Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Fix minor grammatical errors, remove the echoed question, use correct collocations (e.g., “uses fresh ingredients”), and keep sentences concise (max 5). Add a brief concrete example to support your preference.

例: My favourite food is Japanese cuisine, especially sushi, takoyaki and sukiyaki. I enjoy it because it uses fresh ingredients and has delicate flavours. For example, sushi combines fresh fish and vinegared rice, which gives a clean taste and interesting textures.

提案: Remove unintelligible fragment, correct grammar and word choice (e.g., “I liked Western food”), and be specific about foods and reasons. Use one or two linking words to show contrast or continuity.

例: When I was young I liked Western food and often ate it with my dad. For instance, he took me to a restaurant in Causeway Bay where I tried escargot, which I loved because it was rich and very different from our usual home-cooked meals.

提案: Answer the seasonal aspect directly (mention seasons or festivals) rather than general city description. Correct grammar and phrasing, limit redundancy, and give specific examples of seasonal dishes or occasions.

例: Yes. In winter I often eat hot soups and stews, such as Chinese hotpot, while in summer I prefer lighter dishes like Vietnamese salads. Also, during Lunar New Year I usually eat special foods such as dumplings.

提案: Correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., “appetite”, “more active lifestyle”), remove repetition, and provide a brief reason or example to support the statement. Keep it concise and coherent.

例: No, my favourite foods are largely the same, but my portions are larger now. For example, I used to eat small sushi rolls as a child, whereas I now order a full sushi set because I have a bigger appetite and a more active lifestyle.

× Is your favorite food?

✓ Is your favorite food? -> What is your favorite food?

The student answered the examiner's question but started with 'Is your favorite food?' which is an incorrect pronoun and question form. This appears to be a fragment or mishear; the correct question form is 'What is your favorite food?'. Suggestion: Use 'what' to ask for information about things, not 'is'.

× I like it because it's used fresh ingredients and delicate flavors, and I enjoy the variety of texture and taste in each dish.

✓ I like it because it uses fresh ingredients and has delicate flavors, and I enjoy the variety of textures and tastes in each dish.

'It's used fresh ingredients' is incorrect: subject-verb agreement and verb choice. The intended meaning is that Japanese cuisine uses fresh ingredients, so use active verb 'uses'. 'Delicate flavors' should be linked with 'has' or 'features'. Also 'variety of texture and taste' requires plural nouns: 'textures and tastes'. Suggestion: Use active verbs matching the subject and make countable nouns plural when referring to variety.

× All our penalties they see.

✓ All our penalties they see. -> I didn't understand this part; perhaps you meant 'All our family eats seafood' or 'All our penalties they see' is unclear. -> Clarified guess: 'All our family eats seafood.'

The original sentence is incoherent and does not form a grammatical English sentence. It may be a mistranslation or mispronunciation. Suggestion: Restate clearly with subject and verb: e.g. 'My whole family eats [that kind of food].' or 'Everyone in my family likes it.' Ensure the subject and verb align and the object is clear.

× Also, when I was young I liked it western food and often ate it with my dad.

✓ Also, when I was young I liked Western food and often ate it with my dad.

'liked it western food' is incorrect placement of pronoun and adjective. Remove the pronoun 'it' and capitalize 'Western' as a proper adjective. Suggestion: Use adjective before noun without unnecessary pronouns: 'liked Western food.'

× He used to take me to a restaurant in Causeway Bay that serves escargot, which I love because it stays rich and different from the food we usually had at home.

✓ He used to take me to a restaurant in Causeway Bay that served escargot, which I loved because it was rich and different from the food we usually had at home.

The sentence mixes past habitual 'used to take' with present tense 'serves' and 'love' and 'stays'. For consistent past narration, change present verbs to past: 'served', 'loved', 'was'. 'Stays rich' is unnatural; use 'was rich'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent in storytelling about past events.

× Yes, definitely a society girl living in an international city which serves different kinds of cuisine like Thailand, Western, Japanese, Vietnam, Chinese food etcetera.

✓ Yes. I am a city girl living in an international city that offers many kinds of cuisine, such as Thai, Western, Japanese, Vietnamese, and Chinese food.

The original is a fragment lacking a main verb and has incorrect country/cuisine adjective forms (Thailand -> Thai; Vietnam -> Vietnamese). 'Society girl' is unclear; 'city girl' fits context. Also 'which' referring to 'city' should use 'that' or restructure. Suggestion: Use a complete sentence with subject and verb, and use correct adjective forms for cuisines.

× So I'd like to try different kind of cuisine with my friends every day after work.

✓ So I'd like to try different kinds of cuisine with my friends after work.

'different kind of' should be plural 'different kinds of' when referring to multiple cuisines. 'Every day after work' is unlikely; remove 'every day' or keep 'after work' depending on meaning. Suggestion: Use plural 'kinds' when referring to multiple categories.

× No, my taste in food has mostly stayed the same but the portion size have changed compared to when I was a child.

✓ No, my taste in food has mostly stayed the same, but the portion sizes have changed compared to when I was a child.

'the portion size have changed' has subject-verb agreement error and article/number issue. Use plural 'portion sizes' with plural verb 'have'. Also add a comma before 'but'. Suggestion: Match noun number with verb number.

× I tend to eat larger meals now now because I have a bigger app type and more active my style.

✓ I tend to eat larger meals now because I have a bigger appetite and a more active lifestyle.

Repeated 'now now' is redundant. 'app type' is incorrect; intended word is 'appetite'. 'more active my style' is wrong word order and noun choice; use 'a more active lifestyle'. Suggestion: Choose correct vocabulary and proper word order: adjective + noun (more active lifestyle).