Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and unfinished fragments, and give 1–2 supporting reasons with linking words. Also correct grammar (e.g., "My favorite food is pizza") and avoid colloquialisms like "so far" if not needed.

例: My favorite food is pizza. I especially like it because it’s quick to make and tastes great, and I often order it when I’m short on time.

提案: Reduce hesitations and be specific. Use a clear topic sentence then add a reason with a linking word. Also use correct names for dishes and avoid repeating filler words like "uh."

例: When I was a child I loved Mongolian traditional dishes, especially khuushuur and buuz, because my grandmother made them often and they remind me of home.

提案: Answer directly and organise with linking words. Begin with a concise response, then give specific examples of seasonal foods if any. Remove fillers and correct repetition.

例: Not really. As a Mongolian I eat many traditional dishes year-round, although in winter I eat more soups and stews, while in summer I prefer lighter meals and some Korean dishes.

提案: Give a clear comparison with linking words and specific examples. Say what you liked before and what you prefer now, and explain briefly why. Reduce hesitations and correct grammar ("when I was a child" not "was child").

例: Yes, it has changed. When I was a child I used to eat a lot of roasted meat and traditional snacks, but now I prefer healthier options like salads and steamed dishes because I want to stay fit.

× My favorite food is fast food so far, especially pizza because it's easier to make and it's. So delicious you're.

✓ My favorite food so far is fast food, especially pizza, because it's easy to make and so delicious.

Sentence structure and word order are incorrect and there are fragmentary parts. 'so far' should follow 'favorite food' for natural order. 'easier' compares to something unspecified; use 'easy' to describe a general quality. 'it's. So delicious you're.' is fragmented and mixes pronouns; combine into one clause: 'because it's easy to make and so delicious.' Suggestions: place adverbial phrases correctly, avoid sentence fragments, and keep clauses complete. Grammar problem type ID:26

× When I was a child, I used to, uh, love, uh, Mongolian traditional foods, especially kosher and boats, uh, because my, uh, grand, uh, mother used it to, uh, cook these foods well.

✓ When I was a child, I used to love Mongolian traditional foods, especially khoresh and buuz, because my grandmother used to cook them well.

Multiple issues: filler words removed for clarity. 'kosher and boats' seems to be misheard; likely 'khoresh and buuz' (Mongolian dishes) — replace with intended dish names. 'grand, mother' should be 'grandmother' (word split). 'used it to cook' is incorrect; correct is 'used to cook' to indicate habitual past action. 'these foods' better replaced with 'them' (pronoun agreement). Suggestions: use 'used to' + base verb for past habitual actions, keep compound words together, and use correct pronouns for plural foods. Grammar problem type ID:5

× MMM not really I I am Asian I'm from Mongolia so I always eat my traditional foods and also I eat umm the soup dishes and also I eat kore Korean food.

✓ Not really. I am Asian; I'm from Mongolia, so I always eat my traditional foods. I also eat soup dishes and Korean food.

Run-on sentence with fillers and punctuation missing. 'the soup dishes' is awkward; use 'soup dishes' without 'the' for general reference (article error, ID 22/17). 'kore Korean food' has repetition and typo; correct to 'Korean food'. Suggestions: remove fillers, use punctuation to separate ideas, and avoid unnecessary definite articles when speaking generally. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Yes, I my, uh, favorite food has changed a lot, uh, since I was child, uh, when I was child I uh, tend tended to eat more roasted meat or and some kosher. Now I prefer eating healthy foods.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed a lot since I was a child. When I was a child, I tended to eat more roasted meat and some khoresh. Now I prefer eating healthy foods.

Multiple issues: remove filler words. 'since I was child' needs the article 'a' before 'child' (article error). 'tend tended' is confused; use past habitual 'tended' for past preference (past tense issue). 'or and' is redundant; choose 'and'. 'kosher' likely misheard; use intended dish name 'khoresh' or another appropriate term. Suggestions: include correct articles before singular nouns, use past tense 'tended' for past habits, and avoid redundant conjunctions. Grammar problem type ID:5