Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答自然，不过存在重复、犹豫词和部分语法不准确。应更直接开门见山给出主题句，减少“uh”“actually”等填充词；用一到两句具体原因或频率支撑，最多保持3–4句。注意时态和冠词（a Big Mac, the fries → fries）以及词汇多样性。

例: My favourite food is Western fast food, especially burgers and fries from KFC and McDonald's. I like a Big Mac because the beef patty and special sauce are flavorful, and the fries are crispy and salty. I only eat them occasionally as a treat because they are not very healthy.

提案: 回答含糊、有大量犹豫词和语法错误（时态、主谓一致、词汇使用不当），还有一句话意义不明（"very untrained"）。建议用过去时叙述童年偏好，删去多余填充词，提供一两个具体理由并举简单例子或回忆，句子不超过4句。

例: When I was young I enjoyed fast food, especially fries and burgers. The fries tasted crispy and salty, which made them irresistible to me as a child. I remember going to McDonald's after school with my friends because it was convenient and fun.

提案: 回答内容充实且有文化背景，但有些语法问题和重复（'actually','I think'不必要），以及一些小错误（each→eat?；Peaches不需大写；considered→are considered）。建议更简洁地陈述观点并使用连接词增强逻辑。

例: Yes. In China people traditionally try to eat seasonal food because it tastes better and is healthier. For example, we eat watermelon and peaches in summer and root vegetables like carrots and turnips in winter. This habit helps us enjoy fresher produce and adapt to the seasons.

提案: 回答清楚但有重复（"was was"）、填充词和少量语法错误（more oftenly→more often；veggies口语化可接受，但正式场合用 vegetables/salads）。建议直接说变化原因，给出具体例子及频率，句子保持简洁连贯。

例: Yes, my tastes have changed. As a child I loved fast food, but now I prefer healthier options. For example, I eat salads and steamed vegetables several times a week because I want to stay fit and have more energy.

× When I was a teenager, I also like fast food, uh, because it's a bit of guilty pleasure.

✓ When I was a teenager, I also liked fast food, because it was a bit of a guilty pleasure.

该句谈及过去发生的喜好，应使用过去时。原句中主句和表原因的从句使用现在时（like, is）不符合时态一致性。建议将动词改为过去式（liked, was），并在“guilty pleasure”前加不定冠词 a。

× The fries was crispy and savory and it's very convenient and, uh, actually, uh, back in the 19 twen 1990s, they were very untrained.

✓ The fries were crispy and savory, and it was very convenient; actually, back in the 1990s, they were very untrained.

“fries”为复数，需用复数动词“were”。句中“it’s very convenient”指代快餐这一类事物，应为单数“it was”。“19 twen 1990s”应改为“1990s”。“untrained”用法不当，若指服务或业态不成熟可改为“undeveloped”或“less standardized”。此处先修正数的一致性和时态。

× Yes, actually in China there is a traditional idea proposed by Confucius I think, which is people should each eat seasonal food rather than out of season produce.

✓ Yes, actually in China there is a traditional idea, I think proposed by Confucius, which is that people should eat seasonal food rather than out-of-season produce.

需在“which is”后加从句引导词“that”。“each eat”不自然，去掉“each”。“out of season”作复合形容词修饰名词时用连字符“out-of-season”。另外插入语位置调整使句子更流畅。

× For example, eat more watermelon and Peaches in summer and root vegetables in winter because seasonal foods taste better and considered healthier.

✓ For example, eat more watermelon and peaches in summer and root vegetables in winter because seasonal foods taste better and are considered healthier.

句子缺少be动词导致“considered healthier”结构不完整，应加“are considered”。“Peaches”不应大写。保持时态一致，说明普遍真理用一般现在时，因此动词保持为现在时。

× Yes, actually my favorite food gradually changed.

✓ Yes, actually my favorite food gradually changed.

原句语法上没有错误，但与下一句衔接更自然的表达可以使用“has gradually changed”来强调从过去到现在的变化。如果坚持简单过去时表示变化发生在过去则保留不变。此处不严格必改，保留原句。

× When I was a child, my favorite food was was fast food.

✓ When I was a child, my favorite food was fast food.

原句中有重复的“was was”，属于写作/说话时的口误，应删除多余一个“was”。保持过去时叙述过去事实。

× But nowadays I prefer to eat healthier.

✓ But nowadays I prefer to eat more healthily.

“healthier”是比较级形容词，通常修饰名词；这里要修饰动词“eat”，应使用副词形式“more healthily”或“eat healthier”在口语中可接受但正式语境用“more healthily”。给出更规范建议。

× For example, I eat uh, salad and uh, uh, vegetables more oftenly.

✓ For example, I eat salad and vegetables more often.

“oftenly”不是正确词形，正确副词为“often”。去掉多余填充词“uh”。此外“salad”前通常不加冠词或可说“salads”取决含义，这里保留不可数用法。

× I like veggies in my food.

✓ I like vegetables in my food.

“veggies”为口语俚语，写作/正式场合建议使用完整名词“vegetables”。代词并无错误，但词汇层级建议改进以符合正式表达。