Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler sounds (uh), correct grammar (taste → tastes; very crust → has a crispy crust), and give one or two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because/also). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: My favourite food is pizza because it has a crispy crust and a rich, cheesy flavour. For example, I often choose chicken pizza because the toppings are savoury and satisfying. I enjoy eating it with friends on weekends.

提案: Use past tense for childhood (preferred), remove fillers, and be specific about why you liked it. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concrete supporting details and a linking word (for example/also) to make it coherent.

例: When I was young, I preferred eating noodles because they were easy to share and fun to eat with my cousins. For example, we often added chicken and sausage to make the dish more filling, and the warm broth felt comforting after playing outside.

提案: Answer directly and give one clear example. Use linking words (for example, during) and correct phrasing (we celebrate New Year in January; we eat traditional foods such as...). Be specific about the foods and their significance. Keep sentences short and grammatical.

例: Yes, we eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, during our January New Year celebration we eat milk rice, cookies, and traditional Sri Lankan dishes. These foods are served to family and guests as part of the festivities.

提案: Be concise and use correct tenses: past for childhood and present for now. Remove repetitions and fillers. Provide one reason for the change and link ideas with because/so. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I used to prefer milk rice, but now I mostly eat pizza because I enjoy its flavours and it is convenient when I go out with friends.

× My favorite food is pizza because, uh, it's very, it's taste very cheesy and very crust when I'm eating it.

✓ My favorite food is pizza because it tastes very cheesy and has a very crunchy crust when I eat it.

Errors: incorrect verb form and adjective usage. 'It's taste' is wrong because the verb after 'it' should be 'tastes' (third person singular present) not a noun 'taste'; this is a Third person singular issue (ID 2) and also adjective/adverb misuse (ID 13). 'Very crust' is ungrammatical; use a noun phrase 'a very crunchy crust'. Use simple present 'eat' for habitual action. Suggestion: use 'tastes' for sensations and pair adjectives correctly with nouns (e.g., 'crunchy crust').

× And I like to eat the chicken pizza because it's filmy, good and good taste.

✓ I like to eat chicken pizza because it is flavorful and tastes good.

Errors: 'filmy' is incorrect word choice and 'good taste' is awkward. Use adjective 'flavorful' or 'tasty' and the verb 'tastes' for sensory judgment. This is Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs (ID 13) and Third person singular issue (ID 2) for 'it's taste'. Suggestion: choose appropriate adjectives and use 'tastes' for flavor descriptions.

× Yes, when I was young, I prefer to eat always noodles in my childhood dish because it's uh, very funny to eat and playing with my cousins or like that.

✓ When I was young, I always preferred to eat noodles because it was fun to eat and play with my cousins.

Errors: tense mismatch and word order. 'When I was young' requires past tense 'preferred' not present 'prefer' (Past tense issue ID 5). 'Prefer to eat always noodles' has incorrect adverb placement; place 'always' before the verb. 'Very funny' is awkward for enjoying; use 'fun'. Use parallel verbs 'to eat and play' or 'eat and play' with correct past tense. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and correct word order for adverbs.

× So it's very taste with chicken, with chicken and sausage, uh, and very satisfied.

✓ It tasted very good with chicken and sausage, and I felt very satisfied.

Errors: 'it's very taste' is ungrammatical—use 'tasted' for past sensory description (Past tense issue ID 5) and 'very satisfied' needs a verb 'felt'. Also repetition 'with chicken, with chicken' is redundant. Suggestion: use correct verb forms for sensations and include verbs for states (felt satisfied).

× Just definitely we eat different foods in our every month in our festivals.

✓ We definitely eat different foods every month during our festivals.

Errors: word order and extra words. 'In our every month' is incorrect; use 'every month' and place time expressions after subject-verb. 'In our festivals' should be 'during our festivals'. This is a Sentence structure error (ID 26) and Incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11). Suggestion: simplify to 'We definitely eat different foods every month during our festivals.'

× So for example, in January we celebrate our new year.

✓ For example, in January we celebrate the New Year.

Errors: article and capitalization. 'New Year' as a specific holiday takes the definite article 'the' (Article errors ID 22/17). Suggestion: use 'the New Year' to refer to the holiday.

× So because we eat milk, rice and cookies and like our Singhali's foods, that's.

✓ We eat milk rice and cookies and traditional Sinhala foods.

Errors: pronoun and possessive misuse and unclear phrasing. 'Our Singhali's foods, that's' is ungrammatical; 'Sinhala' is the adjective for the culture and 'traditional Sinhala foods' is clearer. Also 'milk, rice' should be combined as 'milk rice' if referring to a dish. This is Incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and Sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggestion: use correct cultural adjective and remove stray pronoun 'that's.'

× Yes, definitely, uh, in my childhood, in when I was a child, I would prefer to eat always milk rice because now it has changed because today I am going to eat all the time pizza because it's very tasty and it, it could be it, it.

✓ When I was a child, I always preferred to eat milk rice, but now I eat pizza all the time because it is very tasty.

Errors: tense inconsistency and awkward modal usage. 'I would prefer to eat always' mixes conditional/modal 'would' with habitual past; use simple past 'always preferred' (Past tense issue ID 5). 'Because now it has changed because today I am going to eat all the time pizza' is repetitive and incorrect; use 'but now I eat pizza all the time.' Remove extraneous fragments 'it, it could be it, it.' This is also Sentence structure error (ID 26). Suggestion: use consistent tense when contrasting past and present and eliminate filler words.