Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetitions, and give one or two specific examples with linking words. Check word choice (cuisine, not cousin) and verb forms.

例: My favourite food is Italian cuisine because I love pizza and pasta. For example, I enjoy Neapolitan pizza for its thin crust and fresh tomatoes, and creamy carbonara for its rich flavour, so I often choose Italian restaurants when I eat out.

提案: Reduce hesitations and repetitions. Give a clear past preference with one or two specific details and a linking phrase to contrast with now. Use past tense consistently and finish the sentence.

例: When I was young, I loved a Russian dish called pelmeni because it was warm and filling. However, I ate it so often that now I prefer lighter meals, so I rarely have pelmeni anymore.

提案: Organise the answer: start directly, use linking words and specific examples. Correct awkward phrases (e.g. 'depends on the season' not 'hot season of spreading'). Avoid repeating 'because'.

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in summer I eat more fresh fruits and berries since they are in season, whereas in winter I prefer heartier, fattier dishes like stews to keep warm.

提案: Make a clear comparison between past and present. Use simple, natural phrases (e.g. 'my taste has changed'). Provide a specific reason and an example of a homemade dish you now prefer.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed a lot. I used to eat more fast food as a child, but now I prefer homemade dishes, for instance my mother's vegetable soup or grilled chicken, because they are healthier and fresher.

× To be honest, my favorite food dishes from Italian cuisine because I love pizza, pasta and all kinds of desserts they offer and I found it really tasty wherever it's wherever I tried the cousin.

✓ To be honest, my favorite foods are dishes from Italian cuisine because I love pizza, pasta and all kinds of desserts they offer, and I find them really tasty wherever I try the cuisine.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement and countability (plural 'foods' and 'dishes' require 'are'), repetition and wrong tense ('found' past vs present 'find'), wrong pronoun agreement ('them' for plural dishes), misspelling/word choice ('cousin' should be 'cuisine'), and awkward word order. Suggestion: Use present tense when stating general preferences, match plural subjects with plural verbs, use correct vocabulary, and avoid repetition. Grammar problem type ID:26

× It's a funny story. When I was young, I used to love, uh, Russian dish called pelmeni.

✓ It's a funny story. When I was young, I used to love a Russian dish called pelmeni.

Missing indefinite article before singular countable noun 'Russian dish'. Use 'a' for one dish. Also remove extra filler comma. Suggestion: Include appropriate articles with singular countable nouns and avoid unnecessary pauses. Grammar problem type ID:22

× It's, it's a hot dish with meat and I can eat it every day and I could, I could eat it every day, but now I'm, uh, bit tired of it and.

✓ It's a hot dish with meat and I could eat it every day, but now I'm a bit tired of it.

Repetition and mixed modal/tense use: 'can eat' and 'could' together is redundant. Use past habitual/modal 'could' or 'would' for past habits; 'I'm a bit tired of it' needs article 'a' and complete sentence. Remove filler and trailing conjunction. Suggestion: Use one modal to express habit and ensure sentence is complete. Grammar problem type ID:5

× I can't say so because it depends on hot season of spreading some fruits and vegetables.

✓ I can't say for sure because it depends on the season when certain fruits and vegetables are in season.

Awkward phrasing and incorrect preposition 'on hot season of spreading'. Use idiomatic expressions: 'for sure' and 'depends on the season' or 'depends on when fruits and vegetables are in season'. Suggestion: Use established collocations and simpler structure to express dependence on seasons. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Uh, because in summer I eat more fruits and berries because it's a hot season for them and in winter I prefer some greasy food.

✓ In summer I eat more fruits and berries because it's the season for them, and in winter I prefer greasier foods.

Repeated 'because' is redundant; use 'the season for them' or 'they are in season'. 'Greasy food' should be pluralized to 'greasier foods' to match general preference. Suggestion: Avoid repeating conjunctions and match noun number to general statements. Grammar problem type ID:1

× Of course it differs much because my taste is evaluated during all years and now I'm big fan of homemade dishes instead of buying fatty food in fast food restaurants.

✓ Of course it has changed a lot because my taste has developed over the years, and now I'm a big fan of homemade dishes instead of buying fatty food from fast-food restaurants.

Several errors: 'differs much' is unnatural — use 'has changed a lot'; 'my taste is evaluated during all years' is incorrect — use 'has developed over the years'; missing article 'a' before 'big fan'; use 'from fast-food restaurants' or 'at fast-food restaurants' and hyphenate 'fast-food'. Suggestion: Use correct tense for change over time (present perfect), natural collocations, and include necessary articles. Grammar problem type ID:6