Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organise your answer: start with a clear topic sentence naming the favourite food, then give 1–2 specific details (ingredients, why you like it, and where it’s popular). Avoid filler words and repetitions. Use linking words like “because” or “and” to connect ideas.

例: My favourite food is a traditional Punjabi dish made with maize bread and a green leafy vegetable curry. I like it because the curry is spicy and rich in flavor, and the maize bread soaks up the sauce nicely, which makes it very satisfying. It’s very popular in Punjab and brings back family memories.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence and add one or two specific examples and a short reason. Use past tense consistently and a linking word such as “for example” or “because.” Avoid vague words like “savory” without examples.

例: When I was young, I mainly liked both savory and sweet foods. For example, I often ate fried snacks like samosas for savory treats and chocolate bars for sweets because they were easy to buy and tasted good.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, then contrast seasons with specific examples and reasons using linking phrases such as “in contrast” or “because.” Complete your final sentence and avoid trailing off. Use plural/singular agreement and correct articles.

例: Yes, my food preferences change with the seasons. In winter I prefer warm, hearty dishes like maize bread with a spiced green leafy curry because they keep me warm. In contrast, during summer I usually eat light salads and chilled yogurt because they are refreshing.

提案: Answer directly and use comparative language to show change. Provide specific examples of past vs present choices and a reason for the change. Use correct word forms (e.g., “preferred”, “unhealthy”, “balanced diet”) and avoid listing vague items.

例: Yes, my eating habits have changed. As a child I preferred unhealthy foods such as chocolate, fried snacks and white rice. Now I choose healthier options like salads, whole grains and a balanced diet because I’m more conscious about my health.

× To be honest, I love traditional food such as maize bread and leaf green vegetable Curry, which is a one of the most delicious as a as well as, uh, deletion food in my country and in the Punjab it is very famous.

✓ To be honest, I love traditional foods such as maize bread and green leafy vegetable curry, which are some of the most delicious and well-known dishes in my country; in Punjab they are very famous.

Errors: article use ('a one of the' should be 'one of the' and plural agreement), word order ('leaf green' should be 'green leafy'), capitalization (curry should be lowercase), word choice/confusion ('deletion' is incorrect; intended 'delicious' or 'traditional'), punctuation and sentence structure (run-on sentence). Suggestions: Use 'foods' or 'dishes' for plural, use 'one of the most' without an extra 'a', place adjectives in correct order (opinion then color/quality), use consistent capitalization, and split or join clauses with appropriate punctuation. Ensure subject-verb agreement with plural noun 'foods/dishes' and plural verb 'are'.

× I remember when I was a kid I mostly like savory as well as a sweet food like chocolate.

✓ I remember that when I was a kid I mostly liked savory and sweet foods like chocolate.

Errors: tense and agreement ('like' should be past 'liked' to match 'I was a kid'), article and countability ('a sweet food' → 'sweet foods'), conjunction usage ('as well as' is awkward here; use 'and'). Suggestions: Keep past tense for past memories, use plural 'foods' when listing types, and use simple conjunctions for clarity.

× Of course, yes, the food preference change according to the period of time.

✓ Of course, yes, food preferences change according to the time of year.

Errors: subject-verb agreement ('preference change' → 'preferences change'), word choice ('period of time' awkward → 'time of year'), article unnecessary ('the' before general 'food preferences'). Suggestions: Match plural subject with plural verb, use natural collocations like 'time of year' and omit unnecessary articles when speaking generally.

× In winter I like to maize bread and green leafy Curry.

✓ In winter I like maize bread and green leafy curry.

Errors: extra 'to' is incorrect ('like to maize bread'), article/capitalization ('Curry' should be lowercase), word order already corrected to 'green leafy'. Suggestions: Use 'like' + noun (no 'to'), keep adjectives before noun in right order, and use correct capitalization.

× On the other hand, in summer I mostly like salad and.

✓ On the other hand, in summer I mostly like salads and fresh fruits.

Errors: sentence incomplete ('and.' with nothing after), number ('salad' → 'salads' for general preference). Suggestions: Complete the list after 'and' or remove 'and', and use plural for general likes.

× Of course yes, in my childhood time I mostly prefer to unhealthy food like chocolate, savoury, rye, rice and many other thing.

✓ Yes, of course; in my childhood I mostly preferred unhealthy foods like chocolate, savory snacks, rye, rice and many other things.

Errors: tense ('prefer' should be past 'preferred' to match 'childhood'), incorrect infinitive ('prefer to unhealthy' → 'preferred unhealthy'), pluralization ('thing' → 'things'), word choice ('savoury' vague → 'savory snacks'), unneeded 'time' after 'childhood'. Suggestions: Use past tense for past habits, use correct collocations ('prefer unhealthy food' without 'to'), pluralize items when listing, and remove redundant words.

× But nowadays I prefer to healthy things like salad, balance, diet and many more.

✓ But nowadays I prefer healthy things like salads, a balanced diet, and so on.

Errors: incorrect infinitive ('prefer to healthy' → 'prefer healthy'), plural and noun choices ('salad' → 'salads'; 'balance, diet' unclear; should be 'a balanced diet'), phrasing ('many more' → 'and so on'). Suggestions: Use 'prefer' + noun phrase without 'to', choose clear collocations ('a balanced diet'), pluralize where appropriate, and use natural phrases for 'etc.'