Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear, direct topic sentence and follow with one or two specific reasons. Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and articles) and avoid redundancy. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences). For example, say you like bananas and explain why with specific benefits or situations when you eat them.

例: My favourite food is bananas. I eat them almost every day because they are convenient, nutritious, and give me quick energy in the morning. For instance, I often have a banana before exercising because it helps me feel energized.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the food you liked as a child, then give specific details about why you liked it and whether your preference changed. Avoid repeating words, use correct tense, and give a short reason for the change.

例: When I was young, I loved a snack called Kimbu because it was sweet and crunchy. I used to eat it after school, but now I rarely eat it because I prefer healthier snacks and I eat larger meals instead.

提案: This answer is fairly clear but has some grammar and word choice errors. Keep the structure: topic sentence + specific examples using linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g., 'to stay hydrated' not 'dehydrate') and remove unclear phrases. Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in winter I prefer roasted vegetables and warm soups to keep me warm, while in summer I eat more salads and fresh fruits like watermelon to stay hydrated. Because of the temperature, I adjust my diet to feel comfortable.

提案: Answer directly (Yes or No) and then explain briefly with clear reasons and specific details. Avoid filler words ('uh') and unclear references ('him'). Use correct pronouns and tense. Keep it concise and coherent.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed; I still enjoy Boguto, which I used to eat as a child. I used to eat it almost every day during summer because it was refreshing, and I still like it for the same reason now.

× I love different varieties of foods I love, but genuinely I love is banana.

✓ I love different varieties of food, but my favourite is the banana.

The noun 'food' is uncountable when referring to types of food, so 'foods' is incorrect. Also word order and extra words are confusing; 'my favourite is the banana' clearly states preference. Use 'varieties of food' and a comma to separate clauses.

× It gives me awesome healthy and that's why.

✓ It makes me feel very healthy, and that is why I like it.

'Awesome healthy' is an incorrect adjective phrase. Use 'very healthy' or 'good for my health.' Also 'gives me' requires an object and 'feel' to express state. Connect ideas with 'and that is why'.

× When I was a child I loved Kimbo, Kimbo, Kimbu and Vogato but that is my one of the best food when I was inside.

✓ When I was a child I loved Kimbo, Kimbu and Vogato; they were some of my favourite foods when I lived at home.

Tense consistency: use past tense 'were' for past state. 'One of the best food' is incorrect—use 'one of my favourite foods' or 'some of my favourite foods.' 'When I was inside' is unclear; likely 'when I lived at home' or 'at home.'

× But this time I don't like that because I eat more, that's why.

✓ But now I do not like them because I eat more, so I avoid them.

Use present tense 'do not like' for current preference. Pronoun must agree in number: 'them' for multiple foods. 'That's why' should be connected to result: 'so I avoid them.'

× Yes, I do eat different foods depending on the season.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season.

'Do' is unnecessary for affirmative present simple here; 'Yes, I eat' is natural. Both are grammatical, but removing 'do' makes it more fluent.

× For example, in winter I prefer healthy sweets and roasted vegetables to stay warm, while in summer I eat more salad and fresh fruits like watermelon to stay cool and dehydrate.

✓ For example, in winter I prefer warm sweets and roasted vegetables to stay warm, while in summer I eat more salads and fresh fruits like watermelon to stay cool and hydrated.

'Healthy sweets' is odd; 'warm sweets' fits winter context. 'Salad' should be plural 'salads' when speaking generally. 'Dehydrate' is wrong—should be 'hydrated' to express maintaining hydration. Use adjectives correctly.

× Seasonal abilities and temperature infusion my choices and I often adjust my diet for.

✓ Seasonal availability and temperature influence my choices, and I often adjust my diet accordingly.

Original sentence has wrong words: 'abilities' should be 'availability'; 'infusion' should be 'influence'. Word order and preposition are incorrect; use 'influence my choices' and 'adjust my diet accordingly.'

× No, I, uh, when I was a child, I always liked him and Boguto, that is my favorite.

✓ No. When I was a child I always liked Kimbo and Boguto; they were my favourites.

Use clear subjects and correct food names; 'him' is incorrect for food—use the food names. Maintain past tense 'liked' and 'were' for childhood. 'That is my favorite' should be past: 'they were my favourites.'

× I ate uh, uh, like everyday, uh, in season, like it's uh, uh, summer season school.

✓ I ate them almost every day during the summer season at school.

Use 'during' for periods like 'the summer season.' 'Everyday' should be 'every day' (adverbial phrase). Clarify location with 'at school.'

× That's why I always try to eat.

✓ That's why I always tried to eat them.

In context of childhood habits, use past tense 'tried' and specify object 'them' (the foods). Original sentence lacks clarity and tense consistency.