional phrase.

× For example, we can eat fried chicken with a rice or bread.

✓ For example, we can eat fried chicken with rice or bread.

The indefinite article 'a' is incorrect before an uncountable noun 'rice'. Remove 'a' to use the uncountable noun correctly: 'with rice or bread'.

× My favorite food when I was young is the same from currently now because fried chicken I can't eat it every day is a very delicious and easy to eat for me.

✓ My favorite food when I was young was the same as now because fried chicken is very delicious and easy to eat for me, although I can't eat it every day.

Tense and sentence structure errors: when referring to a past time 'when I was young' use past tense 'was'. Use 'the same as now' for comparison. The clause about frequency should be separated and use correct word order: 'I can't eat it every day'. Also 'is a very delicious' is incorrect article usage; use 'is very delicious'. Reordering improves clarity.

× My favorite food when I was young is the same from currently now because fried chicken I can't eat it every day is a very delicious and easy to eat for me.

✓ My favorite food when I was young was the same as now because fried chicken is very delicious and easy to eat for me, although I can't eat it every day.

The original mixes tenses and uses awkward phrasing. 'Same from currently now' is incorrect; use 'the same as now'. No past participle is needed here; ensure verbs match their tense and form.

× Yes I do. I usually eat a different food that is suggest from a YouTube.

✓ Yes, I do. I usually try different foods that are suggested on YouTube.

Use plural 'foods' when speaking generally. 'A different food' is possible but 'try different foods' sounds more natural. 'That is suggest' is grammatically wrong; use passive participle 'suggested'. Use the preposition 'on' with 'YouTube'. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for natural speech punctuation.

× For example when the YouTube review a new food I usually go there to try try try that food.

✓ For example, when a YouTube reviewer reviews a new food, I usually go there to try that food.

'YouTube' alone cannot 'review'; use 'a YouTube reviewer' or 'a YouTube channel'. 'Review' must be conjugated to 'reviews' to agree with singular subject. Repeated 'try' should be single. Add commas for clause separation.

× For example when the YouTube review a new food I usually go there to try try try that food.

✓ For example, when a YouTube reviewer reviews a new food, I usually go there to try that food.

Subject-verb agreement: 'the YouTube review' has a noun-subject that needs the verb 'reviews' for third person singular. Correct to 'a YouTube reviewer reviews' or 'a YouTube channel reviews'.

× Oh not really for me I usually eat something that's simple like fried chicken or fried egg.

✓ Oh, not really. I usually eat something simple, like fried chicken or fried eggs.

Run-on sentence and punctuation: separate ideas into sentences. Use 'something simple' rather than 'something that's simple'. Use plural 'fried eggs' since eggs are countable and commonly plural in this context.

× We can I can eat with rice or bread is a simple and easy for me.

✓ I can eat it with rice or bread; it is simple and easy for me.

The original mixes subjects 'We' and 'I' and lacks proper verb forms. Use a single subject 'I' and refer back to 'it' (the food). Split into two clauses for clarity and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'it is simple and easy for me'.