Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more accurate, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the dish, avoid incorrect words (e.g. “London”), correct grammar (use articles and tense), and link ideas briefly. Limit to 3–4 sentences and give one specific detail about the flavor or how it's made and one personal reason why you like it.

例: My favourite food is rendang, a rich and spicy Indonesian beef curry. It’s slow-cooked in coconut milk and spices, which gives it a deep, complex flavour. I love it because it reminds me of family gatherings when my mother used to make it, and the aroma always brings back happy childhood memories.

提案: Make the description clearer and correct grammar. Begin with a direct statement, then explain concisely how it was prepared and why you liked it. Use linking words (because, so) correctly and avoid unclear phrases like “confirming meal.” Keep it to 2–3 sentences and give one concrete detail about ingredients or preparation.

例: When I was young I loved nasi goreng (Indonesian fried rice) because it was quick and delicious. My mother would fry garlic and an egg in butter, then mix them with rice and seasonings, which made it a comforting meal I had often.

提案: Clarify the contradiction and give a specific seasonal example if you say you eat different foods. Start with a clear direct answer (Yes or No), then briefly explain with a linking word and a concrete example of seasonal food or a tradition. Avoid filler words and repetition.

例: Not really — I mostly eat the same traditional dishes all year because they remind me of my childhood. For example, during Ramadan my family prepares special soups and sweet snacks that we only eat at that time.

提案: Use a grammatically correct, concise response and give a short reason. Begin with a clear topic sentence (No, it hasn't), then add one sentence explaining why, using correct tense and phrasing. Avoid run-on or unclear clauses.

例: No, my favourite food hasn’t changed since childhood. I still love rendang because my mother used to make it, and the taste and memories are the same.

× My favorite food is London.

✓ My favorite food is rendang.

The original says 'London', which is a place not a food; replace with the intended dish 'rendang'. This is a semantic/content correction rather than a listed grammatical category, but it fixes the meaning so the sentence is correct and matches context.

× It's rich, spicy Indonesian beef Curry that's very famous in my country and I love it because of deep flavor.

✓ It's a rich, spicy Indonesian beef curry that's very famous in my country and I love it because of its deep flavor.

Errors: missing article before 'rich', unnecessary capitalization of 'Curry', and missing possessive pronoun 'its' before 'deep flavor'. Add 'a' to introduce the noun phrase, use lowercase for 'curry', and use 'its' to show the flavor belongs to the dish.

× I also miss my mother cooking.

✓ I also miss my mother's cooking.

Original uses a gerund phrase that is acceptable but sounds unnatural; the possessive form 'my mother's cooking' is the standard way to refer to the act or food prepared by the mother.

× Eating rendang always bring back warm childhood memories.

✓ Eating rendang always brings back warm childhood memories.

Subject-verb agreement: 'Eating rendang' is a singular gerund phrase and requires the third-person singular verb 'brings'.

× My favorite food when I was young was nasi goreng because it was quick and tasty.

✓ My favorite food when I was young was nasi goreng because it was quick and tasty.

This sentence is grammatically correct for past-tense description; no change necessary.

× My mom always took fried garlic and butter at an egg and then mix in rice and seasoning so it was a confirming meal I ate often.

✓ My mom always fried garlic and butter with an egg and then mixed them into rice with seasoning, so it was a comforting meal I ate often.

Multiple issues: incorrect verb 'took' -> 'fried' or 'would fry'; wrong preposition 'at' -> 'with'; verb form 'mix' should be past 'mixed' to match narrative; 'confirming' is wrong word choice -> 'comforting'; add 'them' to refer to garlic, butter and egg; use 'into' for combining ingredients. These corrections fix tense consistency, verb choice, prepositions and word selection.

× Yes I do, but not really because, uh, I really like traditional food because traditional food always bring back my childhood memories.

✓ Yes, I do, but not really, because I really like traditional food; traditional food always brings back my childhood memories.

Punctuation and redundancy: add commas for clarity. Subject-verb agreement: 'traditional food' (singular) requires 'brings'. Remove filler 'uh' in formal answer. Replace repeated 'because' with a semicolon to join related clauses and avoid repetition.

× No, my favorite always same since I was child thought that my mom always cooking.

✓ No, my favorite has been the same since I was a child, because my mom always cooked for me.

Problems: tense and structure. Use present perfect 'has been' to indicate a state from past to present. Include article 'a' before 'child'. 'Thought that' is incorrect connector; use 'because'. 'my mom always cooking' requires past tense 'cooked' (or 'has always cooked') and a clearer object 'for me'. These changes fix tense, article, and verb form errors.