Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, avoid fillers (umm, kinda), and add one specific reason or memory. Use a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail with a linking word.

例: My favourite food is mangoes because they are sweet and fragrant. For example, the local mangoes I eat have a rich aroma and a perfect balance of sweetness and slight acidity, which reminds me of summer afternoons when my family shared them.

提案: Use correct tense (liked), avoid repetition, and organize with a topic sentence plus one or two specific examples. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, and).

例: When I was young, I liked sour foods, especially sour candies and unripe mangoes. For example, I often chose tangy sweets because their strong flavour and fresh aroma felt exciting and refreshing.

提案: Provide a direct answer then give a clear reason with one or two specific seasonal examples if possible. Avoid repetition and hesitations, and use linking words (however, because, for example).

例: Not really; my diet stays similar throughout the year because I eat mangoes and sour snacks regularly. However, rice is a staple at every meal in the Philippines, so I eat it for breakfast, lunch and dinner.

提案: Use correct tense and subject-verb agreement, avoid repetition and fillers, and provide one concise reason or example explaining why it hasn't changed. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed since childhood because mangoes are my comfort food. They make me happy and remind me of family gatherings, so I still choose them often.

× My favorite food is mangoes because mangoes are so delicious.

✓ My favorite food is mangoes because they are so delicious.

The subject 'mangoes' is plural, so the pronoun referring to them should be 'they' rather than 'it'. Use plural pronouns to match plural nouns to maintain subject-pronoun agreement.

× It tastes like umm, strawberries.

✓ They taste like strawberries.

The noun referred to is plural ('mangoes'), so the verb should be in the plural present form 'taste' not 'tastes'. Also match pronoun/verb with plural subject.

× When I was young, I like sour foods like candies, sour candies and sour mangoes.

✓ When I was young, I liked sour foods like candy, sour candies, and sour mangoes.

The time marker 'When I was young' requires past tense. Use 'liked' instead of 'like'. Also, 'candy' as an uncountable or mass noun is often used in English; 'candies' is acceptable but consistency is better.

× Those fruits that are sour because it tastes good, tastes delicious, and then the fragrance, it's so refreshing.

✓ Those fruits that are sour taste good, taste delicious, and their fragrance is so refreshing.

Mixing plural 'fruits' with singular 'it' and 'tastes' causes inconsistency. Use plural verbs 'taste' and the plural possessive pronoun 'their' to agree with 'fruits'.

× When I was young, I like sour foods like candies, sour candies and sour mangoes. Those fruits that are sour because it tastes good, tastes delicious, and then the fragrance, it's so refreshing.

✓ When I was young, I liked sour foods like candy, sour candies, and sour mangoes. Those sour fruits tasted good, were delicious, and their fragrance was so refreshing.

Combine corrections: past context requires past tense verbs ('liked', 'tasted', 'were', 'was'). Also match plural nouns with plural verbs and pronouns.

× I usually eat mangoes like what I said, and then those sour foods and sour treats.

✓ I usually eat mangoes, as I said, and those sour foods and sour treats.

'Like what I said' is informal and awkward; 'as I said' is the correct idiomatic phrasing. Also remove redundant 'and then' for smoother English.

× And I also eat rice because it is, it's our tradition here in the Philippines to eat rice in the breakfast and then lunch and evening dinner.

✓ I also eat rice because it is our tradition here in the Philippines to eat rice for breakfast, lunch, and dinner.

Use 'for' with meals ('for breakfast') rather than 'in the breakfast'. Also 'evening dinner' is redundant; 'dinner' suffices. Remove filler stutters and reorder for natural phrasing.

× No, I don't usually change what I eat since when I was a kid because mangoes is my comfort food and then mangoes makes me feel so happy whenever I see mangoes and then usually I eat umm sour foods.

✓ No, I haven't usually changed what I eat since I was a kid because mangoes are my comfort food, and they make me feel so happy whenever I see them; I also usually eat sour foods.

The time expression 'since I was a kid' pairs with present perfect ('haven't changed') rather than simple present. 'Mangoes' is plural so use 'are' and 'they'. Maintain pronoun agreement and use clearer sentence structure to avoid repetition and run-on clauses.