Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答清晰表达了偏好，但存在语法错误、重复、用词不准确和句子不连贯的问题。建议： 1) 减少重复，避免像 “I I” 或多次重复同一表达。2) 使用完整且正确的句子结构（主谓一致、动词时态和不定式/动名词形式）。3) 使用连词使句子更连贯，例如“so”、“for example”、“and”。4) 增加具体细节（例如你为何喜欢这些食物，如何烹饪或何时吃）。5) 保持答案在3-4句内，避免冗长。

例: My favourite food is healthy dishes because I’m on a diet. For example, I often eat steamed broccoli and carrots, which are low in calories and high in fiber. I also prefer lean proteins such as grilled chicken or baked salmon to keep my energy up. These meals help me feel full without overeating.

提案: 内容有对比（过去与现在），但表达包含语法和词汇错误以及口语化过度。建议： 1) 使用正确的时态和表达，如“when I was a kid”后用过去时态描述习惯。2) 避免不礼貌或自贬的措辞（如“I'm very fat before”），改用更中性的描述。3) 提供具体例子和简短原因，如为什么喜欢这些食物，以及是否有家人影响。4) 用连接词如“because”或“so”来组织原因。

例: When I was young, I often ate high-calorie foods because they were tasty and convenient. For instance, I used to eat a lot of burgers and chips after school. I didn’t snack much between meals, but my main meals tended to be less healthy than they are now.

提案: 回答有主旨，但缺乏针对季节变化的具体细节，且语法、连贯性和词汇选择有问题。建议： 1) 直接回答“是否”并给出简短主题句。2) 如果没有变化也可说明原因，但要给出更多具体例子（例如在冬季会吃汤或根茎类蔬菜）。3) 修正语法（如“it can give me lots of high protein”应为“they provide a lot of protein”）。4) 使用连词和限定词使句子更自然。

例: Not really — my diet is fairly consistent throughout the year because I’m trying to stay healthy. I usually eat lean meats like chicken and fish, plenty of vegetables, and a small portion of rice or noodles. In winter I might add more soups or stews for warmth, but overall my meals don’t change much.

提案: 回答包含对比，但词汇和语法错误较多，表达不够自然。建议： 1) 使用正确的比较表达（例如“changed a lot”）并用过去时描述过去的习惯。2) 避免模糊短语如 “high curries food” 和 “it can give me healthy”，改为具体词汇（e.g. “spicy, high-calorie food” / “these foods are healthier”）。3) 解释“cheat meal”出现的频率或例子以增加细节。4) 用2–4句清晰组织答案。

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed a lot since I was a child. Back then I often ate spicy, high-calorie foods like fried snacks and curries, but now I mostly choose vegetables and high-protein meals. I still allow myself an occasional cheat meal, such as a burger once a month, but most of the time I eat healthier options.

× Well actually I'm just on a diet, so I need it more carefully.

✓ Well, actually I'm on a diet, so I need to be more careful about it.

原句句子结构不完整且搭配不当。英语中表达“更加注意它/饮食”通常用短语 be careful about sth 或 pay more attention to sth，因此应使用“need to be more careful about it”。另外加逗号和空格使句子更自然。建议记住固定搭配：be careful about + 名词。

× I I want eat some healthy food like some vegetables, for example broccoli or some carrots.

✓ I want to eat healthy food, like vegetables — for example, broccoli or carrots.

动词 want 后面接动词不定式 to do，而不是直接加原形动词。原句还多余使用了两个“some”，以及“want eat”需改为“want to eat”。建议练习动词后接不定式的用法：want to do。

× And then I eat more meat, more healthy meat like chicken or some fish.

✓ And I eat more meat, healthier meat like chicken or fish.

原句中“more healthy meat”比较生硬且含义重复，形容词比较级应为 ‘healthier’；另外“some fish”在泛指时可直接用“fish”。建议学习形容词比较级形式及其与名词搭配。

× Well, when I was a kid I didn't eat more carefully.

✓ Well, when I was a kid I didn't eat carefully.

短语“eat carefully”使用副词 carefully 修饰动词 eat，不能说“eat more carefully”在没有比较对象时显得不自然；原句可能想表达“没有注意饮食”，更简洁用“didn't eat carefully”。建议注意副词用法及比较级需要明确比较对象。

× I'm very fat before and I like eat high calories food like burgers and chips.

✓ I used to be very fat, and I liked to eat high-calorie foods like burgers and chips.

“I'm very fat before”时态和词序错误，应该用过去习惯用法“used to be”。“like eat”应为“liked to eat”或“liked eating”。“high calories food”形容词短语应为“high-calorie foods”（复数）。建议学习过去习惯用法 used to 和形容词-名词组合 high-calorie + plural noun。

× But I didn't eat snacks. I just eat real meal, you know?

✓ But I didn't eat snacks. I just ate real meals, you know?

前半句使用过去时 didn't，后半句应保持过去时态一致，故用 ate 而不是 eat；另外“real meal”在泛指过去习惯应为复数“real meals”。建议注意时态一致和可数名词的单复数。

× Well, actually not umm. As I said, I'm just on a diet so I need it more carefully.

✓ Well, actually no. As I said, I'm on a diet so I need to be more careful about it.

与上面类似，否定用 no 更自然；“need it more carefully”搭配错误，应为“need to be more careful about it”。建议使用固定搭配 be careful about sth。

× I just eat lots of meat, it can give me lots of high protein and then I eat some vegetables and a little bit of rice and noodles.

✓ I just eat lots of meat because it gives me a lot of protein, and then I eat some vegetables and a little rice or noodles.

句子连接问题应使用 because 或 and；“lots of high protein”表达不自然，通常说“a lot of protein”或“high-protein foods”。“a little bit of rice and noodles”可改为“a little rice or noodles”。建议学习可数/不可数名词用法和衔接词。

× It can keep my body health.

✓ It helps keep my body healthy.

“keep my body health”搭配错误，应为“keep my body healthy”或“keep me healthy”。“can”在此上下文不必要，用“helps”更自然。建议记住形容词 healthy 用于表状态，要用 keep + object + adjective。

× Well, I think it has a big different since I was a kid because when I was a kid I ate some high curries food, but right now I don't eat them.

✓ Well, I think it has changed a lot since I was a kid because when I was a kid I ate foods with strong curry, but right now I don't eat them.

“has a big different”表达错误，应为“has changed a lot”或“there's a big difference”。“high curries food”不正确，应表达“foods with strong curry”或“spicy curry dishes”。注意时态“when I was a kid I ate”。建议学习常用表达 change a lot / a big difference 以及名词短语的正确排列。

× I just eat in cheat meal, you know.

✓ I only eat them as cheat meals, you know.

原句结构和名词搭配不当，“eat in cheat meal”不是地道表达。应使用“eat as cheat meals”或“only during cheat meals”。建议学习固定搭配：as + 名词短语，和复数形式 cheat meals。

× But most of the time I just eat some green food and high protein.

✓ But most of the time I just eat green vegetables and high-protein foods.

“green food”不够具体，应为“green vegetables”；“high protein”应用作形容词时连字符“high-protein”并接名词“foods”。建议注意形容词-名词组合和使用连字符形成复合形容词。

× It can give me healthy.

✓ They help keep me healthy.

“give me healthy”语法错误，healthy 是形容词，不能直接做动词的宾语，应该说“keep me healthy”或“make me healthy”。此外主语应为复数“they”（指食物或营养）。建议学习动词后接宾语 + 形容词的结构（make/keep sb + adj）。