Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity and grammar, reduce hesitation, and give a concise structured response: 1) Start with a clear topic sentence stating your favourite food. 2) Add one or two specific supporting details (taste, ingredients, why you like it) using linking words (for example, because, and). 3) Avoid repetitions and filler words. Keep to 2–4 sentences and finish with a short concluding remark.

例: My favourite food is spaghetti carbonara. I like it because the creamy egg sauce and crispy bacon create a rich, umami flavour. For example, the combination of salty pancetta and silky pasta makes each bite satisfying, so I often choose it when I want comfort food.

提案: Make sentences grammatically correct and more specific. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give specific examples and frequency using linking words (for example, because, so, and). Remove fillers and keep concise (2–3 sentences).

例: When I was young I preferred simple home-cooked meals, especially egg fried rice. I ate it almost every week because it was quick, tasty and reminded me of family dinners.

提案: Answer directly and give clear examples of seasonal food or habits. Use linking words to connect ideas (however, although, because). Be specific about seasons, occasions or mood-based choices and avoid vague phrases. Keep it to 2–4 coherent sentences.

例: I don't usually change my diet much with the seasons, although I sometimes choose seasonal fruit like strawberries in summer. However, my choices often depend on my mood — for instance, I crave Italian dishes when I want something rich and comforting.

提案: Provide a clear contrast between past and present with specific examples and a linking phrase (for example, when I was younger… but now…). Correct grammar and avoid hesitations. Limit to 2–3 sentences, giving a reason for the change if possible.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed. When I was younger I preferred Chinese foods like dim sum and noodles, but now I enjoy Italian cuisine such as pasta and risotto because I like the different flavours and textures.

× Right now I'm my favorite food will be spaghetti carbonara.

✓ Right now my favorite food is spaghetti carbonara.

The original mixes present continuous 'I'm' with future 'will be' causing tense inconsistency. The context asks about current preference, so use present simple 'is'. Suggestion: use 'my favorite food is...' for a current state.

× It's a very simple dish, but it's very technical and complicated.

✓ It's a very simple dish, but it's also technical and somewhat complicated.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable but needs clearer linking and modifier placement. Adding 'also' and 'somewhat' improves naturalness and balance. Ensure adjectives modify appropriately.

× Is umm is salty, but is at the same time is very delicious because it's got umami flavor from the eggs and the saltiness from the bacon and it's combined together and make a very.

✓ It is salty, but at the same time very delicious because it has an umami flavor from the eggs and saltiness from the bacon, and when combined they make a very tasty dish.

Multiple issues: missing subject 'It', repeated 'is', incorrect verb forms ('it's got' is informal; 'make' should agree with subject), and sentence fragments. Use 'it has' for possession, ensure subject-verb agreement ('they make'), and complete the final noun 'dish'.

× What kind of food did you like when you were young? -> When I was young, I would prefer to have some simple and food like for example, egg fried rice is very simple, but yet it's fairly delicious and delicate for me.

✓ When I was young, I preferred to have simple food; for example, egg fried rice was very simple, yet fairly delicious and delicate to me.

The question asks about past preference, so use past tense 'preferred' and 'was' instead of present forms. 'Would prefer' is incorrect for past habitual preference; use 'preferred' or 'would' with base form. Also 'simple and food' is ungrammatical; use 'simple food'.

× I'm, I always would try to taste the, uh, fried rice every at least once for every week.

✓ I would always try to eat fried rice at least once a week.

Word order and preposition errors: 'always' should be before 'try', 'eat' is better than 'taste' here, 'at least once a week' is the correct time expression. Remove extraneous articles.

× I don't really recall umm, eating different fruit at different season or different times of year.

✓ I don't really recall eating different fruits in different seasons or at different times of the year.

Use plural 'fruits' when speaking generally, and plural 'seasons'. Use prepositions 'in' for seasons and 'at' for times of the year. Also remove filler words.

× For me it's it's all in the end.

✓ For me, it all comes down to how the food is made in the end.

Original is vague and has repeated 'it's'. Clarify meaning: 'it all comes down to' expresses the intended idea. Maintain subject-verb clarity.

× And I believe that it depends on the mood that I'm at.

✓ And I believe that it depends on the mood I'm in.

Incorrect preposition 'at' with 'mood'; correct collocation is 'in a mood' or 'in'. Also contraction 'I'm in' is natural.

× If I want to taste some Italian, I would love to taste.

✓ If I want Italian food, I would love to have it.

The clause is incomplete and mixes conditional/modal forms. 'If I want' (present) can be followed by 'I would love to have it' for hypothetical preference, or use 'I love tasting Italian food' for general preference. Use 'have' or 'eat' instead of repeating 'taste'.

× Uh, yes, I might taste, uh, definitely change when I was child and when I when I was younger, I would prefer to eat Chinese food such as dim sum, dumplings and noodles.

✓ Yes, my tastes definitely changed. When I was a child and younger, I preferred to eat Chinese food such as dim sum, dumplings and noodles.

Use past forms 'changed' and 'preferred' to describe past changes. 'When I was child' needs the article 'a child'. Remove 'might taste' which is incorrect here.

× And for now, uh, after, uh, growing up, I would love to taste Italian cuisines.

✓ Now, after growing up, I love tasting Italian cuisine.

Use present tense 'love' to describe current preference. 'Italian cuisines' is awkward; 'Italian cuisine' is the general term. Use 'tasting' or 'eating' rather than 'taste' to sound natural.