Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar and use clear linking. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct article use and verb forms, and provide one specific reason. For example, replace “a noodles” with “noodles” and combine ideas: say you eat sesame chicken noodles in the evening because of taste and convenience.

例: My favourite food is sesame chicken noodles. I usually eat them in the evening because they are comforting and quick to prepare, and I enjoy the combination of savory sauce and sesame flavor.

提案: Use correct past tense and more specific supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then give examples and reason with a linking word. Avoid unnecessary negatives that confuse meaning.

例: When I was young, I mostly ate sweets such as chocolates, donuts and muffins because I had a sweet tooth. As a result, I avoided salty snacks and preferred desserts.

提案: Give a complete, coherent answer with clear contrast and specific examples. Use linking words (in winter, in summer) and avoid filler and repetition. Complete the summer part (e.g., lighter meals, salads, cold fruits) and correct phrasing (“hot food” not “hot hot”).

例: Yes, I eat different foods with the seasons. In winter I prefer hot meals like stews with chicken or fish and nuts for extra energy, while in summer I eat lighter dishes such as salads, cold noodles and fresh fruit.

提案: Use simpler correct structures and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence about change, then explain why with specific details and linking words. Correct tense and phrasing (e.g., “has changed,” “I now eat healthier foods such as…”).

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. I now choose healthier options like grilled chicken, fish and wholegrain products because I want to stay fit, whereas as a child I preferred chocolates and other sweets.

× Well, I am a foodie person, I like every type of food, but usually I often eat a noodles with sesame chicken 'cause I love to eat them in the evening time.

✓ Well, I am a foodie; I like every type of food, but I usually eat noodles with sesame chicken because I love to eat it in the evening.

Multiple issues: redundant adverbs 'usually' and 'often' should not both be used; 'a noodles' is wrong because 'noodles' is plural and does not take 'a'; 'them' refers to food but singular 'sesame chicken' should be referred to as 'it'; use 'because' instead of informal ' 'cause'; omit 'time' after 'evening'. Suggestion: choose one frequency adverb, use correct article/number for nouns, match pronoun number to noun, and prefer standard conjunctions. (Grammar problem type ID:13)

× Well when I was young I mostly eat sweets such as chocolates, Donuts, muffins but I don't usually like to eat salty things as I was much more interested in eating sweet food.

✓ Well, when I was young I mostly ate sweets such as chocolates, donuts, and muffins, but I didn't usually like to eat salty things because I was much more interested in sweet foods.

Tense consistency: describing past habits requires past tense 'ate' not 'eat'; negative habit in past should be 'didn't usually like'; 'as' used for reason is informal and can be 'because'; capitalize 'Donuts' incorrectly — use lowercase; 'sweet food' better pluralized as 'sweet foods' or 'sweets'. Suggestion: maintain past tense for all verbs when discussing past habits and keep parallel lists consistent. (Grammar problem type ID:5)

× Well it depends on my preference. In the winter time I mostly eat hot hot food such as chicken, fish with walnuts or maybe almonds. But in the in the in the summers I usually eat just.

✓ Well, it depends on my preference. In the winter I mostly eat hot foods such as chicken or fish with walnuts or maybe almonds. But in the summer I usually eat lighter meals.

Article and number: use 'the winter' or simply 'winter'; 'hot hot' is redundant — use 'hot' or 'hot foods'; 'chicken, fish with walnuts' needed clearer grouping and plural 'foods' fits better; 'the summers' should be 'the summer' or 'summer'; sentence ended incomplete 'I usually eat just' needs completion — 'lighter meals' fits context. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use correct singular/plural and complete the sentence meaningfully. (Grammar problem type ID:22)

× Yes, definitely my favorite food is changed now as compared to when I was young 'cause I mostly eat now healthy food such as chicken, fish, dietary products and which are healthy for me.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has definitely changed since I was young because I mostly eat healthy foods now, such as chicken, fish, and other nutritious products.

Use present perfect 'has changed' to describe a change from past to present; 'is changed now' is incorrect. Word order: place 'now' after the verb phrase. 'Dietary products and which are healthy for me' is ungrammatical — use 'and other nutritious products' or restructure. Suggestion: use present perfect for life changes, keep clear noun phrases and avoid unnecessary relative pronouns. (Grammar problem type ID:6)

× But in the in my childhood I mostly eat chocolates that was not healthy for my health.

✓ But in my childhood I mostly ate chocolates, which were not healthy for my health.

'in the in my childhood' has extra words; use past tense 'ate' for past habit; relative clause should be 'which were' to agree with plural 'chocolates'; 'not healthy for my health' is redundant — 'not healthy' suffices. Suggestion: remove repetitions, ensure verb tense matches timeframe, and make subject-verb agreement in relative clauses. (Grammar problem type ID:5)